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11/6/20, 12:33 AM
The Tyler-Prof confrontation scene was very well done. It set up the take down of Tyler beautifully. And the foreshading of what is to be using Mac was hot
11/5/20, 7:32 PM
Greg Sanders, like, from CSI?
Mesmerdude
11/5/20, 7:21 PM
This was really good, extremely hot concept, fun execution, although feels it cut off right as it was building up. Would absolutely love to read more!
Reb
11/5/20, 6:36 PM
Great story, good detail, hot subject, very well written. Read it all in one go, edging all the time. Look forward to more. (The author is also hot!)
11/5/20, 4:04 PM
Wow. This chapter was fantastic! Thank you for the content warning, too--it was not just a good way to steel myself against it, but a reminder of the kind of events in these stories and how scary they can be. It looks like my mystery answer was wrong, though...although I see another "And Then There Were None" parallel. "One choked his little self and then there were nine ('Gagged,' oral sex); one overslept himself and then there were eight ('Slumbered,' fell asleep and got transformed)." If we're going in order, then we have: "One got left behind," "One chopped himself in halves," "A bumblebee stung one," "One got in Chancery," "A red herring swallowed one," "A big bear hugged one," "One got all frizzled up," "He went and hanged himself..." I wonder how the transformations will happen! You're an amazing author. :)
11/5/20, 3:28 PM
Otra historia en español!!!!! ahhhhh!!!! >.< sigue escribiendo, me encanta ver mas autores en español :3 solo te diria como consejo que le des otra revisada al texto, habia algunls errores de dedo en varias partes, pero en general todo muy bien ^ ^ me dejaste con la.idea de q iria contra el dueño XD pero supongo q tiene sentido que primero vaya por lo quebesta a su alcance 😅 ya quiero leer mas y ver si el efecto fue permanente o no... o como reaccionara si el efecto se va... digo creo q nunca le dijo que estuviera desacuerdo o que lw gustara lo que ocurrio entre ellos XD esperare ansiosamente la.siguiente parte :3
Anonymous
11/5/20, 1:36 PM
Your writing style is absolutely incredible. You create such amazing visuals with your words!
11/5/20, 11:35 AM
The story is okay, but it isn't in the 2nd person - it's in the first person to begin with ['I'] and then switches to the third person ['he, she. it']. Second person is 'you' - example: You walk slowly towards me.
11/5/20, 6:59 AM
i wrote a long comment and lost it!!! Suffice it to say for now that I love this story and am looking forward to reading more of this story and more from this author. Thanks for you great imagination, writing ability, and willingness to share it with the rest of us.
11/5/20, 6:11 AM
OMG! After reading this chapter, i have such a hard on, and want to do exactly like Richard and the all the other stupid boys who asked to experience total mind control... and now more than ever a rubber gimp suit as well. i've always thought wanting to be a gimp was completely crazy, and i still think so. Yet more than ever i would love to at least experience that level of mind control! Coming back to my comments on how the *process* of seduction, induction and loss of control makes a story more arousing for me. Yeah, that! i still think so, but that said your story is still so so hot. i surrender to your imagination! Please just continue to take me wherever you like. You are the Master Storyteller. Please just write more! And thanks so much for your imagination, writing ability, and willingness to share it. ~david
Anonymous
11/5/20, 5:47 AM
I live to serve the virus
11/5/20, 4:44 AM
Just read this chapter again. Still found it very hot, and relate really closely to both characters. That said, i understand Nocturne's comment, and agree that with that additional detail this chapter could have been even more arousing. While as i had said, i like more detail about the techniques for induction, but perhaps what is even more exciting is the slow process of seduction and control. Again as Nocturne suggested (i still haven't read the second chapter), you can still (and now have hopefully) included more back and forth in this psychological duel in the next chapter. The other really important element for me is character development. By including more detail about Richard up front we would have been more committed to him during the seduction, and more in touch with his psyche as he realized his predicament. All that said, i am truly loving this story! It relates so closely with my own strong fetish for hypnosis, mind control, and surrender to a stronger Man. Without further ado, i am moving with great excitement onto the next chapter!! Thanks so much for this one!!
11/5/20, 4:14 AM
Great start. Can't wait to see Tyler taken down nice and slowly while he is dumbfounded and furious... but ohhh sooo helpless.
Anonymous
11/5/20, 3:59 AM
excellent
11/5/20, 3:57 AM
I hate the fact that I'm jealous of these people.
11/5/20, 3:47 AM
Damn that was hot. You did it again.
11/5/20, 3:42 AM
The rules have changed. The idea of a predetermined order gets overtaken by demonic beasts. hmmmmm...
11/5/20, 3:24 AM
Thank you everyone!! I appreciate the kind words! I have thought about another chapter, but we shall see! Thanks for reading :)
11/5/20, 2:47 AM
Pues en lo personal me hubiera gustado que Erick fuera el activo pero no importa. Estara bueno ver como poco a poco va obteniendo seguidores hasta que vaya por el jefaso~ Siempre es lindo leer historias en tu idioma :P
11/5/20, 1:34 AM
You really do have a way with ditz dialogue--love to see it.
11/4/20, 11:32 PM
Wow this was awesome! Pretty short and fun, I like it so much. Can't wait to see if theres gonna be more in the future!
11/4/20, 9:42 PM
I've been making a habit of responding to the individual comments, but this time around I'll just say thanks guys! It seems like everyone kept pretty generic with their comments, probably to keep from spoiling the plot for others. Thanks for reading!
11/4/20, 9:36 PM
> Watching his transformation from would-be world conquerer to conflicted anti-villain to full-fledged hero was very fun to watch. > One of the things I enjoyed about writing this story was creating a universe, destroying it, and then recreating as like this "perfect vision of a gay future" Hmmmm.... I seem to make a habit out of doing this.
Cracker
11/4/20, 9:20 PM
loved it. It might be fun to have a part two where the psychic helps trap his superhero for the guy. :-)
11/4/20, 8:59 PM
The transformation was sexy. I am a bit confused on the mental nature of what is going on. What I mean is whether say Asher is sort of a big subby guy for the gay men he protects or if he is dominant. But anyway this is cool..
11/4/20, 8:57 PM
So I kind of hope Theodore uses his social 'magics' to make straight guys into good subby gay boys. hehe This is an interesting story.
11/4/20, 8:07 PM
can we see the cowboy and the werewolf next?