If you feel like continuing this, it would be great. Really good. The male pregnancy twist is very hot.
Excellent!
What an incredible series so far. You’re a talented writer! Loooove pheromones and musk, so the parts about his balls and pits had me swooning. What iI wouldn’t give… 🤤🤤🤤
You right sex so well! But I’m confused at the scant comeuppance who was the woman he saw in the first part? Was she punishing him for being such a douche? Because he really seems to be enjoying his punishment. The mpreg plot is interesting not much of that on here
I dare you to not see or hear the words “I dare you” any more! :)
given your Author name, I imagined the whole thing taking place at JR’s on 17th Street NW. Goodness knows I’ve been sloppy there at Showtunes after a bad date.
Sigh… haven’t we all?
The fun of this “jumping off” place is that the mechanism for transformation is introduced in a fun narrative. This kind of exposition can be exhausting in a story and here, @rockcreekwerewolf gives us humor and ease. In the end, the warlocks don’t matter other than they created the magic elixir that the Barkeep is doling out quick!
Can’t wait to read the stories of the people who get the drinks.
Good job, my friend!
excellent
Slime, eh? Can’t wait to see where this goes!
It’s a great ending, but honestly, that Key end up on top was the predictable end. Given my experience on this site, it would have been more surprising that Eddy or especially Brad end as masters. Would have blow my mind away.
Thanks, Hypnothrill, for the observations. I can see where you’re coming from. I decided not to go that way, feeling I’d get too involved in the weeds, as it were, at the expense of the story.
@Horn Thank you so much! I really appreciate this comment :D
@Anonymous Thank you! I will have to keep that in mind. We’ll see.
This is a nice start! Albeit, you might want someone to proof-read.
Wow. So hot! Loving this story so much…
great story! love all the inductions and enslavements. thank you for writing and sharing
Loved the unique premise and the descriptions of the pinball machine itself! Just wish that we could have seen Porter and Tyler’s hookup in greater detail and gotten a clearer sense of Porter’s mental transformation into a mega-hung himbo.
Great premise! I’m quite excited to see what you have in mind! …. and given your Author name, I imagined the whole thing taking place at JR’s on 17th Street NW. Goodness knows I’ve been sloppy there at Showtunes after a bad date.
really good zombie horror. 10/10
love it! you’re ideas are great and excellent writing! not only a hot concept, but the story itself is well written
such a tease!!! can’t wait to see what happens
I love this kind of story. I just wish it had gone a little more slowly. Also, from the story itself, I would have never known that it was a contagious disease turning the men into sex-crazed zombies. Maybe include some more scenes where we see how the disease is transmitted?
Oh man. Can’t wait!
I love this!!! Hope you do a puppy/animal play episode!!
Great premise, and I love the pictures. However, I wonder if it’s trying to compress too much time into a single 5000-word chapter. We get these massive time jumps, and after each one, the narrator speaks in general terms about what’s been happening to him. So the story feels less immediate than it might otherwise. Also, although the narrator tells us repeatedly that he’s a devout Christian, we don’t see that playing out very much in his interaction with the natives or in his struggles with his mental transformation. Just a matter of personal taste, but for me the story would have worked better if we saw the narrator being very judgmental and preachy before his abduction.
Eeeee, what fun! I can’t wait to see what kind of magical mayhem happens in the bar. You do a great job painting the scene, too–I love the use of color, and rainbow magic especially. Great story! :)
A wonderful transfortmation!
I probably won’t do physical changes in this story. It kinda breaks the rules that Naked Ginger set up when he started this. You can’t dare someone to do something flat out impossible. If I go back and rewrite Grand Theft Penis (as I plan, at some point), I may touch on that. I hope you continue to enjoy though
hi everyone. I’m glad most of you seem to enjoy the story. I just wanted to be clear that this is a quick standalone story but I might make more stories in the future.
