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3/21/21, 6:10 AM
can't wait for the next one
3/21/21, 5:14 AM
He's already so close, it's hot to anticipate what he's got coming, can't wait for him to give in.
3/21/21, 4:25 AM
like it especaly the feet and sock park would love have skin feet sock and boot heavy second part. best some banker or snooty collage kid getting into tough and musky roughneck skin
3/21/21, 4:23 AM
I feel like this one leaves me wanting more- what is the real truth of Spike, who is this man? Definitely a hot interaction and story though. The resistance and slow stripping away of that under the assumed hypnosis is pretty exciting actually.
3/21/21, 4:22 AM
Definitely feels like a good start to a story verse. Ethan and James seem like great characters and the writing was good- hot, paced well, and did a great job of making the obliviousness part of the draw.
3/21/21, 4:21 AM
Great story and loved the immersive element of the video file. Really hot and enjoyable, loving your stories so far!
3/21/21, 2:11 AM
Brilliant! Well done, and I join the chorus begging for more!
nyan
3/21/21, 1:16 AM
update please
3/21/21, 1:15 AM
Really hot. I'm liking the way its going so far as it seems realistic for the motivations. Only thing I would really like was of it expands outside if the family to include more cops. Would be great if Erik offered up his partner to take his place. Seems like the kinda scumbag move he would make or it could be part of breaking him down since his thing is the uniform. Cant imagine his partner would be a great guy if he sticks with Erik.
3/20/21, 10:58 PM
i just wish it was longer and more developed before others add their voice to your superior narrative.
3/20/21, 10:37 PM
I'm really digging this. I love gradual changes like this, and the more emphasis on man musk the better.
Anonymous
3/20/21, 10:08 PM
I loved this. Please keep going! I'm exited for the next one.
EJG
3/20/21, 9:35 PM
This is not fair,leaving us to our imaginations
EJG
3/20/21, 9:32 PM
Oh well. I can only dwell the future in my fantasies
3/20/21, 9:29 PM
I'm excited for this -- bring it on! Mmmm... blue balls.
3/20/21, 9:22 PM
Great ideas in this beginning chapter! I look forward to where you take this story.
3/20/21, 7:19 PM
Fuck, this was hot. I'm so not into foot stuff, but I genuinely came while I was reading the interaction between Vincent and Erik. You're so good that you're making me like stuff I don't like! And the moment where Erik admitted that he regretted nothing, and so neither would Vincent? God, it was amazing. Quality writing once again. I mentioned this before, but it's so cathartic to read as these bastards get what's coming to them. There's so much more that can happen, and I'm genuinely excited to see where it goes. I'm sorry about life being shitty. It happens, but it's never fun. There isn't much I can do, other than compliment you and say that your writing ability continues to improve with every chapter. I'm happy to help you proofread the stories, if you would like. Let me know.
3/20/21, 7:17 PM
Well, the incest element isn't for me--never has been, never will be--but the slow mental change is, as ever, fantastic! And I love the humorous section of Ben trying to pretend to be stupefied as well (his saying "...uh...Daddy" reminds me of my own attempts at sexy talk). :p And hooray, the well is destroyed! Now everything will be perfectly fine and Ben definitely WON'T be reduced to a mindless musclehead. Yes, that is sarcasm. :p Great story, Hypnothrill! :D
3/20/21, 7:12 PM
Good so far and certainly for a first effort. I agree with jitter that have a subject perform while thinking he is doing something different is always far hotter than just turning him into just another cocksucker.
3/20/21, 6:58 PM
great story! I'd love to see what was actually in the bar and how it was doing all that too! thanks so much
Anonymous
3/20/21, 6:42 PM
this is my new favorite story on this site. thank you!
3/20/21, 3:36 PM
Take all the time you need. We don't want writer burnout. For Eli, might I suggest not dumbing him down? Maybe he's the one who partially brake away from his reprogramming.
3/20/21, 3:35 PM
Superb isn't the right word, "fanfreakingtastic" is much much better! You are truly talented and I'm grateful I get to enjoy the fruits of your creative labor. Mars does seem like a good idea sometimes doesn't it? Hopefully the writing process is both cathartic and enjoyable for you so sending good vibes your way. This IS my favorite story on here!
Martin
3/20/21, 12:36 PM
... and to follow up my stupid little complaint: This story is really great and one of the best I've read in a long time! Thank you for a great wank ;)
BPtime
3/20/21, 12:15 PM
Serve us more! In water bottles if need be.
3/20/21, 11:18 AM
I hope there are more chapters as well! It is such a VERY hot story.
3/20/21, 9:55 AM
You'll likely like Part 3 more Thrill in terms of the horror aspect. I dunno if I view this specifically as a horror series, but there will be more horror aspects as the 'seeds' spread. I likely won't do any more flashbacks, because I don't really enjoy them overly much in text--that being said I wanted to show one flashback to demonstrate their brotherly love. If I did one for the other bikers, then well, it'd be a bit much. Ben you'll like part 3 :)
Ben
3/20/21, 9:46 AM
I liked it! You could maybe spend a bit more time on the transformation (part of the challenge of these stories is coming up with new ways to describe being pollinated, the pleasure and intoxication, and so forth), but I'm really looking forward to Part 3 - keep it up! :)
3/20/21, 9:09 AM
the wait is definitely worth it! you are killing it right now,this is one of my favorite series on this site these days. shame that I need to wait for the next chapter now xD I would read that whole thing in one sitting in a heartbeat. I probably will once it's completed keep up the good work,we appreciate it
3/20/21, 8:27 AM
I'm intrigued on how things will develop with Eli, I enjoy when smart characters are the enthralled ones and are not dumbed Down, there is a lot of ways to play with someone who is smart having so many confusing feelings, and It's very intriguing. I also gotta say that I really enjoyed how you described his utter confusion and Jealousy, I think his envy is a very strong defining character trait to explore and what I enjoyed the most is that so far aside from obviously Vincent, Eli is the most fully realized character to me, down to his feelings rather than fully changing just kinda switching his hatred and anger for Vincent into his father and also discovering how much he hates Erik makes me wonder if Vincent might use Eli to torture Erik if he ever were to "reward" Eli for anything, he'd be spiteful enough to get his kicks not only at obeying his baby brother, but also making his older brother suffer as well, middle child syndrome taken to extremes.