Recent Comments

1/3/21, 1:07 AM
Good story. I think the actual act of "programming" Kyle could be a bit tighter, with a more cause and effect relationship between what Shawn suggests and how Kyle changes; there are some instances where it seems like things progress faster than it logically should. Also, there are a couple instances where you reverse their names, and it does make it confusing to read.
1/3/21, 1:01 AM
So I should take it that you are the original author of *All Hail the Emperor* and you're reposting the story for any and everyone to add to the story. I've enjoyed this story and its sequel many a day. I actually have my own take on part 2, so should I post that here?
1/3/21, 12:30 AM
okay, good to know that the women situation will hopefully improve, but I think you can tone down how bad they are being treated for now, it makes the reading more easy going
AMS
1/3/21, 12:15 AM
Hi. I thought I'd pop back on and respond to everyone's comments, although I hope I’m not writing too much or spoiling anything. First, I really appreciate the constructive criticism about the role of women in this story. I think it's a very valid criticism and one that I've thought a lot about while writing these past couple chapters. The character of Gemma and her relationship to Aaron was actually the first impetus I had for writing this story. In large part, this whole story is me rehashing my childhood growing up gay in a high demand religious community. I think that upbringing is why I have a mind control fetish and why this story is about religion. So, on the one hand I was curious how women might be treated under this fantastic reality, which is very bad. Secondly, I wanted to explore how someone with as much power as Aaron can do things with unintended consequences even if they have no malice, which is something I’ll explore more in the future. The role of women in the story is not titillating and I didn’t mean it to be titillating. But I don’t know if I’ve done a good job of integrating those non-erotic portions of the story, into the gay erotica people are trying to jack off to. Anyway, I didn’t mean to write an essay. But I appreciate everyone’s comments and I’m glad people are enjoying my writing. I can say that in my planned outline, how women are treated now will not be how women are treated for the rest of the story. But I don’t think I’m going to change my story even if it makes it less hot as erotica. Thanks to all!
May 7, 2020
Anonymous
1/2/21, 11:36 PM
Wow! *Hotter than hot!* And yes, "utterly twisted", "queasily sinister". i also thank you for sharing your depraved mind! i read this coming directly from your story, "Gift Card", and will admit being disappointed in it for the reasons i mentioned in comments there. This story was everything i was hoping for in the last one! Your lead-in with the van ride was a mild indication of what was to come. The moment Travis's rescuer met Travis face-to-face, the suspicion and erotic tension started growing rapidly, but took us nervously step by step through the warehouse with its growing filth, erotic sex, and engulfing heat and stench to astonishment and gnawing fear as i realize that what is happening to our rescuer is beyond anything I might have possibly imagined. As I feel the invasion of each body part, my denial and panic grows to a crescendo. Then panic fades as arousal and infatuation continue to increase along with growing calm excitement and surrender to the supernatural charms of Master Sage -- until his imposed enthralling erotic bliss explodes into unconsciousness! Wow! Great story! I feel like I just got ridden hard and left tethered and wet.
Anonymous
1/2/21, 11:31 PM
is this happening? a story where it finally explores the consequences of a reality wide gay conversion without making the woman gay or ignored entirely? what happens yo women when they arent desired anymore? considering even when thwy are s desired they are treated poorly , i hope everything turns out alright for them in this slice of reality. this has been a curiosity of mine and i hope this story deliver
1/2/21, 11:31 PM
I'm so excited for chapter 4! Keep up the great work!
Anonymous
1/2/21, 11:27 PM
I wonder how long before he fully breaks?
Dec 31, 2020
1/2/21, 11:13 PM
What a joyous and lovely story! I hope we get to see what happens to them next!
Anonymous
1/2/21, 11:09 PM
This was great!!! Please do some hair growth.
1/2/21, 10:54 PM
I'm LOVING this story...seriously one of my faves already. I have faith that you're taking it where you want to go. Don't worry about what anyone says beyond how you want to tell your story. If you already have plans for what happens for the women in this new world, go with it. You're writing this story to fulfill your vision, no one elses. People have told me I've gone too far in many of my stories, but I write for me first and that makes for better storytelling. Merely because others wouldn't go as far as you with certain aspects, does NOT mean it's not a good place to take a story. Challenge them! Don't go off course of your vision merely due to a few differing opinions <3
1/2/21, 10:50 PM
I wonder if twins and Coach Hamilton got caught somewhere in the maze. I would love to hear about that!
Jul 6, 2020
Anonymous
1/2/21, 10:46 PM
The transformation was okay, but for me the story was missing all the details about the hypnosis/mind control process and any sense of Domination or submission. Like Brock the details of a chav look is pretty vague in my mind. Most of the transformation was purely visual or audio (his new accent), so full body photos, including the haircut, before and after the transformation would have added something.
Anonymous
1/2/21, 10:17 PM
Man, I'm anxiously awaiting for a new chapter of this. I check your page everyday. Please update! :)
1/2/21, 8:00 PM
Love it. So fucking weird and intense
Anonymous
1/2/21, 7:57 PM
really good read with a promising plot
1/2/21, 7:40 PM
plus to all that have been said, how about a big higher up man as a bottom? :D
1/2/21, 7:33 PM
Request for vanXmatthew cherry popping seduction vignettes.
1/2/21, 7:22 PM
Good grief, what an amazing end to the series. I mean, this seems like an end to me. Or...a beginning? Though, I have to admit I cackled at the Poe reference.
1/2/21, 7:03 PM
I totally didn’t expect the Poe reference. I started wondering at “For the love of god Ben”, but didn’t really clue in til he started bricking up the wall. I’ve only read the Poe once, but Bradbury’s story “Usher II” also plays with it, and that’s an old favourite. The perverse shit is that Glenn's motivation is so pure. He just wants what's best for his bro. And somehow, I suspect Ben is gonna get it.
1/2/21, 6:35 PM
please control the dad
Dec 26, 2020
1/2/21, 6:33 PM
I really like this one! I'm a sucker for a very hot induction and this one really delivered. You also did it in a very creative way with the customer service and the fleshlight toys. Really, really well done, I can't praise it enough. A++++
Jonanator
1/2/21, 5:51 PM
I really love this story. interesting twist at the end. I hope you do more, please.
1/2/21, 5:41 PM
Thinking of an idea, do they still do amateur stripper nights at the White Swan on the Commercial Road? I'm sure Scottie would work hard to give everyone a convincing performance as the stripping boy-scout. :)
Anonymous
1/2/21, 5:01 PM
it was better . declining .
Anonymous
1/2/21, 4:30 PM
make ian mess with aaron's ass!!
Conversion Enthusiast
1/2/21, 4:28 PM
I really enjoyed reading this. There were a few typos or name mixups here or there I think that made me had to re read a line a few times to understand. I can point them out if you'd like, just lemme know. I love the concept though and am looking forward to more!
1/2/21, 4:15 PM
I've got to agree with the comment above. The story is still very hot, and there's some great world-building going on here. But I feel like there's way too much emphasis on the suffering and degradation of the women, to the point that it's uncomfortable to read.
1/2/21, 3:51 PM
> For the love of God, Montressor > Famous last words... haha (For those of you who don't get this literary reference, read Poe's "Cask of the Amontillado") Secondly -- LOOK WHO LEFT THIS COMMENT!!! Thank you @rubbrsome! So good to see you!!!!!
1/2/21, 3:07 PM
A very wonderful entrancement for the Romans and this reader. The poetic form was so unusual that it drew me right into the trance. Me thinks that I need to chastise my male organs in a chastity device today to begin the new year as a chase man without the ability to cream by seed. Thank you and I hope the tale of this epic poem will continue to entrance more Romans. I am entranced and will return here to reinforce my need for chastity.