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Jun 7, 2020
soft satin
6/7/20, 2:49 PM
Thank you like the previous comment I loved the new take and nice righting too, thanks again. SS
6/7/20, 2:12 PM
That was great! And, although I'm not usually a fan of photos with the stories, these really drove home the changes he was undergoing.
Jun 2, 2020
6/7/20, 1:39 PM
Great Story, well written for the first time. i will be looking out for more from you in time. Thanks mate Malc
6/7/20, 12:31 PM
Good story! I definitely liked the old leather queen as a red herring and the reveal of narrator's buddy as the guy who transformed him.
6/7/20, 12:11 PM
Liking where this is going :)
Jun 7, 2020
6/7/20, 10:11 AM
Very hot! A great take on a classic story trope.
Rubeus
6/7/20, 9:30 AM
Speed Reading fail: At first glance I thought this story was called "A Merman's True Calling". Now there'd be a story twist.
6/7/20, 8:49 AM
I loved this chapter! I liked the moment between Mike and Pine when he willingly let Pine dominate him
6/7/20, 8:48 AM
This is considered a classic in the genre. It's the first piece of fetish fiction I can remember reading. Coming back to it now, fifteen years later, it seems tame. The idea is solid, but the story could use some jazzing up.
Anonymous
6/7/20, 8:32 AM
terrific
Anonymous
6/7/20, 6:59 AM
A little extra editing would do a lot to help this one out. There are some places where the paragraphs get really long, making them hard to read. The points where you change between the narrators aren’t always that easy to identify, which can lead to a muddled narrative
6/7/20, 6:08 AM
Excellent story, Sir. A transformation i always fantasize about for myself...
6/7/20, 5:44 AM
Kind of curious what would happen if the "subject" of the cards realizes what's happening and actively conspires with the cards as they change him.
6/7/20, 5:27 AM
BoSS, another great story.
6/7/20, 4:07 AM
Coach Geoff is a nice guy, less bravado than the other football coaches; interested in seeing how Pine has him helping to save the sports club. It's interesting to see Pine get more advice from his inner version of himself, especially how to take down Leo should it come to that. Pine's darker side is revealed but even it seems to agree with Pine's code.
6/7/20, 3:42 AM
@ChronoSeth, I mean this is an erotic site, so of course its main focus is to arouse people, which tends to be sex stuff. Its like going to a porn site and expecting to find a cinematic masterpiece. Well, I for one, find this series really enjoyable. I just picked up on this series recently so I'm trying to catch up. I wish I read this a lot sooner because it is hot as fuck. I actually like Pine better with Garrett instead of Mike. Gary and him have way more fun than Mike does. You are a god author, keep up the good work!
Anonymous
6/7/20, 3:12 AM
I'm so glad to see you made another part! Hope to see even more from you in the future!
Anonymous
6/7/20, 3:01 AM
Loved it!!!
Anonymous
6/7/20, 3:00 AM
Great story!!! Loved it!!!
Jun 6, 2020
6/7/20, 2:55 AM
Damn this was such a hot chapter. Theres so much to love here. Your staple chloroform knockout scenes are always top notch and never disappoints. That particular scene where he knocks Josh up whole so sucking him was hot, its probably my favorite part of the story. The whole edging thing and having no permission to cum is also up my alley. I love mind controlled guys who don't have the freedom to shoot whenever they want, its such a turn on for me. I also love Jacob and Marco together, they make a very sweet couple Please continue to write more stories, I really love your work!
6/7/20, 2:51 AM
Something you alluded to in the middle of the story with just a simple sentence...I would be interested to see if The Machine was building up slaves loyal to it and only obedient to their masters on the surface. But then again, I'm a robot dude so of course I would love to see these subjects being made to be robotic unaware until it's too late and then embrace the robot.
6/7/20, 2:33 AM
I I cannot wait to read your next chapter although how you ended this one would seem to me a fitting ending
6/7/20, 1:04 AM
O, thats easy. Get fluid Silicon-Rubber with "Addition" Synthesis, not "Kondensing" Synthesis. Painting on our Body, it will fuse with Skin for longer.
6/7/20, 12:18 AM
I hope they can be a couple maybe even an 'out' couple but I worry about Dave being a jerk.
hotjgh@hotmail.com
6/6/20, 9:31 PM
Great story, glad to see you are writing again
6/6/20, 8:58 PM
yes,finally daddy got fucked
slave4kink
6/6/20, 8:11 PM
I like Kieran in control.. He should get annoyed with Troy & Chad's concerns & make them forget all about that. Let his dark fantasies run wild. The whole apartment building could cater to kink & fetish people - They make the best neighbors-lol.
6/6/20, 7:21 PM
@MuscleSon69 Thanks for all your comments on this chapter and on the others! I'm definitely planning on more -- what kinds of things would you like to see happen next?
Anonymous
6/6/20, 7:14 PM
I wonder if it's possible to modify all the personal records using the access that police have. Would be fun if both officers have their names officially changed for good, along with some funny changes on their personal stories.
MuscleSon69
6/6/20, 5:31 PM
So hot and exciting! Wish I was there in the store for a great deal like that!