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11/14/20, 10:50 PM
This chapter made me cum. Well done!
11/14/20, 10:49 PM
@Thexshxboi: Thank you! Glad you enjoyed :) @KinkyNickInSea: Ah, but don't we all? @jockbear: Lol, cockshrink isn't my usual bag, but the voice wanted to take it in that direction and I was helpless to resist. You know how it is...
11/14/20, 10:44 PM
Pup, I am LOVING this series! I know I've read this before but I'm leaking my way through it now like it's my first time! WOOF!
11/14/20, 8:39 PM
So enjoy stories of shrinking cocks, in this case so very small and transforming into a clit.
Nov 14, 2020
Auron
11/14/20, 8:37 PM
Such a hot story! I would love to take a ride on that machine.
Nov 14, 2020
11/14/20, 8:32 PM
There's a lot of shitty writing on this site but this author knows what he's doing. Excellent. Erotic, cerebral, evocative.
11/14/20, 8:24 PM
Locker room shenanigans, hypnotized jocks, BO as a hypnotic trigger... this series hits a lot of buttons for me, PupScout!
Nov 14, 2020
Zac
11/14/20, 8:09 PM
Fuck, man, that was *super* hot!
11/14/20, 8:07 PM
I thought there were some really hot moments in this chapter (as per usual in your stories, PupScout). Still, I couldn't help but feel like a little more distinctive characterization would work wonders. Dan and Kevin and Trevor and Dave all basically seem like the same person, and to me, the story would be hotter if we saw each of them reacting to the situation in different ways (and attempting to resist in different ways).
11/14/20, 8:04 PM
Oh wow, this is a very special surprise! Ive always been an avid fan of this series and I love it a lot! Such a fucking hot story!
11/14/20, 7:54 PM
i want to join the baseball team!
Nov 14, 2020
11/14/20, 6:24 PM
I really enjoyed this, and I thought the induction and mental transformation was extremely well-done. My one criticism is that the impact of the transformation is somewhat dulled by the fact that the main character is such a blank slate from the start; he's only referred to as "the man." If you gave him a name and alluded to his personality and prior life, this would be so much hotter, because we'd get a sense of the identity he's losing when he becomes a mindless cockslave.
Anonymous
11/14/20, 5:33 PM
Victor had a major glow-up. he also wasn't seen by the group for a while. i think he's the imposter.
Nov 13, 2020
11/14/20, 5:19 PM
the sadist protagonist was a HUGE PLUS for me. mind control is a really awful thing to do to anyone, deserved or not, and sometimes it's lovely to read a hot story about someone getting to use an awful fictional thing for some MAJOR wish fulfillment along with some hot porn. Excellent story, and I seriously wish there were more of it, but I tend to like a good deal of what you write, even if what you write isn't always to my cup of tea.
Anonymous
11/14/20, 3:48 PM
Such an incredible story so far - can't wait to read the others
Anonymous
11/14/20, 3:31 PM
Bro! Brax was my guy from the beginning. Couldn't have asked for a hotter ending for him.
11/14/20, 1:58 PM
Probably the best story i ever read on this website. Good job!
Nov 13, 2020
11/14/20, 8:09 AM
Great story and very well written. I loved the dumbing down and the way the domination played out. I hope that we will get to see more of this story. Perhaps Derrick will continue to test the ability of his machine. It would be hot for Derrick to restore Aaron, but with some fun modifications.
Nov 13, 2020
11/14/20, 8:04 AM
Isn't wanting to jump into a story and beat one of the characters an example of how well written it is? ;) It's nice if stories do something to their readers, and Tom always succeeds in doing that to me! If that means that to some people it isn't as hot, that doesn't make it a bad story or anything, just not what you yourself look for here ;). Anyway, well done Tom, I liked it!
Nov 13, 2020
11/14/20, 8:00 AM
Poor Aaron. Dumbing him down wasn't really justified. Otherwise, well-written story. It had a nice flow and gave a lot of background to the characters. Good luck on the next chapters!
Nov 13, 2020
11/14/20, 7:53 AM
Like Hypnoguy67, AnonDragon and NewGuyInTown, I agree that this story is well written in terms of characterization, pacing and planning. However, the pure malice in Derrick's action ruined it. They could have accidentally caused the dumbening, which could be reversed, and they could do each other a heavy mental change as reparation. Derrick didn't want to work out and play sports, well, Aaron could reprogram that. The story could have ended so much more benign and enjoyable for all readers. The cruelty is really unnecessary
Rubken
11/14/20, 7:33 AM
Great story, Mal! I loved your stories! Would really turn on by rubber, tattoos, piercings skinhead forced transformation story. Shamed that some of your old stories were disappeared.
Nov 13, 2020
11/14/20, 5:47 AM
Great story, I wish we could have seen a bit more of stage 1 Dumb Aaron interacting with the outside world and perceiving how much he has fallen
Nov 13, 2020
11/14/20, 3:45 AM
Please don't take my comment above as criticism. The story is excellently written, and it is a credit to the author's detailed characterization that I liked the character of Aaron and felt sorry for him when he was too trusting of Derrick. I frequently enjoy the theme of dumbing down, but I found Derrick's motives to be too malicious and that took away the hot factor for me. I respect the time and talent of the author and the fact that others were turned on by it.
11/14/20, 3:12 AM
Another incredible chapter! I just love, love, love seeing Jese's slow path to slutdom. The way Dennis kept repeating to him throughout the chapter how much of a slut he is was so hot to me. Also, I love the way Jese pretends to resist and puts on a show about not actually wanting cock... this just makes everything more special. I also like when you talk about Jese having a fat ass, maybe you could throw in more ass worship and appreciation towards Jese's ass, describe it a little bit more? I think it will be a important step to Jese to focus more and more in his ass and hole now as sexual organs and sources of pleasure, make him more self-conscious about it. Throwing Charlie into the mix was such an interesting move, I could've never foresee this happening! This is why I love your writing so much, you're so creative and inventive. I'd love to read a description of Charlie in the next chapter, tho. Talking about chapters, dude, the pace you're on these days writing and posting so fast is literally giving me life. Please keep this going! I'm super curious to see Jese playing Charlie's mod. I hope is a fantasy MMORPG kinda of game, or some open world one, where Jese can really explore. Also, maybe you can slutty things up a little with this game having very precarious choices of outfits that really exposes Jese's body and ass which makes Jese really pissed off and makes him complain to Charlie, but Charlie brushes it off and explains to him that since it's a new mod he is still working on, he didn't have the chance yet to develop all of the outfit choices (which is a lie, of course, he is doing that on purpose and manipulating Jese so he can ogle Jese's hot body). Jese gets grumpy but accepts his new slutty outfit cause he doesn't really have a choice, he needs to beta the game... Anyway dude, thanks so much for your work, well done again! Cheers!
11/14/20, 2:42 AM
Love a class pants-stealing TF, especially the moment the seams disappear. Plenty to work with here, just sort out your formatting.
Nov 13, 2020
11/14/20, 2:36 AM
I'm with Hypnoguy67 and New Guy in Town - this is normally my kind of story, and I still found it hot regardless, but I don't know...I guess I prefer it when the guy who is the target deserved it, or did so on purpose, or it was an accident...this came off as just a tad too malicious by Derrick for such a silly reason. But it was still well written, and clearly some others are really into it, so I wouldn't worry too much about this random person's opinion - guess this story just wasn't my cup of tea.
11/14/20, 1:31 AM
Whoops, I must've read the last line wrong, I thought Devin entered with Rugby Boy. So he's going to show up at the station part-way through Chapter 20. I wonder what he's going to walk in on. Also, I'm *very* curious to see what had Snake so distracted that he didn't rush to save Rugby Boy...
11/14/20, 1:26 AM
> Devin was able to keep up with the Super Soldiers and run all the way to the police station. > You're a little ahead. They left him behind, but told him where to go and to follow. He's trailing them by about a half hour.
11/14/20, 1:24 AM
> So will we see Devin take his full familiar form in the next chapter? > Poor Devin. I mean, has anyone had to prove himself so damn much? He better get something!