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Robodrone
9/29/20, 11:52 PM
This fits my needs for a pandemic theme, because having been masked now for so damned long, and de-rubbered as well, if someone sent me a rubber mask in the mail? Hells Bells i would have had it on *before* i got to the mirror! No questions asked! And that would have been my story as well. Im more of a rubber drone / android / robot dreamer myself, but i would not complain about Smokepig's results! Beggars cant be choosers they say. Just Choose me! RbD.
9/29/20, 9:45 PM
This was a long installment. I loved it a lot! It was especially nice to see the Renegade crews interacting as much as they did, and I'm glad Cory is finally giving his dad a chance. This is honestly the best chapter you've written so far, and I'm excited with anticipation for the. ext one.
9/29/20, 7:10 PM
Love to see a follow up of 19 as the gentleman's care-giver
Jonanator
9/29/20, 6:56 PM
i loved this story. hope there is a sequel
Anonymous
9/29/20, 6:41 PM
This was really sweet. This was simple, calm, and hot and I mean that in the best way possible. It was smartly written and not over the top. Rereading it makes you realize that there were clues, like how it all connects. I want to know who wrote it :D
Anonymous
9/29/20, 6:28 PM
I'm more curious about the other son. I honestly would hope to see some kind of twist with him. Maybe he's like Bob is now, pretending to be an Alpha only around others, but is already a Beta deep down? Maybe he's gay or bi? Something that makes him stand distinctly apart from the other two.
Anonymous
9/29/20, 5:54 PM
Amazing story! I hope we hear the stories of other rubber drones!
Anonymous
9/29/20, 5:33 PM
I absolutely loved this. I actually didn't mind not having the prequel/lead up at all, some prefer the journey and others the destination! In any case I really hope you enjoyed writing this and I hope you keep it up!
blankbot
9/29/20, 5:31 PM
Thanks for writing this. A rubber beard--sexy!
bimarguy
9/29/20, 3:31 PM
yes this was a great opening for a series . sorry to hear about the cancer hunter hope all is well . and if anyone gets a mask let us know lol
9/29/20, 2:13 PM
Excellent story! I can't wait to read more about the adventures of Smokepig and his brother Avatars.
9/29/20, 1:21 PM
I'm a sucker for sentimentality so I love the love interest so far. BUT. Apologies if I come off too strong here. You're writing this as if this is a screenplay to a film or video. There's lots of quick, very disorienting jump cuts, lots of juxtapositions that superficially don't make any sense until you get close to the end. That's typical of a modern screenplay. You're making lots of assumptions that the reader will recognize this kind of dialogue (from film which is only where it appears) and once recognized, will go along with it. It does not read well as literature. I find it distances and thereby removes this reader (and probably others) from the story. To be sure, plenty of writers had the same idea well before the invention of motion pictures, but they understood that each "fragment" had to have internal coherence *as literature*. (I'm thinking of Hugo's **Les Misérables** with its four diversionary episodes, particularly the most famous one, the tour of the Waterloo battlefield which seemingly has nothing to do with the story.) One should be able to go back and read this dialogue to get a better understanding of what's happening - but alas, it's dialogue pulled from an imaginary video, which I find is a poor substitute for actual literary writing. Writing can do amazing things when it's not trying to imitate another medium (such as film) but is mining its own idiomatic nature. I encourage you to think of these issues as we continue to follow Jace & Tuy.
Anonymous
9/29/20, 12:56 PM
I live to serve the virus
9/29/20, 12:37 PM
Glad to see another well-written abdl daddy/diaperboy story here. I agree that a prequel would be fun. Would also love to see a follow up where the hypnosis mentally regresses Levi further.
9/29/20, 12:24 PM
\*shrug* To each their own. The point of the story/kink is that the idiots *don't* get their comeuppance.
James
9/29/20, 12:21 PM
This was so so good. Solid simple premise about betraying trust. Hot descriptions that aren't overdetailed, drowning out the pacing. And the odd juxtaposition between Jesse thinking he's in control, and his absolute oblivious reprogramming was a nice twist on the genre. Made me click the author to see your other stories, but sadly, Author Hidden
Hunter_C_Wolfe@Hotmail.Com
9/29/20, 12:09 PM
Having cancer, smoking is one area I avoid. Everything else about being controlled & changing sounds hot. I would readily put on this mask if it was sent to me: Hunter Wolfe 1779 Kirby Parkway Unit 1-118 Memphis, TN 38138 No harm in trying, right?
Anonymous
9/29/20, 12:04 PM
I live to serve the Virus
9/29/20, 11:29 AM
Rubber and cigars normally don't excite me, but this story is very sexy and well written.
Anonymous
9/29/20, 11:17 AM
this story seems backwards. there's a difference when it comes to dominant and just wannabe idiots with magic powers. this is the latter. the story remains unsatisfying as the idiot never gets his comeuppance.
The author
9/29/20, 10:40 AM
Jeez not replying to your comments is hard :') So I logged out to do so without ruining the surprise. Thanks for your feedback, originally I planned on shifting focus between the two, but having two pov's is something I was having my doubts about and being able to be anonymous made my try something new, best not repeat it ;) Thanks again!
9/29/20, 9:04 AM
I wish this hadn't been entered into the contest, because it's a good story, but it's only tangentially related to the pandemic theme. I'd really like to see a sequel with Smokepig corrupting other men; it feels like we're reading an origin story, and the really exciting bits are being saved for the next installments.
Evan
9/29/20, 9:03 AM
I agree with Hypnothrill, it's a great concept with some sexy scenes and I'd encourage taking his feedback to tighten it up for even more enjoyment and grow as an author. There seemed a lot of political messaging at the start that, frankly, adds nothing to the story and seems a bit forced. It's your story and write how you want but you could easily skip all of it and have the story still make perfect sense. Especially if you focus on having us see through the characters experiencing events so we learn the world that way, rather than just told the info up front. Thanks for sharing your story! Who doesn't love monster dicks and floods of cum!
9/29/20, 8:42 AM
Oh, like the idea of omegas from the last comment, Micheal definitely deserves to be lower than beta
9/29/20, 8:25 AM
love the scene of the pup blowing his master as he casually talks. not a big fan of beastiality but thats on me for not seeing the tag. thanks for the story!
9/29/20, 6:55 AM
Loved it but would have loved more of the thug trying to resist.
Jonanator
9/29/20, 6:54 AM
i love the story, hope you continue it.
9/29/20, 6:52 AM
HOT! I have big nipples n smoke cigars- I'm looking for a big nipple, stogie smokin' bear! Perfect. Would've loved to get more of that last scene n the excusite sucking n log stretching while smoking. Great job n thanks for putting it all together.
9/29/20, 6:39 AM
Like stated above, stories like these helped me see I'm also a little diaper boy. Very hot and well done story.
9/29/20, 6:34 AM
Well, since we are talking about Alphas and Betas, I wonder if Dan is gonna make the sons Omegas~