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11/7/20, 3:39 PM
In book 3 let the new Variant symbiote emerge from the flower like an over bloated muscular cabbage patch kid. (my sister would have passed on that doll.) Can the great one manipulate the plant so that one love struck gym bunny after another can get sucked into the bloom. Or more than one bloom per testicular shaped root bulb. I understand the dilemma of the for arts sake. Right now you have us reaching for our cock and not our wallets. One step at a time gentle writer. HAIL GREAT ABSMAN
11/7/20, 3:08 PM
> This chapter was amazing. Each one some how improves upon the one before. > Thank you! Hopefully because I've been constructing it right! The hardest part about always being three chapters ahead of you guys was I was always, like, "but the payoff is gonna be so worth it -- give it time!" I'm doing that now! As much as I've been waiting for you all to get to this moment, there's more to cum! > My own twisted mind has thought about the three Variants creating a plant baby that’s gigantic bloom could engulf... (someone's) ...entire body. Maybe it wouldn’t create a new great one or greater one but a new hybrid with all three abilities. But that plant wouldn’t work in the amazing garden we are strolling or sashaying through. > No, but that's a seriously good idea for BOOK THREE -- if in fact the Variants make it that far. > and other times during this chapter the thought crossed my mind. “HAIL GREAT ABSMAN!” > Yeah, but would you buy my book? If only I could figure out a way to monetize this stuff... (Rather than the "You do WHAT for ARTSAKE?" I get now.)
11/7/20, 2:51 PM
Glad to hear Rubbersome is doing well and hopefully his life will calm down soon. I read his work over and over again. This chapter was amazing. Each one some how improves upon the one before. I had a feeling the Sheriff would not be able to maintain his hold over the deputy. The Sheriff was never capable of loving the deputy. That bond needed to be there before both of them were joined with a symbiote. Joe was a strong enough alpha and had a fatherly love for his son that he could resist. Tony's young lust out weighed his love for his father. I'm happy to see Vernon found Rugby Boy. My own twisted mind has thought about the three Variants creating a plant baby that's gigantic bloom could engulf Rugby Boy's entire body. Maybe it wouldn't create a new great one or greater one but a new hybrid with all three abilities. But that plant wouldn't work in the amazing garden we are strolling or sashaying through. Reading this section among others in this chapter did it for me. > Power. > > He was flexing and deep-breathing and thrusting and moaning – and he felt something slip down the slit of his cock. A wet vine, a flat-backed eel, a whisper-thin tentacle – it entered him. Something living slid inside – erotic and horrifying. He was so close. > > And this creature settled into his balls, swelling to full-size, weighing them down. He felt it trying to connect with him – rudimentary communication – emotional stimuli, images, as if it were discovering the pathway to language. > > I am. You. With I. Me. Us are. WE are. Together. > > The brink of orgasm. > > Join me. > > Ecstasy! > > Joyous, mind-numbing pleasure. Acceptance – rope after rope of cum – of godseed. > > We. Us. We are… > As I was about to cum this time and other times during this chapter the thought crossed my mind. "HAIL GREAT ABSMAN!"
11/7/20, 2:30 PM
> I think letting the characters retain their personality creates hope in the reader, even if it’s false hope, that the enslavement can somehow be reversed > Beyond that, there's a question of who to trust? If someone's a mindless drone, we pretty much know whose side they're on. If a character retains their personality, until they utter their allegiance, we don't know what they believe. It creates a layer of paranoia I like.
11/7/20, 1:58 PM
Plus I think letting the characters retain their personality creates hope in the reader, even if it's false hope, that the enslavement can somehow be reversed. Death of personality is usually only good for demonstrating the direness of the situation, or as the climax of a story. Once a character is a mindless drone, there's no opportunity for character growth, they are at best an obstacle for your protagonists to have to deal with at some point.
11/7/20, 12:50 PM
sorry it's title is actually "unintended wish: gaining confidence" it has very short snippets about the two gym shower scenes. Thank you for catching that, and the feedback 😄
11/7/20, 12:46 PM
still good story though
11/7/20, 12:46 PM
what part is the series is unitended wish: a boost of confidence from? (if not ur story than who?)
Anonymous
11/7/20, 12:28 PM
I like the High Fantasy Gone Wrong thing you've got going on. This is like a pie in the face for all those grand adventurers, their careers ended in utter embarrassment. Great!
Anonymous
11/7/20, 12:22 PM
So hot! Please continue it
Anonymous
11/7/20, 12:14 PM
This was so good!!! Please make one with the dad!
11/7/20, 11:20 AM
> That complete erasure of personhood and the destruction of genuine emotional connection (be it between parents and children or true lovers) like it is nothing is *horrific*. > 100% agreed! That's why I went there rather than mind-wiped slavehood. This allows the Hosts to retain their personalities -- rather than just be drones -- but have motivation to obey, however severely misguided it may be.
11/7/20, 11:15 AM
> It reminded me of storylines from the old Batman series, where Marsha the Queen of Diamonds... would use a potion or pheromone perfume to make men fall in love with her. > That particular episode is ingrained in my head -- it was the first time I realized mind-control got my little tween penis hard. Or maybe it was Burt Ward's acting skills.
11/7/20, 9:55 AM
Love your story. We NEED the next chapters. please ❤️
11/7/20, 8:35 AM
@Feed Your Head, I found those scenes more amusing (and arousing) than horrific. It reminded me of storylines from the old Batman series, where Marsha the Queen of Diamonds or (more appropriately) Poison Ivy would use a potion or pheromone perfume to make men fall in love with her. Maybe I'm just not a romantic, but that's been the hottest part of the story for me so far, watching these love relationships (or father-son relationships) diminish in importance as one of the men gets controlled by a Great One.
Guy
11/7/20, 7:53 AM
Would be hot if Jesse had some action with Colin as well in the game
El observador
11/7/20, 7:42 AM
your way to write the relationship between father and son I love it, continue with this please. option three interests me
Anonymous
11/7/20, 4:29 AM
Good story but I would like you to continuous "Big Topped" story most.
11/7/20, 3:52 AM
What a terrific chapter. Honestly, I never liked Sheriff Lane--even all the way back in the first part of the series, he was an arrogant, cocky jerk. Seeing him get his just deserts is indeed delicious! :p Less tasty for me, though--and definitely playing into the horror element, which you do beautifully--are the scenes where the more powerful Symbionts use their abilities to make their victims fall utterly, hopelessly in love with them. That complete erasure of personhood and the destruction of genuine emotional connection (be it between parents and children or true lovers) like it is nothing is *horrific.* Imagine loving someone all your life, swearing up and down that you were meant to be...and with a single gesture, all of that love is destroyed. That makes me shiver and even cry a bit...you truly are an amazing author! :)
11/7/20, 2:17 AM
Great story. Now how about a follow up where the Minstrel follows the bandits back to their camp, double-crosses them, and enslaves /everybody/. Also (just a personal preferences), some scenes where the enslaved men are aware of their humiliation but unable to do anything about it would be nice. :
11/7/20, 12:56 AM
Beyond that, yeah, this is a super sexy story. Super sexy. I like all three men and hope that at the end of this little adventure there is a foursome with Jese and the three. hehe By the way the idea of him sitting on say a lap in a darkened performance center as the show goes on is now in my head, and its wonderful. Its an idea just as great as him laying on his belly, sucking a man's cock, as the man fingers and then maybe rims his ass while working to make it so others don't see them. (The game can make it so its impossible for them to be caught while putting on moments that make it seem like they will be caught.)
11/7/20, 12:43 AM
Good premise and excellent writing. The transformation was visceral and still pretty hot. These are quickly becoming my favorite series.
11/7/20, 12:36 AM
Im sorry but the presence of Christine ruined things. If she wasn't here it would have been great.
11/6/20, 11:09 PM
Well played, sir, well played!! A very enjoyable story; I enjoyed the surprise of Sygg to learn that the bard hadn't been vetted. That set the stage for everything to come.
Lusty Stallion
11/6/20, 10:59 PM
Well I didnt see Koby becoming a bottom or the demons explanation coming. Thanks man for a great story
11/6/20, 7:55 PM
I wish him luck in resolving his issues and hope he is able to join us soon!
11/6/20, 6:59 PM
Very hot and original story! Though I thought till the end that the bard would turn against the bandits and play some more. Hope the story continues! The few paragraphs describing Sygg's induction were especially well-written, hope there's more like that if you give this a follow-up!
11/6/20, 6:47 PM
What a sweet romance! I look forward to the next chapter.
11/6/20, 6:31 PM
> I’m a Rubbrsome fan, Absman. The more twisted and trippy, the better! > Funny you should mention Rubbrsome! I'm happy to say I got an email from him this morning, because he'd heard we were talking about him in the Forum. He's healthy and well, though he's dealing with some life stuff, and he'll come back to us when he can. I'm even happier to say he's reading this series -- and he likes it!
11/6/20, 6:20 PM
> Believe me when I say the next three chapters are a roller-coaster ride and none of it – I hope – what you expect. Personally, I'm satisfied that I managed to guess the big twists regarding the Deputy, Lane and Snake, and Rugby Boy based on your foreshadowing and some very generous hints from you. I'm still waiting for the other shoe to drop with my theory about Rugby Boy, but I'm confident that will play out at least mostly as predicted- though of course, I welcome an unforeseen twist. Balancing the twin needs to satisfy an audience by meeting their expectations to create enjoyment and satisfaction while also subverting their expectations to create interest and emotional investment is difficult, even for people who tell stories for a living. > Everything we know and have been comfortable with has been thrown for a loop and we’re off in a different direction than we’d been set up for. I'm a Rubbrsome fan, Absman. The more twisted and trippy, the better!