this was one great story Sir. Enjoyed it from beginning to end! Excellent work!

I've just read all your stories to date, and while I adore almost everything about them I do wish the penis shrinking/SPH were less prominent.

Man. What a slam dunk. Hot sex, a fun twist on reprogramming, a believable pre-sex dynamic to make it all really feel like Dave's changing him. Thanks for posting.

I want to retract what I said previously. I went back and re-read the previous two chapters and realize I have made a mistake. Coming off the previous chapters I and some of the other readers had a false impression that Max was actually pretty nice. I think that came from scenes like when he took Lucas to the park for some fresh air. Upon re-reading the previous parts I realized that Max has been extremely predatory the entire time. I think that the hot sex kind of distracted me to some of what was going on. For instance after that walk in the park Max physically forced Lucas's head into his armpit to dope him up on his pheromones and make him compliant. (It may have seemed like going to the park was for Lucas's benefit but really it was more like he was walking a dog for exercise.) There are many parts of the story where Lucas literally thinks that he wants to break free but he's physically been overpowered by Max and soon after, the drugging affect of the pheromones kicks in and he becomes unresisting. Earlier, before Lucas even understands what it will do, Max is shoving his spit down Lucas's throat to trigger it to awaken and swallow his entire horse cock. Similarly he activates Lucas's ass without asking if it's okay to do that. Once Max has lit upon Lucas, he has already decided that he is going to be his. This story isn't really so much about domination, it's about Max completely stripping Lucas of free will and humanity. The characterization is actually very, very consistent, it's just that once he has progressed to a certain point, Max no longer feels like he has to hide from Lucas exactly how much he is owned and drops the facade. The thing about this is that the reader is so in touch with Lucas's mind that even though Lucas is literally being physically altered and enslaved to Max in earlier chapters, it feels so good the true ramifications don't really hit home. Then when Max shows that actually Lucas is in far too deep, it's a shock to Lucas but it's *also* a shock to the reader. I think that's why a bunch of us kind of balked. We were enjoying the fantasy up to that point but then we realized we were far over the line that we thought we were. I really don't say this lightly but I think this is the hottest story on the site and I'm actually really excited to see what ends up happening, whether Lucas becomes a horny near mindless baby maker, or if there is some twist we haven't seen. That my expectations have been properly realigned I think I can enjoy the very dark ride more smoothly.

My thoughts on this story have been mixed for reasons I won't get into here--it's an AMAZING story, don't get me wrong! Incredible writing and world-building. I do sense, however, that the temptation of absolute power is beginning to corrupt Gabe absolutely...what will happen? :O

I wanna play the slots

OMG! That's incredible hot, I really love the theme you set for this series. Please keep feeding us readers more!

never got a description of zak which felt off since everyone else did get a paragraph for themselves... other than that and what everyone else said about it feeling a bit rushed towards the end it's pretty good

hi, hope your well. I keep reading your two stories. they are the hottest on this site. I'd love to read more , it gives me a chance to get into your mind

Great work! we does not get enough dom bottom stories, please keep the story going :)

Thank you so much for giving us another update :) This story is way too good for it to go to waste! I love how the dad is going further into obedience and becoming his son's sexy plaything. However, I think Liam needs to take full advantage that his newly divorced dad is single! Liam should hypnotize him further and get Cyrus to propose and marry him, in order to prove how much he loves his son. Cyrus will act like this is normal and will even take his new fiancé on dates out in public. He will be grateful that a hot stud like Liam took interest in him. I also wanna see the dad become totally mindcontrolled/enslaved and start calling his son master.

It's a different world, consent and abuse obviously doesn't coincide with our world's definitions. For instance, in a world without females, where a man's pheromones alert him to whether or not someone is compatible, there would possibly be no rape, and therefore no questions of consent. And seeing as they only met a couple days ago, as they've gotten more comfortable with each other, Max has let his guard down and shown how alpha this Alpha can be. I'm not surprised he got a little rougher and more dominant. If I could self-lube, I'd be in a deep puddle after chapter 3. I look forward to more, especially the logistics of male pregnancy.

Love a good drunk on musk story. One thing: waste is garbage, waist is what's above your dick

would love to see more of these stories! i thought this was so HOT!

Raunchy and depraved. Delightful. I can't help but wonder if there is a platinum tier?

Lusty -- I'm really enjoying this story. The pictures are fun and a nice addition, not distracting. I'm interested in seeing where you end up going with it. Do you mind if I correct one thing? When you don't win, you "lose". When you're not winning, you're "losing". With that in mind, when something is less tight, it's "loose". When you make something less tight, you're "loosening" it. There is no word "loosing". I know it's minor, but it's one of those things that I see a lot and it's easy to fix. You did it in both the first chapter and this second one (though I suspect you copy/pasted it). This is not a complaint about the creativity or the writing, just a grammar thing. It's all love.

This is REALLY hot! It got me going practically from the start. What the games-players end up doing to Jarod is incredibly arousing.

i started this story years ago and completely forgot about it. I've not written anything for years, I need to start again.

Awesome!

This is amazing! Like Nutiper says, it has a real narrative voice, a sense of place, a sense of time. And, plus, a muscled milkman getting -- *milked* by the main character under a mysterious and irresistible influence. Eager for more -- like Coran!

I'd love to see this story continued...

very hot man. id love to read more!

This Story is amazing and the pictures giving my fantasy a nice burst. :Dand

hotttt

Yes please more drug use, make it get really . Also, the swallowing of piss has been HOT!

hottttt. hope there is more to come.

what happened to all the links embedded in the story? they don't work.....TuT

my ultimate fantasy

oh yeeeeeees Vitaly enters the field. A new Player has arrived lol

things are getting intersting, lets see how things will go