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Anonymous
12/27/18, 4:11 PM
I wonder what is going to happen to the other officers
Anonymous
12/27/18, 3:54 PM
Great story, keep it going
Anonymous
12/27/18, 3:40 PM
If nothing else, I'm curious how a "15 years later" chapter would turn out, where Pat's time is up and he has to return to the real world again. Good story so far!
Anonymous
12/27/18, 3:25 PM
more of this story line plz 😍
12/27/18, 3:11 PM
I'm not a native-English speaker myself, so I'm not really qualified to comment on your English. As far as I can tell, it's pretty much perfect. I didn't find any obvious mistake, with the exception of very(!) few typos. As a matter of fact, you have a talent for writing in a way it makes your story very easy to read. Usually I don't like long texts, I rather get to the point quickly (see my own stories ... :) ). But you have an incredible way of keeping the reader interested, to always top the already hot description of Mowgli's loss of will, so you just cannot stop reading. I was hard throughout your whole story and that was really special. I can only commend you for that! If I had to criticize anything, it's the way you write dialog - from a technical point of view. In (American) English, you put each speaker into its own separate paragraph i.e. every time another person starts to speak, you start a new paragraph. And you don't use any - or * when starting a direct speech. That actually makes it much easier to read dialog, even though it makes the text even longer. But I would still follow that rule. I haven't had the time to read your second story, and I'm almost afraid that it'll be hard even for you to top the first one :) Well, I feel your mind just works quite similar to my own wicked, corrupted mind, so I'm looking forward to whatever you're going to offer here.
12/27/18, 3:04 PM
I haven't posted any new image-stories since the great Tumblr purge, but my Tumblr is all archived at: https://www.timbr.xxx/hypnothrill
Anonymous
12/27/18, 2:55 PM
i would like Glenn to keep Pat for himself!
Dec 25, 2018
BearlyUnderControl
12/27/18, 2:32 PM
This is literally my favorite story I've read in MONTHS Great progression, fantastic control, hits all the right buttons wooooof
Anonymous
12/27/18, 1:21 PM
loved it! please write another chapter!!
Bimarcnj
12/27/18, 12:54 PM
interesting story here hope u continue. i take it that there are levels of admission to the sex club and given that Glen called out Pat's name out loud it would be some fun reading as to how it would turn out . and how Glen reacts to this
Anonymous
12/27/18, 10:28 AM
Very good beginning. Looking forward to this being a good transformation story.
Anonymous
12/27/18, 10:08 AM
awesome! please write more of this story!
Anonymous
12/27/18, 9:49 AM
I love this series! "> slutty young muscleheads who were still wearing skimpy tanktops and shorts in December, because they couldn’t resist wanting to show off their bis and tris and lats and pecs and delts and glutes" this is perhaps, my favorite line in the story, mostly because I wish it described me! lol! Love it! please keep it up! any replacement site for your tumblr?
Anonymous
12/27/18, 9:30 AM
This was very hot!!!! Wish you'd come back and write more!!!
Jason
12/27/18, 7:46 AM
This is one of the best stories on Gay Spiral Stories and very inspiring. Hotttt as fuck, so many potential offshoots, drooling for a continuation... I mean, I could write pages of review as to the technique the author has used here, but the corruption and unexpected degradation of the guys' minds, not to mention the hot physical descriptions... had me edging for hours.
boi98229
12/27/18, 6:39 AM
Thank you once again for an enthralling and even heartwarming story. i can't help but wonder how close and how complex a mix of connections and feelings Cole and Jason might develop over time. Being pushed into situations in which Jason quickly develops close feelings for Ryan, Roger, and Seamus and then pulled back into his connection with Cole must have been confusing for Jason and yet creates situations so rich in love, lust and sex. Cole's business and his nature require Cole to be both very proprietary and still so open to sharing Jason with others. Throughout the story Jason seems constantly in confusion as he is pushed into learning new things about himself and about the possibilities of sex, love and psychology. What a complex web you weave! My own attraction to mind control, power exchange, and the process of seduction makes this story absolutely sizzling hot! i would love to read more of whatever you choose to write. Hopefully this will include more chapters to this story. In any case thanks so much for sharing your kinky imagination and your writing skill. ~david
12/27/18, 6:33 AM
Nothing is hotter to me than a man being ensnared by his own lust. The story is already wonderful, and i cant wait to see how it grows from here.
Anonymous
12/27/18, 6:30 AM
Can't wait to see where this goes, seems like a perfect start to a good formalizing series
Slavethruhypno@yahoo.com
12/27/18, 6:27 AM
DAMN! Love how each assigned his proper role! never even considered being a sow -- now i am hard just thinking about it and will finish myself off now!
Anonymous
12/27/18, 6:08 AM
Great story! Would love to see more...
Anonymous
12/27/18, 5:53 AM
Aww! It's a love story :)
Anonymous
12/27/18, 5:37 AM
this is a very hot story - i also like the suggestion of including family and friends reaction. maybe you can also include some stuff on hairstyle / haircut change, mandatory face shaving (probably Mr Mainwairing doesn't approve of facial hair at all) and how this affects his personality
12/27/18, 4:54 AM
Hehehe, ok Sir Martin; 3 OK thanks. I'll be concise with the tags. :) Oh no! It is not an interference, thank you very much for your intention. Even so, after thinking about it, I prefer to separate these stories. Because I think it is possible that in the future write a continuation of the first story that I published, which will be a sequel, so for now I will keep these two separate. Ok, understand. Thank you :)
12/27/18, 4:35 AM
I like it. Here's an idea: they all find something in the house (as one of them did say, "we all have things to do") and they become the person that uses that object. We only know Cody's story so far.
Anonymous
12/27/18, 3:57 AM
i also liked the story lone here , id like to see Glen struggle with his desires but eventually attempts to purchase him for his own use . even better if he purchases Pat ,that he can never return to his old life
Dec 25, 2018
paisaguerro
12/27/18, 3:41 AM
Where's the board game going next?? :) Frat house?
Anonymous
12/27/18, 3:36 AM
Oh my, this is so hot! I absolutely love it! Please continue it! I really like where it is going, would love to see Glenn rescue Pat and keep him for himself, getting to enjoy all of his new "conditioning". If it strikes your fancy, maybe include some foot fetish stuff too? Think it'd be hot if Pat was conditioned to have a foot fetish.
Dec 25, 2018
Anonymous
12/27/18, 3:19 AM
Fantastic story, got me really horny! Loved Sven's role as a sub top to a Daddy the most!
Dec 14, 2018
Svplgsmslm
12/27/18, 2:21 AM
Very nice. descending down the stairs to the final changing into the submissive slut
Anonymous
12/27/18, 1:53 AM
good start