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Jan 11, 2020
1/11/20, 12:43 PM
I really like this premise, and I think the writing is strong. But the POV shift doesn't do the story any favors. We get some exciting build-up in the first half of the story, and then before we get to the sexy climax, we cut away to the doctor's POV, and then the rest of Darren's mental transformation is described in dry, clinical terms. It might have been better to insert a short cutaway to the doctor's POV, then switch back to Darren's POV.
Anonymous
1/11/20, 12:22 PM
So good! I wish you'd put like a dominant bottom cousin that Liam would hate to fuck. but he has to. oh wait. Make that his dad. I'm so psyched about what you're going write next!
Anonymous
1/11/20, 8:23 AM
Not wanting to be rude but there were a few things that really put me off this story. If it turns into a reversal revenge story than maybe I could get it as buildup. If not then this just reads as angry belittlement towards disliked items framed with superiority over disliking them. You've already set up the main character as being without self issues only external ones. And immediately set up the first victim as understandable for his actions. Some of these ideas are real issues that can even have harsh effects. I just don't read this and think that it's going to be shown any other way other than a self promoting domination fic. Please don't take this harshly. I only wanted to offer criticism in a constructive and concerned way.
fingrfethr
1/11/20, 8:18 AM
I don't know whether it's your own work you're rewriting or someone else's. Either way, this is witty, intelligent and stylish erotica and I would love to see more of it! Please continue!
LongtimeFan
1/11/20, 6:21 AM
Incredible! I love the story--you adapt it perfectly, and the descriptions of gorgeous guys getting mindwiped is hot, hot, hot. Please do continue if you like! :)
Anonymous
1/11/20, 5:48 AM
YES! Please continueeee
1/11/20, 4:07 AM
Kind of hurt by that. Not an incel . Like a lot kink it's just trying to subvert a lot of the problematic things in our culture.
Elm
1/11/20, 4:06 AM
Wow! yes please!
cigarJohn
1/11/20, 2:06 AM
fuckin love this story. has fueled many loads!
Anonymous
1/11/20, 12:26 AM
So many causally dropped details that are both fascinating and steamy-hot. Love the psychological playfulness. Awesome job.
Anonymous
1/11/20, 12:06 AM
pleaaassee continue
Anonymous
1/10/20, 10:34 PM
will this continue?
Anonymous
1/10/20, 9:23 PM
Limerick has some of the hottest bimbo fiction around--so glad to see someone adapting it well!
hardpuc
1/10/20, 8:46 PM
I had a chunky by the end of the third paragraph. Nice Job!
Anonymous
1/10/20, 7:21 PM
Absolutely amazing....great work!!
1/10/20, 6:29 PM
It's coming. Even though the next chapter was mostly already written, it got large, so I split it, but then realized that one chapter would benefit significantly from being told from a different POV, so it's getting rewrites.
S. Q. Neemie
1/10/20, 6:25 PM
Thanks for letting me know what you think, guys. :) It'd be a little easier to remember to go to the gym if this shit were going down there. I made this a community series, as I would love to see others' takes on the concept. Feel free to let your imaginations run wild!
I Dream of Unfinished Houses
1/10/20, 5:47 PM
This is one of the hottest stories I've read man. Hope you write more.
Anonymous
1/10/20, 5:33 PM
This reads like an incel wrote it...
I Dream of Unfinished Houses
1/10/20, 5:26 PM
One of the best stories I have ever read on this site.
I Dream of Unfinished Houses
1/10/20, 5:03 PM
This is amazing man. I always love these kinds of stories from you. I haven't seen something like this in a long time. Hope you write more.
I Dream of Unfinished Houses
1/10/20, 5:00 PM
Can't wait to see what other interesting punishments you will deal towards Liam
I Dream of Unfinished Houses
1/10/20, 4:58 PM
Dude, Now I really want to know what he transforms into!!!
I Dream of Unfinished Houses
1/10/20, 4:56 PM
Wow, this is one of the darkest stories I've read. You have me at the edge of my seat.
IDreamOfUnfinishedHouses
1/10/20, 4:53 PM
This was amazing. You really fleshed out the world in a way I haven't seen someone do in a long time!!! I hope you continue writing more man.
Anonymous
1/10/20, 4:18 PM
Yes, definitely hope you continue. Your rewrites are great!
1/10/20, 3:15 PM
Looking forward to the continuing story. Really enjoying the pictures, also. The Father/Son/Brother situation would definitely add some incredible flavor.
1/10/20, 3:00 PM
Hotter and hotter with each passing instance. Can't wait for the rest...
1/10/20, 1:59 PM
Finding it engaging and hot! The picture thru it over the top for me.
Geoff M
1/10/20, 1:31 PM
loved it cant wait for more!