sexy as hell

This amazing story is now on my favorite list - joining so many of your other works. Thank you for the erotic thrill I get every time I read it!

more please.

Can't wait to finish reading

Every chapter of this is delicious and oh so hot. Thank you, and keep up the good work!

This story is amazing, you nailed the ending there, thank you for writing this.

Normally I don't like to respond to comments on a story, because I don't want to feel like I'm just author-spamming the comments, but I saw Nutiper responding to comments on his story, and I really like the way he batched his replies into a comment or two. Gonna give that a try here. @Hypnothrill - Thanks! I had no idea about the twist when I started writing. The first attempt at this story (that stalled out around 2000 words) was about a spell on the doorframe, and everytime somebody tried to leave the apartment they'd find an excuse to stay. Eventually the excuses started to turn sexual, and the roommates stopped leaving the house because they were too busy fucking eachother. The twist only showed up when I wrote the scene where Clay and Adrian come out of the shower and I asked myself what Jonny would have been doing while he waited. @Lytcom - Thanks! Though now I'm starting to ask myself if I have unresolved issues with my old roommates. @Tattcub - Thanks buddy, it's always great to hear from you. @Feed Your Head - Thank fuck! I was worried that I brushed over the physical transformations too quickly, but I wanted to let the reader fill it in with their own details. And then for the roommates, I thought maybe I skipped their struggle too much, but I figured we got to see the inside of Clay's head and that was good enough. Thanks for reading. @Wonder Bread - Thanks! if you liked this vibe, go track down ONIX's "That Old Black Magic" series. It's a way more detailed look at a guy who has some bothersome roommates, and one of my biggest inspirations. @Cris Kane - Thanks! I would love to read another Mariposa story. Mariposa Honeymoon is one of my favourites, and really set my expectations for my last trip to cancun. You'll be delighted to know that everything went exactly as you wrote. @Max Ryon - Thanks man! I'm glad the topical subject worked. I started writing this like a month ago, before any of the re-opening started to happen, but I got bogged down. Just glad to get it out there before we're all back to life as normal. And thank you all for writing comments. I really only write for the comments and the blowjobs, and this whole anonymous writer thing makes it hard to give you all my address for the blowjobs.

more please

the ending was a tiiny bit abrupt but God this is such a hot story

This story has it all...it's topical, funny, hot, and surprising. As always, I love your work!

wow! good start, can't wait for the next chapter.

this reads so much like a Bara by Itto Mentaiko ! A very well crafted story!

Medetashi, medetashi. Thank you for creating a wonderful story set in Japan. It was truly an enjoyable experience.

Chad, as to Bolin, I like Bolin generally (even though I myself am a waterbender *ie* I practice taiji); he has the spirit of playfulness and innocence that Aang had in the first series. I liked that story line too. One of the reasons that picture is on my profile is that he's controlled in that part of the story. Plus he's in uniform as well. It's also my image on Discord so another reason why Bolin is there. That storyline makes me want to write a story set in Republic City or maybe Ba Sing Se whether the Dai Li are still doing their techniques; it's on the long list of ideas for writing, whether I'll actually do it only time can tell.

Super hot!

Shorter paragraphs improve readability and help clarify actions: who is saying or doing something.

Thanks for this story! I first read the uncensored version and then this version, and I like this version significantly more. I find all the violence and gore a distraction from the narrative. Although violence for its own sake is not my thing, I can definitely understand how it can be a turn on. As I commented at the end of chapter 1, I love the idea of a guy discovering he's a demon and trying to wrestle and understand himself and his urges. But then that aspect of the story gets replaced by a demon trying but unable to satisfy himself - it's like it starts one way and then morphs into another story. In other words, it seems like two different stories spliced together. Your uncensored version has a kind of repeating ending (much more than here) which was very atmospherically haunting, reminding me of the 1946 film "Dead of Night." I suppose you wanted to leave the reader in a mood like Hugh, always wanting more but never achieving it. I wonder if you might consider creating a different Hugh story where it's established from the outset that he's a twisted demon, but then tries to search for more and actually finds it. (Personally I would like to play around with the notion of a guy discovering and coming to grips with being a demon - I think that's probably too tame for your taste.) Again thanks for this story - I won't say it's my favorite, but it really makes a strong impression and sticks in the mind.

I Love This, Thank You

This IS what I want!

wowwowwow!!

This is truly an excellent story for a new writer and I am enjoying it immensely. My only critique is that a few paragraphs here and there would help tremendously instead of it seeming to all be smushed together. Overall, it is fantastic and I would change anything except for making it a few paragraph changes. Just my opinion.

Yes! Later today, if everything goes well. Sorry for the wait!

this is so good! love the cartoonish elements

You've hit a great part in this chapter where they end up bigger than intended. I would not mind at all if that theme were continued! Regardless, loving where you're taking this and I'll keep refreshing for the next chapter!

Holy FUCK! That was such a hot chapter. Many thanks!

And so the origin of Jeremy's world came from what seems to be innocent play.

Amazing!! Thank you so much ;)

Love the Doctor Who reference, keep it up!

I am also not a fan of the 'pics', but I simply don't click. I use my imagination. Most of the times, WC describes his characters well, just as you do. This story was a playful 'adaptation'. I glad it was well received.

It's really good, but slow it down a bit more. The transformation sounds fun and interesting but it ended when I was starting to get into it. I like the descriptions but try to pace yourself a bit more. Still, I am hoping you continue!