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9/26/20, 9:54 PM
excellent writing and characters i loved how much personality dustin had
9/26/20, 8:29 PM
I wonder if the chief will and Jake will get caught too
9/26/20, 8:09 PM
there is a few grammar errors, but it's very interesting and pretty hot. =)
9/26/20, 7:47 PM
I'm not used to you ending a story on a cliffhanger. But I like where this one is going!
9/26/20, 7:14 PM
I think Hypnoguy12 is on to something; Ashton is constantly watching and seeing things so he could be the key to undoing things. He could watch and learn enough to undo his prison. With Lovecraft Country being so on the minds of a lot of people (myself included), you could think along the lines of the Count of Monte Cristo or maybe Shawshank Redemption and have Ashton breaking out of the prison of his own mind and getting revenge on Thomas for all that he's done.
Anonymous
9/26/20, 5:54 PM
I'm hard. Great story!!!
Hunter_C_Wolfe@Hotmail.Com
9/26/20, 5:13 PM
I wish I could be put under like this. I also like ideas of being kept in one of my football uniforms & maybe being made to go to a gym to do forced workouts while in gear, helmet & all. Maybe one day this will happen to me without me even being aware of things.
9/26/20, 5:03 PM
I read the first chapter on AOO and really enjoyed it, so im happy to see the continuation here! Thanks for finishing it! looking forward to the continuation of Breaking boys
9/26/20, 5:01 PM
Wow. Crazy hot story. Aching for the next chapter.
Jason Zhang
9/26/20, 3:56 PM
Glad to see the series continued great stuff!
9/26/20, 3:22 PM
Nipples and milking and vampires, too? I'm in for this ride! GREAT story!!!
9/26/20, 12:17 PM
What a great twist on the traditional vampire story. Nicely done!
9/26/20, 11:58 AM
> loved the story can’t wait for the next chapter Wasn't planning on doing more unless i have a good idea, if you have any let me know here of DM me!
Daddyboi
9/26/20, 11:53 AM
one of my favorites
Anonymous
9/26/20, 11:00 AM
Amazing! This is my favorite story on GSS so far!
Jonanator
9/26/20, 10:02 AM
loved the story can't wait for the next chapter
Anonymous
9/26/20, 9:29 AM
great story loved how he was aware and struggled i could have read that decent all day! continue!
9/26/20, 9:22 AM
Nice! I love stories with an oblivious narrator.
9/26/20, 7:23 AM
I live to serve the Virus
9/26/20, 5:00 AM
Ive had this hypnotized into kissing ass as if it were a real person fantasy floating around my head for awhile now, very happy to see it in a story!
9/26/20, 4:52 AM
This is excellent - thank you for writing it! I hope to see more from you on this theme soon.
Elm
9/26/20, 4:11 AM
loved it!
Leo
9/26/20, 3:35 AM
Are you okay? I miss seeing your sexy stories on here :(
9/26/20, 2:08 AM
so hot! your stories are always really creative, and sexy. the boss should make him crave his farts in the next entry.
9/26/20, 1:42 AM
@The Influencer what maybe you can do is bring in another professor or somehow Charles gets back a little memory of all of the knowledge. There has to be somewhere or something Thomas missed. Most of the time there is a little thing you can do like in the next chapter(if there is one) to set up a fault for Thomas or something he truly screws up on. Every good villain has an equal match. Maybe because Ashton is always watching him take people under he starts to pick up on stuff and techniques, or someone else can be watching through the window and eventually gets the nerve to help. Think of something little that can throw off the entire plan and build up to it. Keep on having Thomas taking someone new under but also start building up the story of his down fall. You got this! If you want to brainstorm ideas I would love to help!
9/26/20, 12:18 AM
Daddies are always a turn on for me! Great Work!
9/25/20, 11:18 PM
The new fetish and bits of sadistic fun here are delicious. (Also loved the gaslighting style of trance in the last chapter.) Good stuff!
9/25/20, 11:11 PM
Thanks for the feedback. I originally intended for this to be a one-shot, but people responded well and I had this idea to continue it. I don't love stories like this because it does just spiral out to the point of being excessive. I don't have a clear idea of where to go with this and I can't think of how Thomas would end up losing, which I agree ought to be the case. I also don't want it to be a "victim of the week" kind of story, because that becomes boring. On the other hand, I really like writing for Ashton and think their dynamic is interesting. No concrete plans to continue at this time, but I'll write other chapters if I come up with anything good.
9/25/20, 9:39 PM
God I love stories where the apprentice becomes the master! Thank you.
9/25/20, 9:30 PM
> Finally, the army guys are back and Devin is so in their sights. I could see him like the deputy is with the sheriff; that might be the best option. > It might be. It all comes down to available time. When I looked at the overview, chapters 10-14 all take place over the course of one day. (You will see it gets later and later in that day as the chapters move along.) Chap 15-16 are the next full day, 17 is the day after that, and 18 is a (time) transitional chapter (but within a few days) and I wrap up Book Two in 19. With the amount I need the Super Soldiers to do -- and the limited time I have for them to do it in -- I don't know when they'd have time to transform Devin. But as I said before, I've come to like Devin, so I don't want to shit on him...