@Rspark: why do you say that? Just cuz he's a well-behaved mama's boy?

What a story. The ending in particular, forced to use their cum on each other. Exquisite! Well done.

oh my God this was hot. i can't wait for the next

I would love it if the younger bro. would continue to give his older bro. more attitude & memory adjustments, making him believe that he has always actually been the younger -little brother. His memories should be altered so that he believes that he was the one bullied in school [and deserved to be],& that he always looked-up to his 'older' & much more manly brother. However he should believe he deserved this treatment by his manly brother & his friends because he's always been such a weak little immature guy..Perhaps he should start behaving in a much more 'child-like' manner, even wetting his pants when he gets excited [& believing that he's always had to wear diapers under his pants. In addition to sucking his thumb]...Also when the two brothers go out, the NOW younger one should feel that all other guys are SUPERIOR to him, like his NOW OLDER brother..& treat them as such.. [also, he would no longer think of his girlfriend, or any women in a sexual manner, but more like mother's or nursemaids & babysitters.... When he thinks of his own dick, it is no longer his formally 8incher, but now IN HIS OWN MIND He sees a tiny, little-boy nub !!!.....Then perhaps [in a chapter #3], in addition to the now younger bro becoming totally gay, His formally younger brother would finally use his machine ON HIMSELF [!!!], and once and for all, turning himself into the manly older brother that he would like to be : HAPPY ENDING !!!

Ethans are always gonna be the sought after bottoms.

Really loved this i love that in the beginning we don't know too many details about what's really going on because Matt isn't ready to integrate this information, and the story unfolds over time. By the time it got to assplay i was over the moon. Also loved the detail about how commenting on how much hair is on a guy's ass counts as art criticism! Ha!

Every story you write is exquisite! Thank!

i loved this so much. keep up the good work.

everything is so good here. the wair was totally worth it

 Jokes aside, great chapter! :) The wait was worth it. The coach has become my favorite character so far and I like his new story arc. I think it gives him a new dimension as a character, other than being the "slutty fuck toy".

Thank you thank you!!~ I'm glad you enjoyed it that much! I think you've probably read by now how I feel about it as well. In terms of Star World, I definitely think we can start to open Jese up to some more slutty scenarios. I think he is still going to be a little bratty or hesitant, but in the right environment, heavily struggle to deny temptation. I think I have a little work to do before he fully starts to slut it up willingly, or at least with more ease, but that is being worked on. Imagine a gaming system able to make you think you are literally in a fantasy world like Lord of the Rings or Final Fantasy, and despite loving competitive PVP/PVE fantasy RPGs, you are so tilted by the mind melting fuck you just got 4 times that you opt to try a dating sim... Partly because you are too scared to try going on a date with someone in real life, but mostly because you are so hyper curious about what might happen in this modded dating sim. I can pretty much mess around with whatever now. The Mindgear opens us to that, but I definitely want to get back into Star World... But also, I think the Mindgear might be the perfect way to introduce an idea very similar to the Island, but different, but as a game. Something to really hook Jese into a gay (hypnosis) world and mess around with his mind.

omgggg finally!!! Thank you for this! It's time to read this and savour every words on this!

Really loving these stories, great progression, I cannot wait to see what happens next <3

Just reread this again. Hoping that you're sfae and well and that you have a new story in the works! Your writing is amazing, and I would love to see more!

amazing chapter,was definitely worth the wait. Intrigued to see what's wrong with Carter... And I agree to the comments above,we hope to see more of captain David. Can't let such a big burly powerful man walk around without a good fuck

This was a fantastic story. Love the older brother being controlled by the younger. Hope they both end up at the same college.

> I enjoyed the start of the story. I am looking forward to reading additional chapters. > I just re-read it myself a few weeks ago to submit it to a story contest. It holds up well. I still am glad the SERIES doesn't directly sequel it, tho. I like the ending as it reads.

So great! I missed this story. I hope we can see more of David in the future :)

to put my raving review short: great chapter. Love cops. Love obliviousness. Came multiple times while reading. Hope Matt gets fucked good soon. Hope his boys will be in on it,too

wow it's worth the wait, i like your story so far. but i hope the MC makes the police captain to be more feminine and girly towards the MC. anyway good job man, you are good writer.

Wow, this was really great. Can't wait for chapter 2!

If I understood Hypnothrill correctly, he wasn't so much complaining about the length of what I wrote overall so much as he thinks it should have been written as two or more chapters, just to keep the chapter size more manageable. If this hadn't been so neatly divided into 4 chapters (Dad, Sean, Ethan, and Dad again to finish), I might've considered it. By way of comparison, I have an upcoming "chapter" for Web of Trust that's going to be about the same length, but because it's part of an ongoing series and has nice places to split, I'll actually be releasing it as three chapters once it's complete.

I really enjoyed this. I like different kinds of stories but it just is such a treat to get stories like this that have such a well-written slow build. I've been waiting for this ever since it was mentioned on the forum and it did not disappoint.

I enjoyed the start of the story. I am looking forward to reading additional chapters.

@hypnothrill I did not finish it in one sitting either but I still kept coming back to read it all because it was so good. Long writing can be tedious I understand: if the writing is bad. But the writing and the hypnosis/mind control procedure was so detailed and well crafted (not just put you under and take your clothes off lazy writing) that it felt good to be patient in completing it. Idk I guess I prefer something well thought out but very long and slow over multiple pumped out stories that takes one sitting to read and can be pumped out simultaneously by the author but is basic as hell and sometimes leave you dissatisfied. Sometimes quantity just works, especially when the author composes it well and knows how to take their time with it. Might not be your cup of tea but I do implore you to read the whole story.

just sitting here waiting for chap 15 :)

@SkySoda: Don't get me wrong; I also loved the slow pace and level of detail. I just wasn't able to finish it all in one sitting. In fact, I stopped reading after the first scene at Vincente's house, and I haven't yet gone back to finish the chapter.

*Whew.* This story is both kinda disturbing and also so damn hot. The dog-headed men with their addictive, aphrodisiac cum, which can break a man's mind if they cum in him because it feels so damn good... Then, them thinking they're going to set out and start "conquering" humans... and immediately getting captured and having their own cum turned on themselves... Oh man. Cotton watching his older brother "break" under the influence of his own cum, and then knowing it's about to happen to him too— Also, this moment where the intelligent, cocky Tristin is close to "breaking" and practically begging for it, and starts licking his captor's hand: > **–Wanna break!–** He wiggled against the frame. One of the humans tentatively extended a hand in front of Tristin’s face. He sniffed it and then started lazily licking at it. *Whew.*

Dude, what an incredible chapter! I wasn't expecting you to update this fast and to actually go all the way like this! This one exceeded all expectations. Everything was so sexy: the sitting on lap and boucing on Dennis crotch, the slutty jock, the sneaking around, Jese fully embracing his inner slut, the rimming, all the dirty talk and the incredibly hot sex these two had. Fuck man, you really outdone yourself! This has become one of my favorite stories, and I'm sure I'll go back to it a lot in the future. Now that Jese accepted his cockslut status, I really, really want to see how this will actually play out inside Star World. Although Dennis domination of Jese is already complete, I think at least one aspect of the manipulation shouldn't change, and that is the manipulation inside the game. I hope Dennis will keep playing with Jese and that Jese never finds out about Dennis mod, and with what happened already, Dennis takes things up a notch inside the game to make things even more sexy and "ecchi". I would love to see Jese embracing a full fledge slutty style inside the game, in part due to Dennis mod but in part because himself now identifies as slut, meaning completely slutty and skimpy permanent outfits for Jese (exposing his fat ass and tight hole at all times) and in-game created situations in which Jese and Dennis have to fuck or do naughty stuff to complete missions and quests, with more butt near face moments, rimming, humping, blowjobs, anal sex, etc. It would be incredible if things in the game start getting increasingly sexual, with Jese not only getting fucked by Dennis inside the game but actually having to put out for other NPC's or even players as well, with Dennis controlling all the strings, obviously. It will be incredible hot if this happens with Jese not actually knowing or realizing it's because of the mod, so maybe he rationalizes this weird changes due to his new self. Now that they finally did it in real life, I'm mostly interested in seeing this all playing out inside the game in a new arch, because in the game everything is possible. As always, these are just suggestions. I can't wait to read more from you, my friend. Outstanding job! Cheers!

Awe that was cute! In a slightly twisted way...