@MonsterMash62 - Fuck man, I just meant to write a quick jerk off story. Now I've got to be thinking about sequels! (Seriously, that's a good idea, I'll put it in the idea box, no promise if it'll ever happen.) @Transformheaven - Thank you sir. Probably not perfect, but good enough to share.

Thank you for your comments! @PupScout you make great points, and the sex drive of the soldiers is actually part of the development of the story. thank you for your tips :) @Lakritz24 I see what you mean, and I agree with you. this story is meant to be a dystopia, these are not good guys. I'll try to make that point clearer as it goes on

Another perfect story

Uih, sehr gefährliche Gedanken. Meiner Meinung nach hätte das so nicht gedacht, geschrieben und herausgegeben werden sollen. Oh-oh.

Hot as always! Feels like a part one maybe. Like part two would be the narrator figuring out what happened, or coming to term with the fact that his ideal guy wanted to string him along and make him do all the work. Be super hot to have him see the changes Ethan’s spell made in him too.

> I remember another omission from Book One that was removed on this site. Bowden emerged as the great one and after he evolved Murdock he planted a personal garden. It didn’t make sense for him to be creating competing Great Ones. Unless his seed would create just the Guard class of symbiotes. > Yes. Exactly why I removed it. Way back when I wrote it, I think I had the idea that he was planning to create a Warrior Class, but it just seemed superfluous in Book Two, so I cut it. > When the Sheriff told Snake the new great one would be a host We control, the Sheriff wasn’t talking about Snake and himself he meant himself and his ball residing symbiote. > Absolutely correct. Because of their human relationship, I think the Sheriff just expected the Deputy to submit to him and allow himself to be controlled by the Sheriff. But it turned out the Deputy held all the power (as bottoms always do) and all he had to do was patiently wait his turn. I'm not sure the Sheriff had always intended to make the Deputy a Great One -- you may remember, he'd only promised the Deputy a plant of his own when the time was right. It wasn't until he realized the Kansas Great One had created strategic flaws that I believe he amended his plan and decided to promote the Deputy, believing the Deputy easiest to control.

Decent idea, far better writing than most. Consider having them do some drinking, one of the four new guys tells a story about two others being in a game of gay chicken. The winner claims he's never been beaten More drinking, a spiral film, then group induction and suggestions. Darren or another can challenge the champion to a game of gay chicken, take it from there. Agree that talk of Alphas and Betas is off-putting. For now, I wouldn't worry about tightening and editing. Tell the story, get it out there, and do some tightening and editing later. Your writing is already well above-average. You can take some time to continue fleshing out the characters. I don't much like Ian's character right now, which means you've already built him enough to draw a reaction. Build the others as well. You're setting this up to be a slow burn, one of the more difficult genres but easily my favorite. You're writing a story, not a quick masturbation prompt.

Watching Snake dump a couple of loads in Deputy would have been hot. When the Sheriff told Snake the new great one would be a host We control, the Sheriff wasn't talking about Snake and himself he meant himself and his ball residing symbiote. I maybe interpreting wrong so unless the great Absman reveals his intentions it will just remain as an itch in our balls.

@MeatDawg - Thanks man! I wrote it after reading some screenwriting stuff, so I guess that structure bled through. Now, you gotta ask yourself - are you a dumbass cause you read these stories, or does this stuff get you off cuz you're a dumbass ;)

@TexMuscle, good catch with the cut vignette. I do have a hazy memory of reading a passage where the Great One was planting a personal garden, but the time between when I first found Pollination and Absman uploading it here is so long that I can't remember. I didn't even notice it was missing until you said something. I don't have anything concrete- just a hunch- but I'm willing to bet that the reason why that passage was removed because Absman, in the 15 years since he wrote Book I, changed the reproductive cycle of the symbionts. For the time being, though, I'm not going to commit my theory to writing because I don't want to tempt poor Absman into spoiling the story. I'm not sure there would be a reason for two Great Ones to come into conflict. The reason why queen bees do is because bee hives are concise, finite communities. Earth is pretty big, and Absman has hinted in the discussion thread for the series that there are parts of North America where a Host would be far enough away from Bowden in Kansas that he could very well be oblivious to Bowden's psychic influence. Presumably, there would need to be multiple Great Ones around the world to coordinate the global population of Hosts, each one strategically placed so that Hosts can't be potentially subject to multiple Great Ones' influence at the same time; vast empires of psychic alien god-kings and their hordes of adoring, mentally enslaved subjects... I'm excited to find out exactly what the result of Bowden and the Deputy presumably being on each other's radar will be, though... As to the situation with the Deputy... maybe. Maybe the Sheriff pumping load after load into him would've worked. But I'm still not sure the Sheriff having a pet Great One at his command would've been good, either. The Deputy basically confirmed that the Sheriff is a sociopath, or at least a manipulative, heartless bastard who knowingly and willingly played on the Deputy's feelings of love for him. As bad as Deputy Great One may be, the Sheriff probably would've been far worse. Snake feeling compelled to feed his "son" a load or two would've been a hot scene, and watching Rugby Boy struggle with a combination of arousal and jealousy at the sight would've been gut-wrenching.

This story has great potential. I would give them a sex drive though. Make it part of the cameraderie, unity in the ranks, etc. The same overdose of testosterone that makes they muscular and lethal killers does the opposite in bonding them together. Maybe program different mindsets as Alpha Dominant, Sigma, Beta, etc. Looking forward to future chapters.

I remember another omission from Book One that was removed on this site. Bowden emerged as the great one and after he evolved Murdock he planted a personal garden. It didn't make sense for him to be creating competing Great Ones. Unless his seed would create just the Guard class of symbiotes. The struggles and battles in the plot are what makes a great story. I still wander if the Sheriff had fucked the deputy with his mind altering cum during his transformation if his control of our new Great One would have remained in tack. With the vine up his ass it would have been a double penetration situation. I thought during the scene where Snaked and Rugby Boy walked in on the transformation that Snake's symbiote would be stimulated and he would plunge into the deputy. But I'm just horny and Absman stories turn my crank. It's like playing the lottery. Half of the fun is thinking of what you spend the money on. Absman stories allow you to picture the different sex scenes.

Amazingly well-written. Congratulations.

Dude, so great!! Felt like the plot of a movie! I'm a dumbass tho, I didn't realize this was your work until the end when I read the comments and saw your response. I totally should've figured this was yours, I mean outside of your name being at the top of the page LOL!! Didn't even see it, just dove right in, my subconscious must've known it was in for some hot DW material. Thanks as always!!

Thanks, Martin!

If you deconstruct it, without the Great Ones, this would be a rather straight-forward pathogen story. The "virus" transfers from one victim to the next until it gets too big to be ignored and either society controls it or it doesn't. The appearance of both Great Ones have disrupted the flow, created chaos, and changed the course of the story. And in both cases, the Great Ones were created by the Sheriff. Hmmmm....

Hope you continue,especially with Jimmy gangbanging.? Little part of me has been dreaming that poor Jimmy's ass and mouth suddenly has some cock growth abilities into the mix.

I would argue that *A Song of Ice and Fire* and *Game of Thrones* don't so much flip the script of fantasy as they apply real-world logic to the fantasy genre, even if it is in contradiction to the conventions of fantasy: the noble and honorable protagonist always makes it out alive, that kind of thing. Martin looked at fantasy and said, "No, telling someone whom you already suspect of murder that you know their terrible secret and try to offer them an out is a terrible idea, you'll wind up dead." And the same could be said *Pollination: The Series* and how it handles mind control erotica: yes, the Sheriff and Snake are strong-willed men, but their plan to create and control a being whose sole purpose is to control and guide men like themselves was probably always going to be doomed to failure. Resisting Bowden's psychic siren song from hundreds of miles away with the help of some subs is one thing, but trying to resist the Deputy's power at point-blank range was laughable. Sure, I had hoped that the Deputy wouldn't be the same as Bowden (and he isn't, in a couple important regards), but I realize now that I thought the Deputy would be in control and not bent on repopulation because that's what I *wanted* to happen. But reality is often harsher than fantasy, as Sheriff and Snake have demonstrated...

Thank you! I wanted to give the appearance that I was setting up a little band of rebels to heroically fight the Kansas Great One -- or romantically, to escape unscathed. @hynothrill kind of half called me out on it a few chapters ago. And I was like, heeheehee, wait till I spring my trap! I confess, it was harder to let the Sheriff go than I thought. But once I began writing the scene -- and it was one I'd seen in my head for many years -- it went down rather quickly. I tweaked the dialogue about a million times, true, but in my head, I did liken it to Ned Stark. But the good news is the Sheriff still has his head (tho maybe nothing in it) and there's LOTS of potential in the New Great One. Villain Upgrade is what comics are all about!

Greatly enjoyed this chapter. It's clever for the author to continually upend the seemingly established rules. That makes the writing all the more hot, as the reader endures mind fuck after mind fuck. Case in point are the Sheriff and Snake; both seemingly had control over their symbiots and were going to make it out unscathed, but then... not so fast. It really reminds me of GOT's execution of Ned Stark, or Dorne's Prince Oberyn's death by combat. Totally unexpected, hugely consequential, and engrossing for readers used to formulatic plots. I applaud you.

i love this story so much

So glad to see you post this on here and still looking forward to what comes next!

Interesante premisa, y parece que nuestro protagonista tiene que aprender a ser más cuidadoso

Absaloutly love this, would love to see more

Vance = scent Vinnie = touch Vernon = implant, however, Vernon has displayed weak scent and touch powers, too (as he did in this vignette w Rugby Boy). Although there's no evidence to support this, his cum may have a different effect orally versus anally. I consider Vance the most powerful of the three -- but not the sharpest tool in the shed. After chap19, I'll be free to discuss this less cryptically.

Its a Good story Plot, really interested to see where this goes....

loved the transformation of matt! would love to see you explore is preppy transformation a bit more!

Sexys hombre fornidos poco a poco cayendo a sus pies es genial <3

This was a good series. The last part wasn't bad, but to me it failed where the others excelled: We're almost entirely out of Tommy's head and his feelings aren't described at all.

> Sorry to see him lose Rugby boy to a Scenter I'm fairly confident Vernon is the Implanter? We've seen the Vance and Vinnie in action with the Wiz and Willis, Vance used his scent and pheromones to enthrall the Wiz, Vinnie used his pollen to make Willis suggestible and prime him for a plant. I could have that mixed up in my head, though. In the discussion thread on the forums, Absman confirmed that we haven't seen Vernon in action, and we haven't gotten to see anybody get bonded with a symbiont via sex. A scenario which I hope we get a very detailed description of.