Wow, this was really great. Can't wait for chapter 2!

If I understood Hypnothrill correctly, he wasn't so much complaining about the length of what I wrote overall so much as he thinks it should have been written as two or more chapters, just to keep the chapter size more manageable. If this hadn't been so neatly divided into 4 chapters (Dad, Sean, Ethan, and Dad again to finish), I might've considered it. By way of comparison, I have an upcoming "chapter" for Web of Trust that's going to be about the same length, but because it's part of an ongoing series and has nice places to split, I'll actually be releasing it as three chapters once it's complete.

I really enjoyed this. I like different kinds of stories but it just is such a treat to get stories like this that have such a well-written slow build. I've been waiting for this ever since it was mentioned on the forum and it did not disappoint.

I enjoyed the start of the story. I am looking forward to reading additional chapters.

@hypnothrill I did not finish it in one sitting either but I still kept coming back to read it all because it was so good. Long writing can be tedious I understand: if the writing is bad. But the writing and the hypnosis/mind control procedure was so detailed and well crafted (not just put you under and take your clothes off lazy writing) that it felt good to be patient in completing it. Idk I guess I prefer something well thought out but very long and slow over multiple pumped out stories that takes one sitting to read and can be pumped out simultaneously by the author but is basic as hell and sometimes leave you dissatisfied. Sometimes quantity just works, especially when the author composes it well and knows how to take their time with it. Might not be your cup of tea but I do implore you to read the whole story.

just sitting here waiting for chap 15 :)

@SkySoda: Don't get me wrong; I also loved the slow pace and level of detail. I just wasn't able to finish it all in one sitting. In fact, I stopped reading after the first scene at Vincente's house, and I haven't yet gone back to finish the chapter.

*Whew.* This story is both kinda disturbing and also so damn hot. The dog-headed men with their addictive, aphrodisiac cum, which can break a man's mind if they cum in him because it feels so damn good... Then, them thinking they're going to set out and start "conquering" humans... and immediately getting captured and having their own cum turned on themselves... Oh man. Cotton watching his older brother "break" under the influence of his own cum, and then knowing it's about to happen to him too— Also, this moment where the intelligent, cocky Tristin is close to "breaking" and practically begging for it, and starts licking his captor's hand: > **–Wanna break!–** He wiggled against the frame. One of the humans tentatively extended a hand in front of Tristin’s face. He sniffed it and then started lazily licking at it. *Whew.*

Dude, what an incredible chapter! I wasn't expecting you to update this fast and to actually go all the way like this! This one exceeded all expectations. Everything was so sexy: the sitting on lap and boucing on Dennis crotch, the slutty jock, the sneaking around, Jese fully embracing his inner slut, the rimming, all the dirty talk and the incredibly hot sex these two had. Fuck man, you really outdone yourself! This has become one of my favorite stories, and I'm sure I'll go back to it a lot in the future. Now that Jese accepted his cockslut status, I really, really want to see how this will actually play out inside Star World. Although Dennis domination of Jese is already complete, I think at least one aspect of the manipulation shouldn't change, and that is the manipulation inside the game. I hope Dennis will keep playing with Jese and that Jese never finds out about Dennis mod, and with what happened already, Dennis takes things up a notch inside the game to make things even more sexy and "ecchi". I would love to see Jese embracing a full fledge slutty style inside the game, in part due to Dennis mod but in part because himself now identifies as slut, meaning completely slutty and skimpy permanent outfits for Jese (exposing his fat ass and tight hole at all times) and in-game created situations in which Jese and Dennis have to fuck or do naughty stuff to complete missions and quests, with more butt near face moments, rimming, humping, blowjobs, anal sex, etc. It would be incredible if things in the game start getting increasingly sexual, with Jese not only getting fucked by Dennis inside the game but actually having to put out for other NPC's or even players as well, with Dennis controlling all the strings, obviously. It will be incredible hot if this happens with Jese not actually knowing or realizing it's because of the mod, so maybe he rationalizes this weird changes due to his new self. Now that they finally did it in real life, I'm mostly interested in seeing this all playing out inside the game in a new arch, because in the game everything is possible. As always, these are just suggestions. I can't wait to read more from you, my friend. Outstanding job! Cheers!

Awe that was cute! In a slightly twisted way...

The issue is that Dennis isn't that powerful as an actual hypnotist relative to the story. And while he knows the craft quite well, he still needs work. He can hypnotize some people in the right setting, but to get someone covertly? Difficult for him still. Thankfully in this technological world, he has mastered his selected craft. Coding, and hacking. Thanks to that, he can still live the dream of being a master hypnotizer and manipulator. Indirectly, but directly. The lap thing is one of those things that sneak up on you (me as Jese in this scenario). Was just writing and thought "it would be really hot if I stumbled into his lap. That would make me feel really submissive if it happened to me." I remember meeting some guy on grindr. Kind of rushed into things. He striped down and got comfy on his couch, cock up in the air. My slut mind was immediately like "get in this top's lap". I did, I got very comfortable, and it was amazing. When you sit in someone's lap, you just are theres, ya know?

Oooh maybe Michael and his bros can ask Dan for help in creating a website they can better show themselves off on. hehe A website that Dan can design it so he gets like 10% of everything made by each of their male members. hehe

Well, my easy answer is that Dan finds himself going down a rabbit hole. He gets Brad because Brad is trying to control Michael. He gets their other friends cause they notice something is going on and Dan needs to make sure his actions don't get revealed. They probably would have little issue with watching some porn given to them by their bro Brad - especially if it has some hot bitches and hoes. hehe What can I say, I am a harem lover. I love the idea of a master having a stable of boys who serve him. And yes, I consider these masculine macho men 'boys' when it comes to this. hehe I actually like younger brothers taking charge and sexually dominating older brothers. (The fact that I am an only child makes this a fascinating thing to like, lol) The only issue here is that I actually liked how you represented Brad and so I am good with him being the top and such. The fact is he didn't really seem that homophobic, more doing it because it was expected. Like when Michael was all like 'fag this and fag that' Brad just made comments about it is what it is and one gotta do what benefits them the most. He seems very logical. Plus, as I said, it was totally hot reading him give commands to Michael, commands that were followed out. -- I really like how the family so far are oblivious to the changes. How things seem normal and natural to them all. How they take what they expected certain things mean and turn it to their new world. Like Bob thinks Bitches do certain thing, and as he is a Bitch for Dan he should do certain things to. Michael things Fags do certain things, and as he becomes more a 'fag' the more he will do certain things to - like happily submit to men for cock and such. (Like I said I think Dan needs to separate Gay and Fag in Michael's mind, one is dominant and one is the subby needy cock sucking and being fucked slut). Maybe the other brother can be 'Boy' or 'Pet' or some other one word thing and because of that he begins to act a certain way.

I loved it, as I always say, big men as victims of smaller one (or younger) are the best <3

really enjoying it so far! Love the way you're creating tension

@Heru Kane. Michael having a cam partner sounds fun. But what would their other bros think about it? What would happen if Brad's younger brother found out and used that info in his benefit? It’s a fun situation for a side story ;) @BobbyBlobfish. Yes, it's kinda funny how the Summers are oblivious of the changes. He had already a figurative leash on him! (maybe a literal leash later). About the image, it would bother you that I would keep adding images to the next chapters? I haven't made up my mind yet, so I would like to hear the opinion of someone who doesn't like "Michael". @NZController. I'm glad you liked "Michael". Before I show you my vision of Bob (if I ever do) I would like to know how you imagine him or who you would cast for his role in a porn version of the story. @Udems. I see you're a practical person! It would be a shame to waste such a hot jock! All his body needs to be used ;)

So I have to say I did not realize how, well, arousing the whole having someone sit on my lap and bounce like a good boy concept was till I read this and that scene sort of killed me, in all sorts of good ways. The same with the whole having someone sit in front of me bouncing up against my crotch as the mount moves. (Obviously I am Dennis in this scenario, lol). So yeah, this story called to me particularly hard. That and how submissive and wanton Jese got, ooh boy was that hot. So, honestly, and I doubt you would go this way, but I totally see Dennis finding a way to make Colin his as well. Though maybe in such a way that Jese never realizes that his brother is also controlled. hehe

Sorry but I strongly disagree with Hypnothrill imo. I found your long submission thrilling and refreshing. Sometimes a good hypnosis conversion needs some length and detail to it. It is beautifully written and I do not usually read stories where the 1st person victim. U and swizzington are doing good work lol

Thank you thank you~ One of my favorite things about writing these stories is describing my fall to the baddies. It works to different effect with different styles, but for the most part it works out. Glad you enjoy that part as well. I think that is why I tend to enjoy first person style, despite 3rd person being the norm. Yeah, Colin is definitely a bomb to consider. He is less of a threat in terms of the online stuff, since Colin doesn't really game so he probably wouldn't ever discover the manipulation directly. I'd imagine he would have to catch the two in the act, in real life, or half-and-half (if Dennis tried sneaking into his room mid session again). Could be something to explore down the road, or maybe its just a nice way to keep Jese on his toes. That desire of needing to make sure his brother doesn't find out, but still getting cock. Jese probably won't go out of his way to risk it for the biscuit, but the world is a big place. Once Jese figures out what he wants, he will realize what to do. Although Dennis will probably still force him to risk during his next drunk sleepover.

I meant that only those 2 can make wishes or the whole school can?

Damn this story has turned out to be amazing. One of my favorite characteristics in these stories is watching the "victim" struggle and deal with his new identity and your writing covers that in spades! I love it. I'm just wondering: if Colin finds out that Dennis influenced his younger brother, he might be furious with Dennis. So Jese need not be so fearful.

Oh, Darkblade2814. How do you know it hasn't affected the whole school? I guess only time will tell. *wink*

I think he will, in the end for the sake of getting the money for his alpha Dan. He would sell every part of his body there, like his ass, his feet, just for the sake to get the most of money he can ;)

will the wishes be restricted by just those two or will it affect the whole school?

Very excited to see where this goes!

Love the power reversal! (and the inclusion of feet)

Yeah, the part of me that played Dennis definitely made the Jese part of me quiver when I got pulled into his lap. But thanks for the very kind compliments! Glad you enjoy my writing, and hopefully I will have many more stories to share. Working on a special story for a friend, and then I think right back into a new arc of Star World. Might dance with the writing competition halloween thing. @Heru. Thanks as always for the kind words. Sounds like I got you with this one. And I got myself too. I enjoy sex, but I really felt like I got into it a lot this chapter.

I cant even. Everything you write is just pure gold, how do you do it?! I wish there were words to describe how much i love your work but there aren't. this was another amazing chapter to another amazing series Please never stop writing! And i dont blame you for falling in love with Dennis a bit, wish there was a man like him in my life lol. with sex that hot id marry him haha

Great story! I loved it so much specially since I can relate with Vicente (not only for his motivations but as a latino too). I found hot that finally a latino is in charge. Im excited to see what comes next!

Michael looks Hot! can't wait to see him get taken down a peg or 2. Would also like to see what Bob looks like :D