Recent Comments

Swizzington
5/31/20, 7:53 PM
Thanks for your feedback. You make a good point. I agree this story works best as a single piece (which was always the intent when I started writing). I guess when making the decision to chapter or not, I should focus less on the number of words and more on what the goal of the writing is. :-)
5/31/20, 7:37 PM
more please
5/31/20, 7:24 PM
the ending was a tiiny bit abrupt but God this is such a hot story
Anonymous
5/31/20, 7:22 PM
Damn, but this is really hot! Whew. Also, I appreciated it being posted as a single story. I felt like what made it so damn hot and intense was how it was this uninterrupted flow of gradual corruption, start to finish. I feel like the gradual-MC stories are hard to do well, and take a lot of attention and patience on the part of the author, but they are *so* hot when the author pulls them off. If this story had been broken up into chapters, I don't think it would have worked as well for me. If I wasn't reading it in one go, I wouldn't have found it as intense as I did. I think the effect would have felt diluted. So, all that to say, I'm glad you posted it as is!
5/31/20, 6:00 PM
This story has it all...it's topical, funny, hot, and surprising. As always, I love your work!
May 30, 2020
5/31/20, 5:39 PM
wow! good start, can't wait for the next chapter.
KKA
5/31/20, 4:56 PM
this reads so much like a Bara by Itto Mentaiko ! A very well crafted story!
5/31/20, 4:23 PM
Medetashi, medetashi. Thank you for creating a wonderful story set in Japan. It was truly an enjoyable experience.
5/31/20, 4:21 PM
Chad, as to Bolin, I like Bolin generally (even though I myself am a waterbender *ie* I practice taiji); he has the spirit of playfulness and innocence that Aang had in the first series. I liked that story line too. One of the reasons that picture is on my profile is that he's controlled in that part of the story. Plus he's in uniform as well. It's also my image on Discord so another reason why Bolin is there. That storyline makes me want to write a story set in Republic City or maybe Ba Sing Se whether the Dai Li are still doing their techniques; it's on the long list of ideas for writing, whether I'll actually do it only time can tell.
5/31/20, 4:18 PM
Super hot!