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6/9/23, 8:07 PM
Sometimes you make it so hard for me to chose my favorite. The deltas always capture my heart, especially when they're cheeky. The fact that even though he was hurt Oak was the one to be worried about Skippy means a lot. But at the same time, Sparky's comment caught me so unprepared that it legit made me laugh and remember how brilliant Sparky was in his chapters. Also seeing things from Titan's POV again shows once again how caring and fatherly he is. I'm afraid we'll need a flashback mini plot about the pack and how they've came together.

6/10/23, 7:16 AM
@Reader The story of how the pack met is gonna be kinda slowly explained as we go on.
6/9/23, 6:18 PM
Loved the new chapter very cute although it felt very short.

6/10/23, 7:14 AM
@[nerdysuitedbaby](/user/show/164769) This chapter was originally one chapter that ended up over 7000 words. So I ended up splitting it up a bit to make it easier to read.
6/10/23, 7:03 AM
I Love this Story
Anonymous
6/10/23, 5:41 AM
Amazing story. Hooked.
6/10/23, 4:28 AM
Absolutely excellent mix of perspective and kinks. Loved the level of mindfucked that Adam is subjected to. Please keep it up!
Kippers
6/10/23, 3:48 AM
Hot revenge story! It would be even better if we had a glimpse of his stripper gigs, and if he actually prostituted himself under the good doctor's direction. So hot thinking of him in various wardrobe, stripping it off on stage, and being so turned on by all the male attention. Then he could invite his best tippers to the back room, where they could show appreciation for his hot ass play with their stiff cocks.
Kippers
6/10/23, 2:51 AM
Hot revenge story! Very well written, and it kept me bone hard.
Jun 9, 2023
6/9/23, 3:07 PM
Nice! Fun and cute and great. Good story!

6/10/23, 2:10 AM
@[Heru Kane](/user/show/56823) thanks so much!
4/27/18, 1:48 PM
Nice idea! I love how the situation you set up (white guy disliking black man) makes the (forced) sex even more hotter. It's wonderful to watch the guy slowly change his attitude. Thanks!

6/10/23, 1:37 AM
@[nycboot](/user/show/131279) Right!, so hot n tantalizing
6/10/23, 1:08 AM
OK, the following reaction might be considered a spoiler, so make sure you've read the whole chapter before reading any further. ... ... ... Still here? Good! 'Cause here it comes: MALLORYYYYYYYY!!! :heart_eyes: And Gary too! hahah I really love Domination, it must be one of my all-time favourites, so this was truly a great surprise! And it makes so much sense, to be honest. Every time someone gets a way to potentially enslave the whole population this organization appears and deals with the people involved. Obezol seems like a potent tool of massive enslavement, so no wonder Mallory is there. The same way Domination did with The Game and The Beach, this ending gives a hint of how the previous installment unfolded. So I see Mallory and Gary are now working together. This feels actually so nice. Gary was a good guy who had just had really bad luck at life, so he deserves some stability and purpose, even if that means to leave behind everything he was. Other than his books, there was not much there, so this has to be an improvements. All these AI men were so good! I liked how Ahmed was faithful and clever to the point of reading the situation and stopping the most probable threats before they happened. The different personalities between characters where nice too, although maybe the room ended up a bit too crowded ;) Yet, I think you solved the action wonderfully. I'm more excited about the control and the progressive changes in the people rather than in the actual sex, but your descriptions are always on point and erotic. Despite it all, I hope Ernest gets to live a good life. He fell onto the dark side of control, but his original intentions before that were always benevolent. Thank you for this series! It was a nice trip.
6/10/23, 12:29 AM
Just wanted to say I was a big fan of this series and I hope you have a chance to continue it some day :)
6/9/23, 11:32 PM
Wonderful!
6/9/23, 11:30 PM
Sorry, but this just... it doesn't make any _sense_. Things happen that were never set up (or directly contradict the previous chapter/paragraphs) — even basic, fundamental stuff like John (apparently) offering to give up his own muscle to Jack. That's **never explained** in the story, it's just suddenly what's happening out of nowhere. The procedure — which also starts out of nowhere, one second John and Jack are sitting in the waiting room, the next moment the transfer is already in progress — goes from being a muscle-transference process in chapter 1, to suddenly transferring attributes that have nothing to do with muscle, like bone density and height, in chapter 2. Having an AI generate a starting point for a story is fine, but a human editor still needs to check it for basic coherence afterwards.
Callimachus
6/9/23, 11:22 PM
Great story, and great writing. All I can say is that I still hope the older brothers would come to see themselves as their younger brother's fuck toys, and crave his dick, if not for its own sake, than at least for the pain/humiliation it inflicts on them.
Anonymous
6/9/23, 10:43 PM
This is hot!! Please make the next chapter
6/8/23, 12:52 PM
Awesome story! Will there be further adventures of the four of them?

6/8/23, 1:12 PM
@[Cutlerfan](/user/show/14171) If inspiration strikes. Haha. I'm totally open to suggestions, too.

6/8/23, 9:15 PM
@[Neiotik](/user/show/925823) How about an orgy as they explore their new bodies, but then pair them off into couples. You could later have a bunch of pirates try to raid the island for a hideout and have the merman slowly seduce the whole crew.

6/9/23, 12:35 PM
@[master1](/user/show/534520) Sounds awesome.

6/9/23, 6:22 PM
@[master1](/user/show/534520) I second that motion 🥰
Anonymous
6/9/23, 5:23 PM
Spectacular.....thank you !!
EJG
6/9/23, 5:15 PM
Hot little story.I second a hope 4 more.? What makes it hot is the vague air that in your reality,others (the tutor,perhaps the students?) seem to accept the poor lads slutty status as normal.
6/9/23, 4:23 PM
Seems to me Melissa did these two a huge favor --and the readers. I am loving this so much, and you are very good at the erotic pacing too!
6/6/23, 3:18 PM
Excellent episode!

6/9/23, 2:34 PM
@[Cutlerfan](/user/show/14171) Thank you
Anonymous
6/9/23, 2:33 PM
I hope the story continues
Dec 25, 2018
DadTopper/Bearded Bard
6/9/23, 1:21 PM
This toy exists to be milked by daddy’s ass. If it makes a mess, it cleans it up. A responsible toy fucks like a real man and adapts to serve any kinks like any good toy should Sven awoke to wild grunts above him. The muscular hairy beast riding his fat cock was the daddy of his dreams. His white-silver hair and thick cropped white beard was slick with sweat. The epitome of masculinity rode Sven’s dick with abandon, tweaking his fatty pecs as his slight gut bounced. Sven grabbed the sides of the red jockstrap encasing his daddy’s fat ass, furiously pistoning in and out of his tight hole. All the while the voice in his head repeated “FUCK IT. FUCK IT. FUCK IT. FUCK IT.”
6/9/23, 1:09 PM
A wonderful slow burn story. Extremely hot!
Anonymous
6/8/23, 9:13 PM
As interesting as this was, this felt like it was written by an AI, especially the ending and lack of any dialogue. Try rewriting this but without using AI.

6/8/23, 9:36 PM
@Anonymous Hey, I didn't use AI to write that story, like I didn't use AI to write any of my stories. The lack of dialogues is only due to the fact that I'm not really good at writing interactions between the characters.

Martin
6/9/23, 7:47 AM
@Anonymous AIs in general have multiple dangers. One of them is that suddenly every creative output is evaluated and might be blamed to be AI generated. That's just not fair to anyone. I'm sure in a couple of months(!) no human(!) will be able to tell whether a creative work has been created by a human or AI anyway. Constructive criticism is always welcome, of course, but please consider that there is a human being (usually :laughing:) at the other end who has feelings and the only reason to write stories here is to give fun, joy and sexual release to other people. That's always something to appreciate!
6/9/23, 5:41 AM
One of the better stories in this site. 2009... Not hold my breath for a sequel 🥺
6/9/23, 4:38 AM
Finally someone that writes merman stories, I love them. But I would love this more if you wrote more about the transformation
Fishboy
6/9/23, 4:22 AM
I am just loving these mermen stories! Please continue.
6/8/23, 2:35 PM
Poetic justice is having Jack become the fuck toy of Matt as Cal is of Billy

6/8/23, 6:21 PM
@[br6205](/user/show/10027864) Whatever happens…Jake doesn’t get a sat

6/8/23, 6:38 PM
@[SlaveBoyJG](/user/show/10017787) Whatever happens…Jake doesn’t get a sat What doesn't Jake get?

6/8/23, 6:43 PM
@[br6205](/user/show/10027864) *say 😂. My bad

6/8/23, 6:51 PM
@[SlaveBoyJG](/user/show/10017787) Welcome to my club! So, Jake will emerge a a compliant slave. Frankly I hope Jake won't end up like his poor soul ex fuck buddy.

6/8/23, 6:54 PM
@[br6205](/user/show/10027864) We’ll have to see😈

6/8/23, 7:00 PM
@[SlaveBoyJG](/user/show/10017787) Thanks. You know I have positive feelings for Matt& would love to see Jake develop a positive feeling for him. You have left indication he has that in this chapter. In any case TY for extensive reponses they are much appreciated.

6/8/23, 7:02 PM
@[br6205](/user/show/10027864) You’re welcome 💜💜

6/8/23, 7:15 PM
@[br6205](/user/show/10027864) To some extent I hope he does. Personally, I'm all for slaves being in rubber. And seeing muscled jocks like Jake and Callum in rubber is one the hottest things.

6/8/23, 7:22 PM
@[Marik29](/user/show/10021139) I like my slaves naked & hairless! As to Callum, I wish he were more like Jake & not totally broken..But we all have our likes & I respect yours as well.

6/9/23, 1:17 AM
@[br6205](/user/show/10027864) I definitely agree on the hairless part. It makes the body more 'open' for lack of a better word. And there is an appeal to being naked or mostly. Being how Matt is right now with a jockstrap works too depending on what you're going for. Maybe even a thong. Just add the collar and cage, maybe restraints and the slave is set.
6/8/23, 11:22 PM
Beautifully done, my only criticism being that I was left wanting so much more.