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Anonymous
5/27/20, 12:00 AM
terrific work
5/26/20, 11:10 PM
Oh my - FANTASTIC! Really FANTASTIC!
May 26, 2020
5/26/20, 10:42 PM
Really enjoyed these detailed descriptions and the slow burn of it! I agree that it was easy to picture (not to mention pleasing to picture).
5/26/20, 9:50 PM
i do like this story and want to read more weather it is the next chapter or a new store I think that you're writing style is a bit refreshing being concise and to the point
5/26/20, 9:11 PM
i'm ready for this ride -- let's go!
Anonymous
5/26/20, 9:04 PM
I loved this! I can't wait for more
5/26/20, 8:40 PM
I think you've got a good premise here, but a story is more than just a premise, and you need to work on your storytelling techniques. Specifically, here are three things you need to think about: 1) Characterization--Who is "Rubber Robin"? Why should we care about what happens to him? 2) Motivations--Why do the vampires decide to choose Rubber Robin to become their new master? Why isn't he the one serving them? 3) Pacing--Everything is happening very quickly, and at the end, we even get Rubber Robin explaining his plan for what will happen next. There's no chance to enjoy the atmosphere when it's non-stop plot.
May 26, 2020
5/26/20, 8:36 PM
Thanks guys! I'm sad can't always deliver this level of creativity and imagery - I think I started this a few years back actually, while trapped at a summer house with my relatives, and just rediscovered it while looking for something else. I'm glad you like it! Also, I made it a community series in case anyone wants to use this as a jumping-off point - I don't know if I'll ever circle back to this idea, so I want to make sure that if people like it, they can write more of it :D
5/26/20, 8:18 PM
I agree--the gradual changes like the smoking and the accent are SO hot and so wonderfully written! Can't wait for the next chapter!
May 26, 2020
5/26/20, 7:37 PM
Really well written. Very vivid imagery and descriptions. I could actually visualize the entire cabin from your text. Very neat idea. I really enjoyed this. Just a beautiful story overall. Hot as well :-)