Recent Comments

6/9/20, 5:12 AM
That was awesome! I would love to read your updates if you decided to make it a series.
6/9/20, 4:11 AM
Thanks for the nice comments, everyone. Glad you all enjoyed the story!
6/9/20, 3:56 AM
Wow! I sure hope so! That was just great!
6/9/20, 2:55 AM
Incredibly hot and I'm thankful the antagonist isn't a typical revenge-on-homophobe wish fulfillment thing. I love it when they're surprised at what they can get away with.
Willie Cici
6/9/20, 2:31 AM
I agree. Really good story, well-written.
Muscle-Flex
6/9/20, 1:16 AM
Whew! This was a hot story. Fun idea! And yes, this would definitely make a great series.
MuscleSon69
6/9/20, 12:38 AM
Great job! How about more with each guy at that frat. Maybe 2 or 3 guys at a time with the jock or the whole group. That would be REALLY hot! Keep going, we want more!
6/9/20, 12:10 AM
just the right length, loved the decisions and choices. Wonderful!
Anonymous
6/9/20, 12:06 AM
This is fantastic!
6/9/20, 12:01 AM
I'm definitely hoping for another story. love this!!
Anonymous
6/8/20, 11:41 PM
This is great! I really enjoyed reading this.
6/8/20, 11:30 PM
Great story - I'd like to see this universe fleshed out.
6/8/20, 11:26 PM
More please?
Anonymous
6/8/20, 10:27 PM
This was awesome! I can't wait for more!
6/8/20, 10:03 PM
Two couples accidentally walks in: two japanese exchange student girls with their boyfriends. The japanese girls change to their boyfriends dismay (at first) into big hunks, then their boyfriends follow!
6/8/20, 9:58 PM
Love this. I hope you'll continue.
6/8/20, 9:19 PM
Thanks for the feedback everyone! It is greatly appreciated I am having a friend proof me from now on to avoid all the silly spelling errors! I will attempt to do a chapter 2 for this as well as include a link to the photo that inspired it.
6/8/20, 8:56 PM
Really enjoyed this and hope you'll continue! I agree about the proofreading! Also, pacing-wise, some of the story goes really fast (the beginning and ending especially -- you hit your stride in the middle). I'm curious about the terms of this little contract and how being taken by an incubus might change the main character.
6/8/20, 8:32 PM
Really fun ideas, but to me the story's a little too fast-paced. I think it would be hotter if you depicted some key moments (like Freddy's transformation) in greater detail.
6/8/20, 8:11 PM
Good concept and very well written. I hope there is a way for Marcus to regain his length.
Anonymous
6/8/20, 8:06 PM
Best story on here in a long while, well done. You've got a nice writing style.
Nov 1, 2013
Beefysub
6/8/20, 8:04 PM
It really does need a sequel!
Martin
6/8/20, 8:01 PM
Hi Master Primus, please assign your stories to the series. You have to enter the name of the series in the field "series name" when submitting your story (in your case "How it all began."). If you don't do that, your stories will be separate and not shown as a series. So far I've fixed it each time for you myself..
EJG
6/8/20, 7:39 PM
This is great,..but i'm fantasising about poor Marcus making the OTHER GUYS grow bigger muscles,bigger cocks. That will be my fantasy.Though this is still great
6/8/20, 7:22 PM
Oh yeah, hot stuff with the promise of more to cum!
6/8/20, 6:57 PM
Ok so this story is not written by myself people. I don't get if you people can differentiate between a fiction and a real deal or not. It is written by slave Kyle who is not a professional writer. the purpose was to show you subs how he was dominated. So if you still can't understand well then its not my problem. And for those who wants to be a slave send me an email don't comment here as I usually don't read them.
Btm
6/8/20, 5:30 PM
i loved this so much!
6/8/20, 5:20 PM
I was a big fan of mindless mike too, keep it comin~
6/8/20, 5:12 PM
I agree with JockMatt that the paragraphs need work, remember to start a new one when a new character starts talking and when you change subject/topic. I also agree with Thom and Gymini29 that Trevor needs to have some changes of his own. I think the most interesting place this story could now go is outside the box. So far all the changes have been typical of this type of story and tame, bigger pecs and cocks (if anything they sound far too big for plausibility, 2.5 inch nipples?!) and you could do some more unusual changes. Also why not add drama by having the changes cause problems. Constant sex is great but a story can be more than hot sex and guys getting horny at their own muscles. Just something for you to think about, keep it up!
6/8/20, 4:09 PM
@robbotg99x4you and @Martin -- thanks so much for your comments! It's definitely good to know that the Machine is having its desired effect on you ;). It's really encouraging to hear from you!