I’ll start by commenting, hoping I haven’t before, on how much Nu’s writing has improved. There is so much character development in this story, and it’s so well done. I love Linden’s Throne, but this story is so much smoother and the character beats tug so much harder on the right part of my feels. I love the character development in this story as a whole, but especially this chapter in particular. Freddy working through his feelings and figuring himself out, and confronting his feelings and the things he’s been ignoring, is great and relatable. And it was satisfying to see Freddy confront some truths about himself. I’ve been waiting for that and wanting it for a few chapters at least now. Reminds me of an argument between two married characters on Succession recently. It was really cathartic. Besides the Freddy of it all, Uri revealing some really big shit about himself, and not reflecting on it at all, is also great. And then Uri, in predictable Uri fashion, makes a stupid wish that eliminates even the possibility of Freddy actually even proving that he likes Uri. So now he didn’t get what he really wanted and was scared to ask for, and he’s made his own prophecy true, because how is Freddy going to forgive this? Pretending that Nu didn’t have a happy ending in mind. Speaking of happy endings… Freddy having his agency taken away wasn’t horrifying to me because a) it was really hot b) he finds it really hot and doesn’t have enough time to dwell on it because of the pheromones and c) I’m confident that Nu has a happy ending in mind and that’s what Freddy’s wish is going to result in. Bryant being there is going to change things. Bryant being a room mate now is going to change things. I actually love character assassination stories. It’s a guilty pleasure, but only works for me if I know the character’s destroyed can reclaim their identity, or if the characters are so shallow that I don’t care about them. In this story, Nu balanced things perfectly so that I care about Freddy and it felt like maybe he’s fucked (being not fucked) but I’m so confident that his wish at the end will change things for all of them in a positive way that I’m not bothered at all by Freddy’s sudden change into a himbo. Ok, besides all of that, or partially because of it, it was an incredibly hot chapter again. Freddy getting checked out by guys when walking around in the Tom of Finland outfit is hot. Then him getting turned on thinking about it and jerking off in the changing room, is hot. Then getting turned into a fuck machine stud top, is hot. Even his reaction to Bryant showing up and trying to be honest with Bryant but unable to stop himself from being happy and excited about fucking Uri some more, is hot. I’m very eager to read the next and final chapter. I am deliberately not guessing at what Freddy’s wish was, so that I’m surprised by it. I’m excited to see how all 3 of the roommates end up. I’m also not saying I expect more, but I am excited to think that this might not be the last thing that Nu writes and that he’ll still write more stories as good as or better than this. I’m am very happy this was continued and done so well. I am interested in anything Nu writes but this is definitely my favorite so far.

Nice start! Very intrigued to see where this leads.

Like the slow burn. Almost like edging since we know the premise this story is based. Keep going.

I can only echo what everyone else has said; you came in with a very good introduction to you and your writing. I thoroughly enjoyed it and look forward to seeing what comes next.

What a great start! Would’ve not have guessed this is just your first story given level of detail and slow buildup.

good story with focus on hypnosis. Let us see more

Absolutely LOVE what you’re setting up here! Really hope it’s not the last we see of Anton, Paul and Clay. But more importantly, really hope this isn’t the last we see of you as a writer :)

Amazing first story! I'm looking forward to more misadventures within the workplace, definitely wish I could program my employees~

This is a great story to make your debut with! I hope we get to see more of Clay and his new stable of obedient wage slaves haha

I absolutely loved the first half of this. Freddy's journey of self discovery, untangling which things were his fault and which were the rock's, and the way you could see him regaining control. Made the whole journey worth it. Uri is the antagonist, and the type of guy a lot of people know in real life and dislike, but seeing him feel inferior to a literal dildo does a great job of showing his interiority and making him sympathetic, right before he does something absolutely monstrous and selfish. He comes off as Sex obsessed, but i think that's a combination of enjoying it, bottom daze cutting his anxieties, and viewing it as the only thing people like about him. So he turns himself into the ideal bottom, hoping that earns him love. I still don't like him (which isn't necessary) but i how he can come to the same self discovery as Freddy and find happiness.

You need to expand this story into more chapters.

Omg you have no idea how much you make me HATE Uri. He’s such a prick, robbing our protagonist from all of his personal growth. I was rooting so hard for Freddy until Uri made that fucking wish. GOD DAMN IT. I really hope Freddy gets out and away from this abusive, immoral and stupid roommate of his. GOD Uri makes me mad! I really hope this ends well for Freddy and that Uri finally gets some taste of his own medicine. After all, Uri is so superficial he doesn’t want love but only sex. It infuriates me so much. The fucker doesn’t deserve love or a happy ending. Poor Bryant, maybe he’s in love with Uri, but he doesn’t have an ounce of an idea how TRASH that guy is. Anyway, I can’t wait to see how this story ends! I really hope it ends well for Freddy, but this chapter seems to leave little hope for that (especially with the few times Freddy mentioned he lost and Uri won). I feel so bad for Freddy :( Loved the buildup and how vivid you depict the characters (hence why my hate for Uri is so strong LOL). Keep up the great work!

Yowza!! 🫣

Great start ! Hope Max will make Alex into leather too :wink:

II am so happy of your story ratings :heart_eyes: If you think this chapter is hot and full of mind controlling, you can't imagine what Chapter 4 - Mindfucked Muscle Show is. > Dumblex released a guttural moan as he felt me enter him, his body stiffening against the exquisite invasion. His muscles clenched as he acclimatized to the sensation, his face a cocktail of intense pleasure and the exertion of holding the plank. > "Now, Dumblex," I whispered, my voice a velvety murmur against his ear, "I want you to do push-ups. And while you're at it, stroke yourself. I want to see those muscles in your arms work double-time. I want you to show me how strong you really are." I will post Chapter 3 - Dumblex here soon, check out my [profile](https://onlyfans.com/606868020/fantasy_whispers) to read it now before anyone else!

Oh Hypno thrill... You've done it again... 💦

II am so happy of your story ratings :heart_eyes: If you think this chapter is hot and full of mind controlling, you can't imagine what Chapter 4 - Mindfucked Muscle Show is. > Dumblex released a guttural moan as he felt me enter him, his body stiffening against the exquisite invasion. His muscles clenched as he acclimatized to the sensation, his face a cocktail of intense pleasure and the exertion of holding the plank. > "Now, Dumblex," I whispered, my voice a velvety murmur against his ear, "I want you to do push-ups. And while you're at it, stroke yourself. I want to see those muscles in your arms work double-time. I want you to show me how strong you really are." I will post Chapter 3 - Dumblex here soon, check out my [profile](https://onlyfans.com/606868020/fantasy_whispers) to read it now before anyone else!

yay, great chapter

Such tender, true love. ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️

This is awakening something about clowns in me 👀 Please do a chapter 2!

Would love a spin off about Jon’s friends back home taking advantage of him getting “stuck”

Damn! This is the best chapter yet! Not only is it incredibly hot, but it’s also *extremely* well written, which is something you don’t see all the time on this site. Can’t wait for the finale!

Sign me up please

Always ready for more of Brody's story

Will Hank eventually end up having sex with Brody? Maybe when he’s drunk or drugged up.

This story is great I wish it would be real, but with me in too

Great, great story. Brody is being moulded into the perfect jock wrestler cum dump slut. I love the different dudes that get to plow Brody's whore hole. Younger to much older, that boy twat is getting so used I bet it'll eventually grow actual pussy lips, ha ha. Now for daddy-yum Hank. Tyler is feeding him horny juice dope in those so called energy drinks, huh. Is that coach's idea or does Tyler do that all on his own. I want Tyler to ram and thrust his huge Chinese cock up Hank's man pussy, popping what I assume is virgin territory. Tyler needs to have a touchdown up Hank's ass, then shot his field goal between Hank's heated hot goal posts. Thanks.

So it's Russian roulette with better-than-normal odds? A dark tale indeed!

I like that he kind of understood the implications of the power that he had, sometimes mind control stories breach the line of consent and it’s a little uncomfortable. I like the way you have begun this and it’s written well.

Nice, hope we see Leon again.