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5/24/22, 4:46 PM
Ooh yeah, a new chapter! Awesome. Lovely addition to the story. I enjoyed everything from the start to well honestly the start of the last part with the shoe, which I wasn't a fan of. But yeah, sexy story. Love seeing Adams accept his status and the fun he has. He's a good boy. I wonder if there is any potential of some slight bringing the fun to work level. Not so much Lucky appears but more that Johnson can pet and rub and maybe finger his good boy. hehe
5/24/22, 3:45 PM
The psychological manipulation is simple yet sublime. Keep on the amazing work.
5/24/22, 3:31 PM
This is great!!
5/24/22, 2:33 PM
I love this a lot. I wish it was longer haha
May 14, 2022
Deforester
5/24/22, 2:19 PM
I love all your stories, they are amazing. As a recommendation, I would like the hypnotized subject to be able to do more things while he is in a trance and not just remain still. nice to read you ❤️
Anonymous
5/24/22, 4:17 AM
Great chapter. You interestingly seemed 2 insinuated it in this chapter, but are you planning to introduce some F / F instances / hypno perspectives?

5/24/22, 1:58 PM
I’m sorry, I might be clueless, not sure what you mean by F / F instances/hypno? I assume you mean female/female? In which case, naw. Pryer is only interested in taking the men and all perspectives will be Pryer in the first part and one of his male sub’s perspective of the same mind control session in the corresponding chapter.
5/24/22, 1:46 PM
So good to have you and your great stories back
5/24/22, 12:46 PM
TRUTH BEHIND THE STORY: in fact, I had both this chapter and the next chapter written before I'd created Lickety Split -- well, finalized him, anyway. I'd intended him to enter the story later, but the events of the next chapter felt incomplete without the entire team present, so I went back and inserted Lickety into both this chapter and the next, tying his origin story to Gambit. I hadn't been able to settle on Lickety's "look" until I saw an CGI illustration of a rock-climber by ALBRON. I immediately realized, "That's LICKETY SPLIT!" like I'd picked him out of a police lineup. It was really funny. In this book, Lickety Split is a minor character, but I liked his individual power and boosted that in Book Two. To me, Gambit started out as a bit of a one-note character, but he's evolved into one of my favorites.
5/24/22, 11:59 AM
Lord above, this was AMAZING. The mental changes are always my favorite part of the stories here, and this was a glorious slow burn of just that: watching each guy slowly become a narcissistic, selfish, apathetic egomaniac—and even better, watching it be justified in their heads—was achingly hot, as were the subtle details (Ian starting to capitalize “me” toward the end was a brilliant choice). And even in the hotness, we see a lesson about how self-absorption kills the soul. I don’t think I’d give it up to look that hot…but the story does tempt me! :p Fantastic work.
Anonymous
5/24/22, 10:43 AM
It didn't bother me particularly, but I think I can see why it might be troubling. _Obviously_ the rape is worse; but relative morality doesn't drive whether people like a character, *understanding* does. We know very clearly _why_ AppleJack did what he did, and so does Red. I wonder if you established a few more hints of why the team needs to be fully functioning first (why the herd needs to be a herd, not a group of individuals) maybe Cav's actions at this point would feel more motivated by necessity and less like a power trip. At the moment, you jump straight from Red trying to explain why Cav can't really understand AppleJack's point of view to Cav doing exactly what he was going to do anyway, with only unseen-famous-person-cameo-sex in between -- as a juxtaposition, it's less than sympathetic, and makes it seem like Cav didn't _listen_. If sex-with-a-movie-star got postponed due to the first whisper of a threat to the herd, the urgency of getting the herd on the same page and functioning together could drive the choice, instead of somewhat one-sided "respect".

5/24/22, 11:04 AM
@ That's a really valid point and I appreciate you writing it. I haven't talked about the necessity of the herd yet because they themselves don't know why they're back. We will get significantly more of this in Chap 10. But I see how it comes off as a Cav power trip.