Recent Comments

5/26/23, 6:09 PM
Well paced and fun story!
Lampshade15
5/26/23, 3:13 PM
I've really enjoyed this story! The subject matter really resonated with me and it was wonderfully written as always. Super hot!
5/26/23, 2:24 PM
I really enjoyed the story. Your writing is excellent, and your portrayal of jocks needing to feel superior ( no matter by what means) is spot on. Can't wait to read about reactions and results of Brotein "injections" on the rest of the team...
5/26/23, 1:54 PM
This was a great story! I like stories where the ass hole get what they deserve, and in Rayne's case the pun is very much intended. I admit I already read the story on your website (otherwise I would've commented here on the previous chapters as well). I couldn't wait to finish it. Well done!
5/26/23, 1:35 PM
i really enjoy this story ... and, i am so hopeful that the brotein will make one of the men want to kiss him! ...
Anonymous
5/26/23, 12:08 PM
This story is hot!!! How about a long lost dad find in a club.
5/26/23, 11:22 AM
Thanks for your prompt detailed response. I would hope this great story goes on forever. There are so many options to keep it going.

5/26/23, 11:57 AM
@[br6205](/user/show/10027864) Aw, thank you! This story is based on a roleplay that I did late last year, so the story is concluded unfortunately. I’ve done a few roleplays over the years and often save them into word documents. They are really epic ta tales, but I never really considered creating longer stories out of them, but with people liking Downfall of an alpha, I may have to look at converting another one into a storymay
Fred
5/26/23, 12:55 AM
For your first story it was really good. Maybe you write a second part with the Tipps you got from the other .

5/26/23, 11:17 AM
@[Fred](/user/show/10005048) This is a one-shot story, maybe a spin off series. I can think of that.
5/26/23, 3:26 AM
Great chapter, but you should be more careful with the scene descriptions. A strange thing that happened in your story was Alex carrying Max from the kitchen to the bedroom. Unless their dorm room is 5 miles away, it's impossible for Alex to take this long to get to the room carrying Max, especially with Alex being so strong. And the passage of time is more evident with the many orders that Max gives Alex while they are walking.

5/26/23, 11:04 AM
@[Sexcrab](/user/show/10027159) Thank you really much for your feedback. Indeed, these 3 chapters are the first I wrote some time ago. I decided to put them as an introduction to what's on Chapter 4, which is much longer and more more detailed and rich in descriptions.