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Anonymous
7/10/17, 8:46 AM
I'd add in some more detail with the sex part and descriptions of the guys
Anonymous
7/10/17, 8:20 AM
Hi! The next year there will be a big movie about a black superhero, and I was thinking, would be pretty hot if you write a story about a black superhero being mind fucked by a villain, and gets turned into a stereotypical racial spoof of himself, a mock of his heroic identity, always ready to sexualy serve criminals. Or the hero would be turned into a low criminal stereotype with few memories of his former self, trapped by his own desires, too horny to be a hero again. I think that would be something very erotic, and you would do it perfectly!
Anonymous
7/10/17, 6:42 AM
This story was just plain, well-thought out and expertly written. I can honestly say that I was enthralled and captivated with the writing style as well as the situation in its entirety. Good job to both of the authors for this marvelous written piece.
Anonymous
7/10/17, 6:14 AM
While I understand you had to keep the scenario is short due to the word limit provided. This was excellent, as usual. I enjoyed your first chapter immensely! This one did not disappoint! I don't know whether you plan to continue this? Doesn't seem like it, based on how it ended. I look forward to seeing more of your work!! :D
Taro
7/10/17, 6:08 AM
Can't wait for next chapter :)
ChaoticDjinn
7/10/17, 4:04 AM
As a little side note, i apologize if this seems a little bit condensed to some. it was done as a part of a commission and restricted to a certain word count. That being said, i'm opening up a Patreon very soon and will have some of my origional works popping up on there, ones where i just free write with no limits, so they should be more full and fleshed out feeling. Much of what i write there will eventually find its way here, after a time delay.
Anonymous
7/10/17, 3:34 AM
Interesting.
Cumluvnbottom@yahoo.com
7/10/17, 2:37 AM
Excellent so far. Looking forward to more.
UchihaDEMS
7/10/17, 2:15 AM
If we are going to talk about tastes, as I said in the previous chapter, I would love to see him fool around with an older man rather than his acquaintances. But, as you said, you write what you want to read and thats cool, I respect that. Please, do continue~
7/10/17, 12:48 AM
And to clarify, yes that was what I meant with Eddy and Isaac. Like he was being carried around on Isaacs cock, supported by Isaac holding up Eddy's legs
7/10/17, 12:44 AM
Thank You! I appreciate the feedback. Yea that scene was a bit muddy. I couldn't think up of the right words at that time when I was writing, and I was just very excited to put this out. Should give it more time to cool, and then look at it over again. Again, thanks for the read and advice :)
Anonymous
7/10/17, 12:36 AM
Hey! Great story. You're a great writer, really enjoying this. But I do have some feedback. I felt kind of lost reading about the scene between Eddy and isaac. It felt like they teleported between positions or something. It wasn't clear what you meant when he said he and Eddy walked over to Alicia, or that he put Eddy's legs up. You mean he picked Eddy up and was carrying him around on his cock like luggage or something? I just felt some of the descriptions in this otherwise hot scene needed a little more fleshing out. It was hard to imagine a guy effortlessly picking up another guy without any sort of exertion. I also felt the bits about Isaac's personal life was a teeny bit dragged out. I hope you don't take this personally though! I recognize great writing potential in you, and look forward to reading more :) Very hot stuff we have here.
Jul 8, 2017
Anonymous
7/10/17, 12:14 AM
Thanks guys, glad to hear you've enjoyed it, and that my stories have such an intense effect on your garpigs!
Anonymous
7/9/17, 11:36 PM
Oh my god please continue. We need more good timestop stories.
ChaoticDjinn
7/9/17, 8:50 PM
I might wind up doing something of a continuation for this story, or using the same app, but i doubt i'll do something from the other guys perspective. From how it is in my head at least, there's very little story there. Thanks for the comments all :3
Anonymous
7/9/17, 8:43 PM
I also want this to continue. Not enough time stop stories.
UchihaDEMS
7/9/17, 6:39 PM
I'd like to see more. Time stop is rare and I love it! Any chances to get to play with the teachers as well?
Jul 8, 2017
Anonymous
7/9/17, 6:26 PM
Another fuckn' hot gar story Bear!! Made my Daddy dick hard! Your stories are required reading for my garpigs. Nothing hotter then seeing a newbie taking the first tentative puffs on a big,fat Maduro losing his self to the thick smoke. Becoming the smokepig he deep down dreamed of becoming
Anonymous
7/9/17, 5:30 PM
Any chance of new victims?
Anonymous
7/9/17, 5:06 PM
Sweet short story like a summer breeze: )
Anonymous
7/9/17, 3:52 PM
Thanks for bringing us a sweet and intriguing story.That tyler wanted a exclusive relationship with hunter remind me of my school life, I was extremely jealous when my str8 friends started dating a girl and hanging out with his new friends. There is no necessity to add another character: hunter' s body waits to be explored more and details from Tyler's perspective also matter. Love your story.
Viridian
7/9/17, 2:10 PM
This is well written, creepy and quite horrible. A very good nightmare.
Jul 8, 2017
7/9/17, 1:30 PM
Loved the slow transformations and mental changes.
Anonymous
7/9/17, 12:39 PM
where is the sequel?
Ogrebear
7/9/17, 12:35 PM
Nice change- so what happens next?
Apr 20, 2009
Ogrebear
7/9/17, 12:33 PM
He could make a ton of money transforming blokes into hairy muscle beasts....
Feb 19, 2010
Ogrebear
7/9/17, 12:32 PM
Very nice story like the slow transformation- is there any more please?
AUK
7/9/17, 5:47 AM
Hot and lots of potential. I say add more friends or maybe a family member.
Anonymous
7/9/17, 5:35 AM
when will the next one come out? Very excited!
Anonymous
7/9/17, 5:33 AM
If you can, PLEASE attach links to pictures to make it twice as good as it already is ;)