Recent Comments

ForgottenCradle
10/15/18, 1:39 PM
I agree to the grown men comment. Good start,really thrilled to see where this goes
UchihaDEMS
10/15/18, 1:15 AM
An interesting concept, lets see where you take this to. I'm glad you picked grown up men, very different too!
10/15/18, 12:31 AM
Lots of fun!
Crane
10/14/18, 11:52 PM
This is my favourite story on this site. I've probably read it about 12 times since it was published! My only complaint is that the author doesn't have any other stories, and I would love to read more of his work. It's very well written, the setup is very nice, and watching Gardener descend into debauchery was extremely satisfying.
Oct 13, 2018
Anonymous
10/14/18, 10:19 PM
This is FANTASTIC!
joaopomilio@hotmail.com
10/14/18, 6:03 PM
two stories dripping with potential, I like them a
10/14/18, 5:45 PM
Both would make great longer stories! The shorter versions make good vignettes as they are. You could add more scenes with different locations and transformations. You could have a series of scenes or you could do a back story. Some of the character's history and past transformations or his origins. Please continue writing.
10/14/18, 5:22 PM
Loved it! The slow change of reality and growth of his friend were awesome!
Oct 13, 2018
10/14/18, 2:32 PM
I'm always excited to read something new from you. This is hot! Nice and drawn out, with the perfect tempo. I really like that the bartender seemed to know what the doll was.
Anonymous
10/14/18, 12:06 PM
These straight2Us are really good. You should make more
Oct 13, 2018
10/14/18, 2:01 AM
Really hot slow changes! It got me going!
Anonymous
10/13/18, 11:31 PM
Interesting - the narrator is under the mind control of the bro Kurt in the goldenrod colored tanktop but he doesn't know it. Neither do you, until almost the end of the story - hot!!
Anonymous
10/13/18, 10:53 PM
Awesome story loved it. Please do a part 2.
Anonymous
10/13/18, 9:40 PM
can you continue this, please?
10/13/18, 7:34 PM
Nice idea. Though it is sad the father doesn't let his sin enjoy the fruits of the labor. Hehe
david
10/13/18, 7:29 PM
Very hot! i want my Master to have this kind of power (except maybe with "take-backs")!
AeonFlux
10/13/18, 6:26 PM
More,
Anonymous
10/13/18, 6:05 PM
A dumb punk AND a dumb jock, both excellently written? Great and hot stuff, super excited to see where this is going!
Anonymous
10/13/18, 2:29 PM
more!
David
10/13/18, 1:26 PM
HOT!
blueron
10/13/18, 12:26 PM
my favorite story , very hot !
Anonymous
10/13/18, 7:07 AM
Great story -- just way too short!
bikerbro
10/13/18, 4:17 AM
I don't think I've read a hotter punk transformation than what Derek's going through - the dumbing down, loss of vocabulary, the accent, attitude, aesthetic...God, it's perfect. You got a gift, man.
10/12/18, 11:38 PM
Cris, you are doing an excellent job with the vivid characters, realistic dialogue and funny, often awkward and relatable situations. I can't wait to see where this story goes!
Sep 17, 2018
Cumluvnbottom@yahoo.com
10/12/18, 9:40 PM
Agree with the comments above: great story and great build up want to read more
Anonymous
10/12/18, 9:35 PM
This story is making me really sad but also hot at the same time... it's conflicting. I hope things do end up working out for Chuck and Derek.
10/12/18, 9:23 PM
wish I could find a guy like this for fun with me!!
10/12/18, 9:21 PM
wonder whereI I can by a pair of these???
10/12/18, 3:55 PM
Wow this is moving toward an interesting conclusion. Please continue.
10/12/18, 3:46 PM
Thrilled to see this story highlighted in today's archival selection, with great gradual changes, physically and mentally. One of my favorites from Derek!