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9/12/19, 4:36 PM
> i have a story with a REALLY REALLY similar plot line i posted here some time ago featuring Priapus > What is it? I would love to read it. Interestingly, I was researching a Priapus story -- although one VERY different than this -- when I stumbled across Pholus. The more I read about him -- and the astronomical and astrological variations -- the more distracted I became. As much as I'd like to get back to my original story, I'm ready to write about something else...
9/12/19, 3:33 PM
I don't think it's a bad story at all. The beginning is a little rough, and it could use a bit more build-up to the hypnosis scene. But the hypnosis scene itself is written quite well. I hope you write a sequel, because I want to know what happens next!
staritman 1
9/12/19, 3:29 PM
Please note it was my first story, I will work on getting better
Anonymous
9/12/19, 3:27 PM
Great story! Shitty writing. Please learn to write AND edit.
Sep 11, 2019
Anonymous
9/12/19, 12:02 PM
thanks man, I love your beginning
Anonymous
9/12/19, 11:31 AM
This is exceptionally hot. I can't wait for part 2 if there is one. The slow transition into a musky man so delicious. My favorite fantasy.
Jfsc
9/12/19, 11:07 AM
Love, love, love this story! Great imagery and concept. I enjoyed the sci-fi component as well. MORE PLEASE!
Rik
9/12/19, 10:33 AM
Very erotic. Well written and sensual. A great idea. Write more please.
Sep 11, 2019
All about the eyes
9/12/19, 9:06 AM
I liked this :) Looking forward to seeing what happens
Anonymous
9/12/19, 7:45 AM
yess loving the inclusion of the toys with the sexual acts !! hopefully will see them used in more raunchy ways soon
Anonymous
9/12/19, 6:39 AM
I'm so glad that I kept reading even though it made me scared at times. The ending was super sweet and perfect. The only thing that could've made it better was if his brother got rescued too.
Sep 11, 2019
Cute boy
9/12/19, 4:44 AM
id love if elias became a stupid twink with lots of emphasis on his low iq. great story super hot :)
Anonymous
9/12/19, 3:48 AM
was hoping the dad to be turned into a filthy toy. But good hot story nonetheless. hope you write about the toys converting other guys too.. coaches and cops etc. thanks for writing ! <3
LthrBikerThug
9/12/19, 3:41 AM
This is one amazing piece. I would like to become an emissary too. Where can I find that bar?
Sep 11, 2019
Anonymous
9/12/19, 3:40 AM
If you are using MSWord, it's the under the 'Review' tab. Spelling and grammar. You would be surprised how many errors. It picks up. Even when you have spelled a word correctly, it will pick up the context of the sentence and recognize an error. For example, one of your sentences reads 'he new . . .'. You probably meant 'knew', but since 'new' was spelled correctly, either your eye or the spell checker you used did not pick up on the error. Writing is only one part of story telling. The editing takes longer. Do it because the story you've written is hot!!!
9/12/19, 2:07 AM
An amazing and beautiful story! So sweet and sensual.
MeddlerIncs
9/12/19, 1:59 AM
This better have a sequel, Mister Jockedguy.
Sep 11, 2019
Jack Taylor
9/12/19, 1:29 AM
It was really good and hot but as the person above stated. Please run it through a spellchecking software or ask an editor to help. Overall great concept
Sep 11, 2019
Boon
9/12/19, 1:25 AM
Personally, Im into heavy humiliation, so I'd like if the doctor goes for that, making Elias to act stupidly or make something very embarrasing. I saw you labeled your story with the dumber tag, so I'd like to see that too!
Sep 11, 2019
BankStreet
9/12/19, 12:25 AM
I am looking forward to the next installment; however you might consider using a spell-checker and/or the services of editor (perhaps a friend who can help). The errors were a bit distracting. Good luck!
Straitman
9/11/19, 8:22 PM
You know its a good story when a strait man reads it and agrees with ADAM. He had no choice but submit to the pleasure of the pantyhose, I do not wear them but have been helpless before them...I could see how Nick in them could take over...I almost felt myself ready to submit to Nick
Papa Werebear
9/11/19, 7:36 PM
Thank you all for the kind words. This was my first straight to gay story, mostly because I feel that Bill went beyond Bisexual and became a Bear. In other stories I've written, the characters started out either like Barney (gay, but deny it) or like Chris (bi, but could be happy with just men). Bill is the first I've felt was justifiably "converted" and this was because the alien not only had a psychological affect on him, but a physical transformation/brain re-wire was done. I felt he went from a deep down straight guy, who was accommodating the man he loved, to full on gay Leather Bear as soon as he came out of the alien's body. The symbolic rebirth was not an accident. 😁 I feel a change that fundamental required extraordinary circumstances. I enjoyed writing that transformation and wanted it to be gradual. Thanks again for the encouragement ~ Papa
gaycub
9/11/19, 6:36 PM
wonderful story . the transformations were excellently described. I loved how Bill and Chris went fro friends to lovers. hope to read more stories from you in the future.
PupHearted
9/11/19, 12:12 PM
Incredible!
9/11/19, 5:30 AM
Bookmarket on my phone to re-read all the time
Anonymous
9/11/19, 2:53 AM
Super hot!!!!
Anonymous
9/11/19, 12:05 AM
Lol I know we're not suppose to vote and suppose to write them ourselves. But I vote 1 and 2 as well :)