Recent Comments

6/27/20, 6:35 PM
Personally i am not into and don't quite understand why anyone would want to be made into a gimp on a longterm basis. i know these slaves were not voluntary, so my statement of personal preference is not really relevant except to explain my reaction to the story. So that said, i still find this story incredibly hot for various reasons (descriptions of the men, the facility, the kidnapping process, the process of creating the slaves, the feeling created around the muddled but aware mental state of the slaves and switching between aware/unaware mental effects, the plot involving the turnaround/karma) but what really blows my mind is the level of dominance and control the Master(s) have over the slaves. i love the multi-faceted approach to the process of mind control/training. For me this kind of mind control is more arousing if the slave is aware of his situation, so it was hot that you described these mental states and switched between them. i'd really like to experience this kind of mind control/training. To the author, thanks for writing this really hot story and sharing your imagination and writing skills.
Hunter_C_Wolfe@Hotmail.Com
6/27/20, 6:30 PM
Not into trucks myself, however I can see exhaust or motor noises acting like triggers or controls here.
6/27/20, 6:09 PM
You should really put some note or warning if you're going to put straight sex in your stories.
Anonymous
6/27/20, 5:55 PM
Diapers are hot. If they are an important part of the story but a reader doesn't like diaper content, seams like they are reading the wrong story.
6/27/20, 5:44 PM
@TcomJ: This installment is written in a way that it can pretty much be a self contained story. But even if this story left on a cliffhanger, how can you turn down any of Edlam's stories? I know it sucks being left "stranded" on a cliffhanger but honestly, Edlam is such a wonderfully erotic writer that I don't care how much he leaves me wanting more. His stories just satisfies me so much that I don't care of anything else. It's a torture that I would gladly endure. Keep writing for us please! Anything you post would be a blessing
Nutiper
6/27/20, 5:43 PM
Intriguing to see this erotic take on a classic sci-fi novel! Curious and looking forward to the next chapter
6/27/20, 5:25 PM
> The story came around to a well-constructed conclusion... > Tying it in beautifully with his uber-work "THAT OLD BLACK MAGIC SERIES" of which this story is but a chapter. We see these characters again as background in one of his other stories, but I like the way he leaves them here, too. Now watch what I do in the unexpected Part 5!
Hypnominion
6/27/20, 5:10 PM
Now *this* is what I call engaging! The story came around to a well-constructed conclusion, although I'm guessing that Eddie's relationship with Jarrod isn't going to last (it's a bit one-sided) ;)
6/27/20, 4:58 PM
HOLY CRAP!!!!!! Is Onix back!??!?!?? OMG YES HIS STORIES ARE THE FUCKING BEST! Are you going to continue the story after Niko and Romi?
Anonymous
6/27/20, 4:41 PM
hope there is a sequel
Anonymous
6/27/20, 3:47 PM
So would I. When you read all the stories, you get a sense of his maturing as a sorcerer.
6/27/20, 3:38 PM
Edlam.....where is your "Re-Education" series and a bunch of other series you started and wrote it so well you stranded me on so many islands of cliffhanger??????? how could you do this???? is this new form of torture??? -_- should I...read this and get stranded on another cliffhanger!!!???
EJG
6/27/20, 2:58 PM
let the punishment continue..
EJG
6/27/20, 2:48 PM
That was HOT. Love the 'everyone else being unaware' theme. Always gets me going. It'd be a shame if those affected 'came to their sense'. Love the idea of those around Sid,carrying on as if it's normal with no shock,even away from Reggie's influence (but thats just my private fantasies). CARRY ON,REGARDLESS..
6/27/20, 2:46 PM
Very hot and love see Edward using his slaves for sex. Would love to see a future chapter from the point of view of a normal person who is enslaved to show how he enslaved everyone else in the world. That might be interesting. IDK Love the story
6/27/20, 2:11 PM
one of my favorites!
cj
6/27/20, 2:02 PM
So fucking HOT!!!
6/27/20, 1:39 PM
Whose unethical behaviour; the Master or the waterless toilet? Do you have an alternative ending or result? I can ask Martin to open this to public additions
mbblover
6/27/20, 1:20 PM
perhaps a similar story involving a drop dead beyond gorgeous huge musclebound ladies man superhero in the near future?.... perhaps the superhero (named i don't know supreme man?) goes to investigate a out in the country "reform school" with 18 year olds and the warden and soon becomes part of the brainwashed hypnotized tribe! i'm imagining a 6'6 375 plus pounds of mountain of muscle standing in a lineup in the warden's office towering over the 18 year olds in the line-up row on both sides of him as he's in the middle of this line-up/row... all wearing jockstraps or nude and all beyond rock hard and all with the at attention salute, arms to their side, chest out, head and chin out in complete control and submission to the warden as he chuckles that even supreme man is captured, conquered and converted, just like simple human 18 year olds! the visual of seeing supreme man outrageously towering over the teenagers in this kinky line-up and now going to be the plaything to this old effeminate warden and his 18 year olds (some attractive and nicely built others plain looking and wimpy) both servicing and getting serviced is pretty hot...another visual? seeing supreme man standing nude and rockhard in complete salute right next to the warden as he is doing paperwork at his desk in his office and a solid silver replica of supreme man's erection and balls resting on a small plaque on the desk as the kinkiest paperweight ever, supreme man standing at attention waiting upon the warden's orders.....what does anyone think about this story idea and some of these visuals in this story?..
Anonymous
6/27/20, 1:04 PM
Wow that was nice
6/27/20, 12:46 PM
I love it man, thank you!
6/27/20, 12:23 PM
loved this!
DD
6/27/20, 11:50 AM
This sounds like a very interesting premise, please continue your writing. I would love to see what happens with Sid.
6/27/20, 10:21 AM
it took me 3 times to get through this story. if thats not a compliment then i dont know what is. great job guys.
6/27/20, 10:15 AM
I'd love to see further stories charting the progression to Master Sorcerer and how he continues to dispense Justice and has fun
6/27/20, 10:04 AM
What a neat story
Anonymous
6/27/20, 9:52 AM
Wish I could find a stage show!
6/27/20, 8:33 AM
Very imaginative! It was kind of fun, like a horror movie is fun. It wasn't quite as scary as it would have been had the first two victims been more fully developed as individuals. The level of domination and control the Master could wield was really hot, but i admit i had trouble leaving my thoughts of his unethical immoral behavior out of my reader's version of your world of fantasy. Still very engaging and entertaining.
6/27/20, 8:03 AM
this is the best body swap story ever ugh! two thumbs up for writing skills and five stars for the idea and flow of the story. I hope to see and read more from you.
6/27/20, 7:34 AM
fucking hot story... wish i was a carrier like that ;)