Recent Comments

1/8/24, 2:31 AM
Glad to see this is back. If my memory don't play tricks to me, you added a few more details here and there, isn't it? I'm excited to read the next one, Kyle is my favourite Lantern.
1/7/24, 8:08 AM
That was fantastic! A perfect package of horny gym bros, a hot twink and some mind-altering hoodoo with a great twist at the end. I love your stories and this was another great addition!

Wakeup
1/7/24, 11:27 PM
@[Ruffcub](/user/show/21211) Glad you enjoyed it!
1/7/24, 10:10 PM
This is a very hot story and concept—I was reading it just to approve it at first, but it got hotter and hotter as time went on! I also appreciate your exploration of serious themes like toxic masculinity especially in the father relationship, and I approve of your coach's empathy for his students. Good shit! Oh, one other thing, I would suggest separating dialogue into more paragraphs—it's standard practice to have a new paragraph every time a new person is speaking. I found it hard to tell who was speaking in any given string of dialogue because it was all in one paragraph and there were few markers to tell me what words were being said by which person. The dialogue was definitely hot, though, and smooth!

1/7/24, 10:59 PM
@[Soren Fitz](/user/show/10011670) HI! Thank you so much for the comment. I see why all the fanfic writers were always so excited about getting them :sweat_smile: Like in the begining I didn't plan to have the step-dad play such a big role, but (SPOILER i guess) my fave trope is like revenge/role-reversal/small(er)-on-top kinda dynamic, and I wanted coach to stay the alpha, so someone had to take that place. As for the coach, I do myself prefer the caring type of domination to humiliation, so I wanted him to be such a figure. We'll have both of course - but the coach fantasy started all of this, so he'll probably be the carrier of my personal fantasies. Also thanks for the tip! I did think of that at some point, but was afraid of making the paragraphs too short, but i did go through the whole thing like 4 times, so i didn't even notice it wasn't clear - I added them after reading your comment, so it should be better now.
1/7/24, 9:47 PM
I liked the ending, tbh. Part of it is because I think it’s hot when the bad guy wins in situations like this. But also, it was a completely forced mental overhaul from the start - the ending just confirmed that more plainly than the rest of the story. Saying it only turned dark now would mean ignoring everything that led up to it. I enjoyed the finale!
Jonanator
1/7/24, 9:24 PM
Hope more is to come
1/7/24, 7:56 PM
This story is really good and has been hitting all the right buttons so far! I gotta know, what episode of Dr. Who is being referenced here?

1/7/24, 8:48 PM
@[Saccnt2](/user/show/2949320) The episodes from Season 3 when Martha has to cover for the Doctor when he uses the Chameleon Arch to put his Time Lordiness into that pocket watch to hide from the Family of Blood. It's been a minute since I watched the episode, but I think the son? can control the scarecrows and uses them to kill a couple of the people the Family ends up possessing. And thanks! I'm having a bit of trouble figuring out where I want to go with the transformation in the next part, but hopefully writing some other stuff in the interim + getting back into normal routines will help.
Anonymous
1/7/24, 8:24 PM
Loving it! More, please!!
Anonymous
1/7/24, 5:44 PM
Excellent
Anonymous
1/7/24, 5:00 PM
The meeting and interactions with Frank and Joey were so HOT! So is their pic!
Josh
1/7/24, 4:43 PM
Yeah, not a great ending. Alex deserved to get what was coming to him.
1/7/24, 2:38 PM
I feel like Josh deserves some wedgies for what he did to Karl, don’t you think? 🤭
1/5/24, 5:59 PM
Loving this story more and more . Hope spidey makes another appearance 🥵

1/6/24, 8:42 PM
@[Glennyboi](/user/show/917433) He will, but it might be a few chaps as we switch location yet again...

1/7/24, 10:41 AM
@[Manicorn](/user/show/10041123) Very hot , good to know :-) I do love a spoiler so was wondering if there is a way to read the full story before they put on here ? Hehe

1/7/24, 2:06 PM
@[Glennyboi](/user/show/917433) It's been posted in a few other places--mostly AO3 and FurAffinity. You can check my profile for link to those. However, I'll also say I'm touching the chapters up a bit as I post them here, so they'll be slightly improved if you wait. -;]
1/7/24, 10:12 AM
Incredibly well written, and there is some very hot aspects to how this ended, but it left me hoping that Tommy has a mental break from all the strain and accidentally bites Alex's dick off.
1/7/24, 9:46 AM
I wish it didn't end in the sub crying :(
1/7/24, 9:34 AM
Like this a lot. Part 2 please
1/7/24, 6:36 AM
Loved most of this…don’t love the end. Lol
1/7/24, 5:30 AM
This was a great series. And I’m glad you completed it, but I agree Alex turned out to be a jerk.
Jonanator
1/7/24, 4:37 AM
I don't like Alex that much.
1/7/24, 3:53 AM
i love this saga so. never stop.
Jan 5, 2024
1/7/24, 3:14 AM
good writing! you should continue this.
Jv
1/6/24, 1:57 PM
Update tonight?

Anonymous
1/7/24, 12:38 AM
@Jv I've sent an update but I guess I didn't realize it wasn't approved.
Anonymous
1/7/24, 12:08 AM
Great story.
Older White Man
1/6/24, 11:29 PM
Cannot wait for the next installment!! About the best most stimulating RP fiction ever!!

1/6/24, 11:51 PM
@Older White Man I just finished it. Sizzling hot.
Anonymous
1/6/24, 11:14 PM
Older White Man here. Really identified with Mr. Walters here. He must have leaked up a storm getting his n**** boy students visualize being naked and chined up slaves. Just got throbbing again typing this!

1/6/24, 11:49 PM
@Anonymous Yes, it makes a person's dick hard to have a slave boy on his knees sucking your cock and reminding the boys in the classroom of that to their faces.
Anonymous
1/6/24, 10:44 PM
Great narrative Really takes off when the maintenance man comes in and calls him a nigger. Yeah!

1/6/24, 11:47 PM
@Anonymous Nothing like a throbbing, hard cock to but an uppity college student in his place.
Anonymous
1/6/24, 10:13 PM
Awesome prose! This older White Man’s Dick was throbbing from the get go. Such domination over black boys and men I find thrilling.

1/6/24, 11:40 PM
@Anonymous Just wait until you read part seven, soon to be published. The domination and humiliation black boys and men has only just begun.
1/6/24, 8:09 PM
Really hot story! i love that it seems like it's just a snapshot within a larger context, but tells us everything we need to imagine the rest of what's happening. Great work!

Wakeup
1/6/24, 11:40 PM
@[Fred W. Kong](/user/show/476663) Thanks Fred. Yes, it’s also an easy way to skip all the boring set up, but shhh, don’t tell anyone.
1/6/24, 11:29 PM
Great idea and start of an interesting plot! Though it would have been even better if it was a little bit longer so some of the processes and background of the premise could be elaborated in some more details. But overall a great start and I look forward to the next bits!
1/6/24, 10:21 PM
But I want Nick as my rubber slave and toy! I would gladly collar him and have him in chains. I've always enjoyed how several of the characters could have moments on both sides. And then to see how they ended up in this 'version'. While I'm not a fan of the daddy and son troupe, I completely get why that happened. He wanted Mr. Freedom to become the new Tri-Hard, and in a way, he still got that. Though, ironically, its Travis that has the most comical ending. Being one of the officers, he can't help but worship the same guy he thought so little of. But still, I loved how both Nick and Henry fell as they did. Nick getting overloaded in 'team spirit' and Henry once again submits to his inner desires. Though if this is the 'What If' does that mean this is not the real ending? Or just a possible ending if the reader choices? Regardless, the 'Good Ending' is going to be just as good!

1/6/24, 11:21 PM
@[Marik29](/user/show/10021139) Don't worry, this isn't the only ending. There'll be a split-off from the previous chapter to this one where the main story continues on. You could call the the **Tri-Hard** ending,... Glad you liked it, and I hope you enjoy what comes next!