I just hope Jack became like Bryan and he and Bryan jocked one of Jack’s former friends, who betrayed him.

This has been a GREAT thread! I'm sorry to see it end. I thought the characters were terrific, the writing excellent, and I loved the way hypnosis was weaved into the story to change the two lovers to be under control of their new roommate. I wish this story wasn't over and I hope that it can be continued, or the characters used to start a new string of stories. VERY WELL DONE!!!!

could only dream of being as "lucky" as Marlton, what i would give to be next up for the position! :drooling_face: :fire:

I do hope there will be further instalments to enjoy.

such a hot ending

I need another chapter!

Its been so long waiting for your update story Hopefully can get a new story from u

Not where I was expecting this to go after chapter one, but definitely not complaining! I really like how you were able to just explain something from chapter 1 that most people would just take as porn logic and flipped it into something even sexier than that.

This has been an absolute PLEASURE. What a FUN story and GREAT storytelling. So unique. I am a huge fan of all the references to the smells and man smells and cologne... Also, the intentional way that you brought the reader with the boys as they descended the stairs. That was masterful. When craig snaps his fingers and points to his dick in a previous chapter. That was just intensely erotic and exciting. THANK YOU for this story. I hope you keep writing.

No way can you make another bad ending for these guys. They need a win, for real! it gets to where there has to be victory for them to get to the next level and then face further struggle. it can't stay at its current progression because it will cause it to drone on and on. Rather than keep interesting. i like the story very much but I think it needs more of them succeeding at something because it feels like theyve been kept at the same place for many chapters now without any advancing in their control of their powers or in their ability to work around the mind control and telekinetic powers.. Those seem insurmountable when used and i feel the frustration in their struggle every time theyre captured in it. because they should have formulated a way to protect themselves from it. the last time it was Carl who broke the telekinetic hold. but you have yet to allow our heroes to learn a means to break free. they need a come to Jesus moment and stop dicking around to figure out a legit plan! thats just my feeling about the whole thing..its your story. i like what youve been doing with it and playing the back and forth but id like to see advancement if only for the sake of the story itself.

With every chapter, I have observed that Kaa and Mowgli’s romantic aspects of their twisted relationship is gradually increasing. Despite that, I love how Kaa authoritatively maintains that he is the one under control of the entire situation and, of course, under control of Mowgli’s very existence. His dominance over Mowgli is perhaps the most beautiful, seductive and erotic entity of the series The author not only has a kinky mind but a creative one as well and his storytelling ability shows that he is well-versed in the hypno/coil fetish. I applaud how you have dealt with the evolution of Mowgli as a character. He always tried to resist and overcome Kaa’s spell but with the passage of time, he’s now his obedient slave who strives for the complete satisfaction of his master’s desires. Eagerly waiting for more (and longer) chapters to continue this magnificent piece of erotic literature. It is so primal and unbelievably hot. The mancub needs to know his place – servitude for Kaa. I wonder if Kaa would torture Mowgli again. His tongue is venomous and I wonder if he’ll use it on the mancub for his sadistic amusement.

Edlam, will you have new series or continue the perfect Joey daddy and his cockslut?

I really hope it’s not over but it also feels like it could be. Either way super hot!

So glad I saw this today, amazing and hot as usual :hot_face:

I loved this chapter. It was amazing to see them all fall, Carl maybe for good or a reboot of FreeDog? Lee brought out some steamy action, pushed the boys further than ever, and now the boys need to actually start figuring things out, because we know, they have no chance to win in a full confrontation against Tri-Hard (old and new), so they gotta come up with new ideas. This has become my most sought out story, and every time a chapter lands I need to book some time for myself to fully enjoy it. Keep up the amazing work, it's truly spectacular.

Wonderful. Can't wait for more stories.

I love how deviously wholesome this series is

I'm not really one for dark endings but i enjoyed this series. Well done!

Great start.

“Master’s Mezmer’s Wonders… is the best carnival show ever.”

I really liked the first few chapters of this story with Steve, Mark and their whole dynamic but I feel like Mark is pretty weird here. Initially he was trying to help Steve get a job cause he was struggling to find anything and they end up planning to do this internship but first Steve needs to go through sub training. The description for the sub training seems intense to the both of them but Mark just says he'll be fine basically, he's strong. Cut to after the training and Steve is clearly not himself and Mark is unhappy with what he's had to go through. Now he's physically seen his husband, naked, collared and being objectified by a bunch of men and instead of taking Steve with him and saying they'll figure something else out, he just leaves him there? I get it kind of needs to happen that way for the story to continue with the internship but still. I might've read some stuff wrong but the tone of this story seems more dark kinky than hot kinky to me at least, don't know if that's intentional. I thought the training camp would've shown Steve the pleasures of being a sub but that he's still himself. Especially with the whole thing about having power in submission and the pleasure he was feeling. Then when he reunites with Mark, he's still as he was at the beginning but now Mark jokingly teases that he 'owns' Steve but isn't really serious about it at all. Then when they're back at home, Steve kind of tries to nudge Mark into being more dominant cause he likes pleasing him and making him feel good. Maybe he does more around the house or something and at the beginning of the story he's shown to be lovable but a bit lazy with helping around. It's just the contrast between their loving relationship and the harsh, objectification of subs is just a bit strange. It could work with Mark supporting Steve, I just feel like he's supporting him in the wrong way by letting him continue being a sub like this when even he doesn't like it? Still, I really enjoyed the story and a lot of aspects up to this point. I initially came for the pup play chapter, thought it was going to be a 7 day pup thing but there was a nice mix of different kinks for each day. It's funny with a lot of the training week being aggressive and rough and then suddenly it's all good boys and toys. Also, Absolutely loved what you did with having Kev as a lovable jock character and the whole brotherhood bit of everyone trying to stay strong together and enduring and supporting each other through submission. Probably won't read the rest but overall was still a good read!

I love that story, I really want to be Casey. Under the control of my alpha, even lose my beloved attributes if it is his wish.

Interesting idea, but I couldn't get through the writing. It's giving A.I. vibes. If not A.I., then bad writing. To hopefully illustrate that I'm not trying to be mean, but give constructive feedback, here are specific things that look A.I., and whether or not if it is A.I. or bad writing, could be touched up. Reusing same words/sentence structure: **Like always,** Marc wore an unbuttoned flowing shirt over a white tanktop and tight speedos. **Like always**, the blue-collar pool boy looked dirty-hot. **his Dad had been dating men barely older than Alan’s 18 years old. His 50-year-old father dating 20-somethings** certainly did not inspire Alan **Then, he would** make Marc obedient. **Then, he would** use Marc to seduce his father. Marc was absolutely his father’s type. **Then, he would** use Marc to dose his father with X-1207 and take control of the household.

Got me horny as. Love sub rubber.

This is so hot, holy shit

Awesome , loved it !

I remember reading this back in the day and I didnt know it got continued all these years later. Is there gonna be any future chapters?

@gasp sounds good to me :monkey_face:

Oh wow, Iove the premise of this story! I love that those five powerful men who opposed the villian are thoroughly humbled and humiliated. Also the fact that the powerful men while a little pretentious are heroes who have wonderful intentions but are thhroughly and brutally humiliated is so hot. Powerful men who are also highminded and idealstic folks undergoing humiliation and defeat appeals to me so much. The only thing is even though the concept of five powerful men jibes with me, I mainly liked Agares and Andros, though thats mainly because they were a hunk and young handsome guy, the others were not to my taste, though I loved seeing their humiliation. Any chance of seeing another story where a group of powerful and respected men are humiliated? Like royalty and nobles, or a band of heroes who are also occupying powerful positions like in this story? All good men like the council but who are debased by depraved men who have it in for them. Also to me it would be even hotter, if they realize whats happening to them but can't resist, physically compelled but keep their minds to witness their downfall. Publically humiliated in front of the people they serve too.

Hey Ya'll Im revisiting this story and adding more However the rewrite is gonna cause this chapter to become 2 because of how much I added in lol.