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4/23/20, 8:07 PM
Very hot story. cant wait for the next chapters! Keep it up!
EntrancedGay92
4/23/20, 7:55 PM
Well done. This is my favorite kind of hypnosis story and you did not disappoint!
4/23/20, 7:06 PM
keep going
4/23/20, 7:06 PM
This was a nice short story and now I'm going to read all your other works. I'm humbled you find some inspiration in my work.
Anonymous
4/23/20, 6:28 PM
This one always makes blow. Love the writing, the detail is fantastic and the scene with Charlie is explosive. Would love to see a follow-up of this one.
4/23/20, 6:14 PM
Oh, such a cool idea! It's like that anime Deathnote, but gay! keep up the good work!
4/23/20, 6:14 PM
I love your "You & I" reference at the first pre-commment :3 and also I can see the nacho influence here... good story I really want to read more... but also I hope you find the inspiration to continue the other one in the future ^ ^
Hunter_C_Wolfe@Hotmail.Com
4/23/20, 6:08 PM
I like inter racial action here. Maybe use of a gas mask & hose might make for an interesting delivery system. I favor jock straps, socks, worn briefs myself over farts. Good job overall!
4/23/20, 6:03 PM
Thank you for writing and submitting; I can definitely see and feel the vibes of Pine and Mike in this story. That's not a bad thing as I'm friends with Nacho and love his work. I'm definitely with you on the corruption aspect of mind control being a bit overplayed. I really want to see where you go with things, so please continue.
Apr 23, 2020
Drake Nightstrom
4/23/20, 5:49 PM
This is only intended to be feedback/thoughts on this story that might help. Over all you did a great job laying a foundation. Maybe you could refine this more? Its a great start, and has potental. I am wondering if you could do more discrptions of changes and include any mental ones as well? I am also wondering if you might include a bit of sex in the story as it seems like it's building to that. I mean you have it there but it's faded to black meaning you pass over it and I wonder if it wouldn't help the story to know how the guy feels about being a gay bear and his thoughts/feelings around the intercourse with a man.