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9/25/20, 3:55 PM
oh wow,that was simply beautiful
9/25/20, 3:30 PM
ugh,I enjoyed this chapter a lot! I'm so happy for... Mike? doesn't matter. I'm so happy for boy that he's happy,horny amd obedient
Rio
9/25/20, 3:27 PM
Спасибо вам за этот красный рассказ!
9/25/20, 2:56 PM
> I think Part 49 would have been hotter if it was told from the perspective of the waiter, and we only got overheard snippets of the Lenoldis’ conversation. > Valid point-- and I agree. I have discovered that POLLINATION works best when told from the victim's POV. At the time I initially plotted this scene, my intent was that it be from the waiter's perspective. But to be honest, I've been enjoying the Lenoldi's relationship and I thought the insight into the Father's motivation/ philosophy was important for plot developments later. It was all too subtle to be captured by the waiter overhearing stuff. Next chapter, you'll meet the hapless Willis, and I think that will get us all back on track with the way this narrative works most successfully. > The part with Devin especially. > There are certain new characters that I'm really enjoying: Rugby Boy, Vance, Willis (for comedy relief), and poor Devin. The fact is I haven't figured out the end of Devin's story -- I have two options for him, one good and one expected. The "good" ending will inconvenience the plot -- the "expected" ending (the ending I initially plotted) will disappoint Devin fans. (And I admit, I'm a Devin fan. I've really come to enjoy working with the character, so I'd like to keep him around. You know, expand the cast a little further.)
9/25/20, 2:32 PM
Loving this! The part with Devin especially. I'd love to get more parts from the perspective of the still-transforming men; for instance, I think Part 49 would have been hotter if it was told from the perspective of the waiter, and we only got overheard snippets of the Lenoldis' conversation.
Zac
9/25/20, 2:24 PM
Damn, that ending was *hot!*
9/25/20, 2:21 PM
oof,the working out in his suit part got me more than I thought it would. A story perfect for my taste
9/25/20, 2:08 PM
I'm so glad you've started a sequel :-)
9/25/20, 2:00 PM
loved this!
9/25/20, 1:52 PM
Oh. MYGOD! I just love clothed erotica and men in suits especially. Combo that with the hypnosis and humiliation and it's a perfect story for me. I hope you'll get the next chapter out soon