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10/5/20, 4:46 AM
I liked the second half of this story, where Kaito is getting controlled by hypnotic spirals. But the first half was full of references that made no sense at all to me. I'm guessing this is fan fiction, but it would be nice if that was mentioned somewhere in the story description or tags.
boi98229
10/5/20, 3:30 AM
OMG, this story is so *hot!* On my blog site another member used the tag "sensual dominance". This story epitomizes that in such a powerful way! I am going to re-read this chapter until the next one comes out -- soon i hope! i noticed in your comments at the top of the chapter that English is not your native language. i am not a professional copy-editor by any means, but i am willing to review your copy prior to your posting it, if you like.
10/5/20, 2:21 AM
It felt like Alfred Hitchcock or Twilight Zone, full of suspence. If it had been too much longer, I might have gone insane from the anticipation
Nutiper
10/5/20, 1:59 AM
@Rock Creek Werewolf: Thank you so much for offering!! I think I'm okay now... I was able to chat with @Dace, and he helped me walk through the details. I was able to edit the current section (and makes note for the next section) so that at least I'm not mangling basic geography. But I *very* much appreciate the offer — and I hope the next part of the story won't be jarring for those reasons!
10/5/20, 12:20 AM
loved every part of
Anonymous
10/4/20, 11:58 PM
yum. like the kinks. too.
EJG
10/4/20, 10:44 PM
What a damned shame this has come to an end. Hope the authors OK? Sure woulda liked a continuation.?
10/4/20, 10:22 PM
will you continue please?
Oct 3, 2020
roomservice
10/4/20, 10:21 PM
good story. Keep this going. Lot's more possibilities.
Anonymous
10/4/20, 10:16 PM
Damn, IDK if this one got overlooked for comments because it came out on NYE, but what a great two-parter. Love it.