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10/17/23, 9:47 PM
Great ending! I also loved the earlier scene with all the men pointing in the direction of the beacon when asked where "home" is--properly eerie!

10/17/23, 9:57 PM
@[Hypnothrill](/user/show/37386) Thanks, Hypnothrill. I really hoped that this would be a worthy ending. My idea is that the steps basically repeat at this point. As the area around the tower grows, the broadcast or the transmission also increases in range and potency. And more and more men begin the steps towards communion. And by communion, I meant both that men are unified in a community, and also a somewhat religious experience as they sorta worship the tower. It's weird though that you mention the pointing scene. I hadn't actually planned that scene. I was writing the scene with the doctor talking to the general, and just figured that he would present some kind of scientific experiment. And that just sorta fell out of my head. And as I wrote it, I thought: this is creepy! Men all pointing in a singular direction, and not really being aware or why they're pointing. I wonder if I subconsciously got it from Close Encounters of the Third Kind. I wasn't actively thinking of that movie, but I do remember the scene in which all the men point towards the sky. Maybe that's what inspired me ... it's hard to say. But I just typed it out without really planning it. Sorry if I'm going off on a tangent. But when I first wrote that scene, the men were in the cafeteria, and the women in the gymnasium. And after quickly writing it, and thinking about it, I reversed the locations. I thought it would be appropriate to place the men in the gymnasium. After all, the words origin is Greek for a place that men exercise in the nude. So I thought it would be better to place the men in the gym. So it just shows that I really didn't plan that scene out. And if a writer ever feels the muse, it's best to just write it out and see where your random thoughts take you.
TW
10/17/23, 8:49 PM
Hi! I’ve finally found the time indulge in this story and just wanted to share how fantastic (and devilishly enjoyable) it has been. The trope of a robbed lover is so seldom used, but so incredibly hot - especially with how you’ve executed it. That love and addiction are beyond lust or riches, and the way Tri-Hard used it, hijacking all that Nick instilled in our hero - umph, it just hit all those little quirks in the best of ways. Spying, using Nick’s voice, and then reprogramming him against his previous inclinations. Truth be told, I normally stick to stories with hypno mixed with leather and rubber so I thought it’d be a slow build but, damn, did those earlier chapters exceed my expectations. Thank you for writing this story; excited to see what is to come!

10/17/23, 9:55 PM
@TW Thank you very much! I always appreciate it when people share their personal impressions with me! I hope you enjoy what's still to come as well!
10/17/23, 4:55 PM
Awesome story! Looking forward for the next chapter

10/17/23, 9:40 PM
@[Rocky](/user/show/929617) Thank you! The next chapter is still in the works, but I hope it won't be too long now. :)
Zander
10/17/23, 8:53 PM
Very good
10/17/23, 8:33 PM
Very hot. Love to see the internal conflict and how Dr. Altman's power is working with it. Here's hoping Jayson finds a new life as an out and proud gay athlete.
10/17/23, 8:27 PM
Fun story, but one thing that trips me up is the bathroom question section. Servwnts are told them may ask to use the bathroom, and then are punished when doing so... maybe if wording was reworked it would make it seem more like a trap rather than confusing permissions. Regardless, a small detail in an otherwise great story so far
10/17/23, 6:29 PM
NEED more of this. So hot
10/17/23, 4:10 PM
Is this parody? Satire?
10/17/23, 2:52 PM
Can i order him😈😈😈🔥🔥
10/17/23, 1:48 PM
Damn hot story hope there comes more🔥🔥🔥😈🤤

10/17/23, 2:19 PM
@[Leatherjohn](/user/show/10043300) A few more are yet to come.