Hot!

Hot!

I've meant to post this for a while so here we go. I can't help but shake the feeling that this chapter and somewhat in the previous feels 'forced'. As if the chapters just don't sit right. Everything up to now has been polished smooth with a clear rhythm and progression that flowed. Not only were their some punctuation/grammatical errors that the editor should have corrected in this chapter. But what's happening to Jamie doesn't, and by extension this whole ordeal he is currently in, doesn't flow with the rest of the story. Above all, where and how is Jamie able to resist so hard? Why is he suddenly, now in this moment choosing to unleash his bottled anger? Jamie submitted to his Master. Fully. He symbiont is fully integrated with him. Therefore, Myriad should already have full awareness of Jamie's state of mind and physical condition. And can therefore correct at anytime. Which was proven when he went inside and took note of the mental dam in Jamie's psyche. Jamie shouldn't be able or have reason to be such a hard-ass to Dusk. Yet here he is fighting back tooth and nail over a collar? This doesn't add up. Granted, Jamie has been aware of the complicity and duality that Myriad operates under. He knows the corruption of the Association. He has several legitimate reasons to be angry and frustrated about not having control over his fate. And all this has been hinted at and brought up through the series. But the timing and execution of this here is suspect. Its too sudden and too unexplained. Regardless, I am still loving this series. I am eager for more. And maybe more context will be provided in the next chapter. This has been such an amazing read throughout. With that said, I might have called it. That this story would either progress in one of two directions. That either Jamie fully integrates with the network under Myriad and goes after the heroes. Or he gets caught and sent to the Tomb. So unless that white at the end here was Jamie's attack, it seems a prison break is coming.

Well done and met every expectation. You can have a lot of fun continuing this!

Excited to see this back!!

I like to write you an email, but it seems that you have changed your mail account. If you want to mail me: Schaumschlaeger@gmx.net

Will you be continuing this? I would love to read more.

Need need NEED a part two! A portion with Jesse and his dad in a 'session" together would be so hot. Please!

Too much "bro" and strayed a tad close too mpreg, but was otherwise enjoyable.

Short but sweet. Loved it. Don't know if you had any plans to continue it but it's a great tease regardless.