Recent Comments

Anonymous
7/25/17, 10:56 PM
Love your alien parasite, virus, melon, etc... series!
Anonymous
7/25/17, 10:44 PM
Keep writing your stories are fantastic!!
Anonymous
7/25/17, 10:40 PM
Just saying, the form did not suck. Yes there were some grammar and spelling errors here and there, but for me they did not at all detract from the story. Super hot. I've got a think for huge meaty pecs, it get's me super hard.
7/25/17, 10:30 PM
Damn I thought I checked it well enough. Thanks for the feedback guys! Always looking to better myself :)
GrowingGeek
7/25/17, 10:07 PM
I agree with the last comment - the buildup and showing the son's corruption into turning into this roided muscle freak would have been very hot to see. Plus, I feel like it would be much improved with a spelling and grammar check, and by an extra gap between paragraphs to make it easier to read. Solid effort though!
A San Francisco Reader
7/25/17, 9:40 PM
While I really enjoyed this story, I felt it started in the middle...Would have liked it more if you would have 'built-up' to the fucking scene, by developing how the father started giving his [clueless] son 'roid's] turning him into a huge muscle stud, perhaps even 'dumb'ing' him down a little with some M.C. tapes to go with the drug's...Developing his desire to have sex with another bro, [or his dad] more slowly as the drugs take effect....Just a thought..
Anonymous
7/25/17, 8:12 PM
Hot as fuck. Got off to both your stories.
Anonymous
7/25/17, 8:03 PM
super great.....more please
Anonymous
7/25/17, 6:16 PM
Need more hardcore parasite. Maybe one that jump from body to body absorbing its hosts until theyre empty husk.
Anonymous
7/25/17, 5:55 PM
Wonder if not wish fulfillment but desperate need would change the context and make it a more attractive and challenging story concept for you... Just a thought: contemplate, dismiss, or deride it as you like.
Anonymous
7/25/17, 5:34 PM
Please finish it!!! It's just getting to the good bit! I love the thought of beiber becoming an obedient pup
Anonymous
7/25/17, 4:06 PM
Why would death suggest STD's? John is said to be in his 60s, it would be easy to say Paul was similarly aged. It's not unlikely for someone in their 60s to die of natural causes.
7/25/17, 3:10 PM
I basically write horror stories, so a story about a truly beneficial symbiote wouldn't fit my style. Most of the beneficial symbiote stories I've read are primarily about wish-fulfillment, and I'm not a fan of that story type.
Anonymous
7/25/17, 2:35 PM
Can't the characters just fuck so I can get aroused?
LongtimeFan
7/25/17, 1:53 PM
A superb ending, Hypnothrill! I always love your work no matter the subject and genre. So keep writing what makes YOU happy--the rest of us will follow right along! :)
Anonymous
7/25/17, 1:02 PM
Have you considered a true symbiote rather than parasite? A creature that is as beneficial to the bonded human as the human is to it?
Anonymous
7/25/17, 11:49 AM
Please do. I love all your stories, but I really enjoy these alien/sci-fi/parasite ones!
Anonymous
7/25/17, 11:21 AM
Yes! Love these stories and would love more parasite stories!
MalSkin
7/25/17, 9:56 AM
great story, I would really like to read more sci-fi/parasite from you.....
Anonymous
7/25/17, 9:24 AM
This is excellent. Though it does worry me a bit since death kind of suggest STDs. I really like the pacing and descriptive words. The small details and adjectives really make reading this so enjoyable. For the story, I love the amiability and the steady relationships/interactions. It feels transparent (in the good way) and genuine because of the depth and complexity. (I was really surprise that the "bad guy" doesn't feel like a bad guy. If I were in Daniel's shoe, I wouldn't even mind it if John becomes evil, through a series of "nice" deceptions. I'm looking forward to the next chapter!
zefrog3@Yahoo.com
7/25/17, 9:21 AM
love it, would love to see more of these types of stories.
Anonymous
7/25/17, 8:47 AM
loving this!!!
Anonymous
7/25/17, 8:12 AM
I love your work! I would def love to read more sci-fi/parasite from you. Though I hope you write more about what the parasite does to the men like in the lost cave series instead of creating new characters to infect. Can't wait!
7/25/17, 6:10 AM
I'm still enjoying this a ton. Thanks for writing Webb! Hot as always.
Anonymous
7/25/17, 6:02 AM
Love me a mindless,horny lawyer More please
Anonymous
7/25/17, 5:51 AM
I'm onboard. I always liked your stuff on the old evolution forum. The style and pace of this are nice. I'm looking forward to some reality warping, hopefully.
Anonymous
7/25/17, 5:01 AM
As much as I want to see this continue, I understand it could be straining. Perhaps I can continue the story (or theme) in a "fan fiction" of this one.
Andrew
7/25/17, 5:01 AM
Yup already making sure to double check next time!
Anonymous
7/25/17, 4:27 AM
Shame. Last chapter was stellar. Nice work
Anonymous
7/25/17, 4:14 AM
Story is great. Good substance. Form sucked -- spell and grammar check. Writing is easy. It's the editing that takes a lot of time. Spend the time. Your readers will appreciate the story more.