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Anonymous
1/14/20, 1:01 AM
I've read many similar stories: meteor/spaceship discovered, go inside meteor/spaceship, indoctrinated, bring in friends, bring alien rocks outside, start next phase... and what weird is all of these writing quality (3 or 4 of these stories that I've read) is subpar... is it by the same author? Or there is a template that people can just alter a few words? Sorry for being harsh. But pls continue writing and improve yea.
Anonymous
1/13/20, 11:42 PM
FUCK. YES.
David S
1/13/20, 11:41 PM
I love alien abduction stories! I hope you write Phase 2! And thank you for contributing your story, I live for this stuff...
1/13/20, 10:15 PM
Loved it. Gave me a Hellraiser vibe in the beginning. A great "Be careful what you wish for" story.
Anonymous
1/13/20, 8:41 PM
The comment above made me laugh. It's totally correct. Slooooow it down. The sexy parts are in the details. Folks (mostly) reading these stories are reading to be turned on. What do Danny and Evan look like? Why are they wearing rubber and what does it have to do with aliens? Tentacles, so much could be done with those, as restraints or mouth mufflers or orifice probes. This feels like a first draft and needs more fleshing out. Good luck, alienkiller. Keep at it!!
Mike P
1/13/20, 8:33 PM
I agree with the 1st comment. Good story idea, although been done a lot. The reader seems to be rushed through the story. I felt out of breath after reading it because it was going so quickly. Take your time and savor the scene and take the pace from sprint to slow and steady marathon.
BankStreet
1/13/20, 7:45 PM
A favorite I return to again and again. Would really like to see another chapter.
screamingmoist
1/13/20, 7:05 PM
thanks! this one was pretty heavily inspired by the old Clark Ashton Smith story, "The Garden of [Adompha." ](http://www.eldritchdark.com/writings/short-stories/76/the-garden-of-adompha)
1/13/20, 6:45 PM
Nope, not the end. Just me writing when I feel inspiration. If you look at the time between previous chapters, you'll see there is a lot of time that can happen.
Anonymous
1/13/20, 4:59 PM
Incredibly writing! I read all of your work, and this is one of the best.
Anonymous
1/13/20, 3:53 PM
I must be a prude. Who gets off on feces?
Musicmantx8
1/13/20, 3:37 PM
Please keep writing this story! already turned on and intrigued
Boston Satyr
1/13/20, 3:19 PM
i want see what happens when Tim encounters other hikers. or muscular park ranger w/ a moustache and spit n' polish uniform. will he succumb too, or is he in on the magic of the stream? does the steam create only otters? what about bears & wolves?
Anonymous
1/13/20, 3:05 PM
Mr Twan Andersen sir we need these stories! This was the hottest one on here in a while. . . Daddy's, musk, and a good boy submitting... it was perfect! You have an obligation ! ! ! Hahaha I'm only teasing, but frig. . . These are so hot. Can't wait for the next one.
Anonymous
1/13/20, 2:24 PM
was your house on fire while you were writing this? were you in a hurry to get out before the place burned down? it seems so, you rushed the story, you didn't let the story tell itself. slow down and allow the story to develop and mature. that being said, good premise.
kurbydog
1/13/20, 1:19 PM
great read, love to be there with Butch and Aaron! give Butch my hole to fuck.
joaopomilio@hotmail.com
1/13/20, 12:36 PM
I wish to see how the ring would work in a crowd like a cowboy convention, the nicer as big gay cowboys and the nasty and homophobic ons as bottom cowbois
1/13/20, 10:28 AM
Great story!
Anonymous
1/13/20, 10:17 AM
loved every word of it
Anonymous
1/13/20, 7:43 AM
more please
Anonymous
1/13/20, 6:34 AM
very sexy take on the various techniques series. loved it and hope there lots more cumming :)
LongtimeFan
1/13/20, 5:31 AM
Incredible! Your writing is so poetic and evocative--I could see the whole story in my mind's eye. But it's also terrifying; your descriptions of a sentient plant race slowly absorbing the world...brrr. Brilliant stuff!
1/13/20, 4:58 AM
Sure, just let me know where you posted it.
ScottishPig
1/13/20, 3:46 AM
Fun idea! Reminded me of mastershit88's stories, especially The 12 - which I'm sure you're familiar with!
Boston Satyr
1/13/20, 3:35 AM
more, please!! eager to see where this goes.
1/13/20, 12:42 AM
I was constrained somewhat in the writing of this (I'm sure eagle-eyed readers will quickly figure out what I mean) but nevertheless, it would be good to understand more specifically how I could make this story better! Thanks for reading!
1/13/20, 12:36 AM
I think the way Jeremiah and Hunter's personalities came across is done well! I think the fact that people are having strong reactions to those characters is testament to the author's writing. Looking forward to a second chapter! It does feel like Jeremiah will be getting comeuppance at some point but who knows? :)
Anonymous
1/12/20, 10:48 PM
A great concept, but I must admit it felt like the execution faltered somewhat. As bizarre as it is say this about a written piece of work, but I think this would’ve benefitted from the principle of “show me, don’t tell me”. It feels like we’re hearing about Yiannis’ journey without ever really experiencing it, which somewhat devalues the journey
Aquarius
1/12/20, 9:00 PM
This story is sooo good!! I can’t wait to see more of it!
1/12/20, 8:51 PM
Hmm, well I think the main character does have issues because of the way he thinks. Maybe I need to make that more clear.