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1/15/20, 3:37 PM
Hot stories! Wish there could be more
1/15/20, 3:11 PM
The most fun part bout this yarn was the punchline...hilarious! I also enjoyed the slow build effect
1/15/20, 2:52 PM
A vastly superior continuation, and loads of fun!
1/15/20, 2:40 PM
Usually I love your stories, Hypnothrill, and this one has several interesting approaches melded together; however, the languaging seems a little forced to me. Granted , I'm not even remotely British, and those who are may have a different perspective (and thus, I differ to them), but I do at least respect the idea of it.
Anonymous
1/15/20, 2:27 PM
I love it!! please continue
David S
1/15/20, 2:26 PM
@Hypnothrill Hey now, this was his first story here -- and you are one of the best authors on this site -- could you give this author some constructive feedback on how to develop his writing talent? @alienkiller is coming up with some great ideas with this plot, he just needs to learn how to develop them into a fully-developed story. (Also, alienkiller, I'm using "he/his" for brevity here. You could be any gender in real life, and gender definitely doesn't matter to me.) Maybe we should have a new forum on here, "How to develop your ideas into a great story."
1/15/20, 1:49 PM
One of the principles of storytellilng: In general, do NOT tell the reader what is going to happen; SHOW the reader what happens. As Hypnothrill states, this is laid out like a list of instructions or prescriptions. It would be a much better chapter if the author focused on some individual who went through the process and gradually discovers what it is about and how he feels about it. (Even better if the guy is straight - the author doesn't seems to acknowledge that there are straight people around who might not be so willing to have anal intercourse as part of their scuba diving instruction.) The seeds of a really good story is here. But in addition to water it needs a horticulturist.
1/15/20, 1:42 PM
Yes, there have been stories like this, but I always find them interesting. :) May I guess that the author's first language is not English? I suggest the author hand these chapters over to another who will polish up and "add yeast" to the story so that it'll really be fabulous.
1/15/20, 12:32 PM
This story is full of good erotic ideas, but the way they're told just sucks the life right out of them. It feels like I'm reading a set of instructions for how to assemble a bookshelf.
SHITTY
1/15/20, 12:09 PM
I would like to eat stinking shit from THOSE GUARDS and ENRIQUE
MASTERs
1/15/20, 12:08 PM
Fucking hot, cummed twice over your story!
ForgottenCradle
1/15/20, 8:59 AM
as a big fan of real-life 'Jerry' I totally support this pairing i really love the not-so-subtle nods at their real life counterparts. i hope you continue with this series
Anonymous
1/15/20, 8:09 AM
I really liked this story. Of course it was really sexy, a lot of the kinks were great. Fem Bears, public sex, release of inhibitions are all great imo. The writing was good and flowed well. But it was also sweet and went in a nice direction. A lot of bear tf stories are about humiliation and degradation and end up with the TF'ed in an essentially miserable existence. Which gets old pretty quickly. You took it somewhere nice. Where burdens were lifted, happiness was found, hot sex happened, and he was still bear-ish. Didn't feel gross after masturbating to it. Thank you.
1/15/20, 7:46 AM
Well-balanced; very succinctly paced.
Mindwinder
1/15/20, 7:33 AM
So, does the Island take place after all the other times Jese's been hypnotized, or is it its own thing? Love your writing btw--and I'm not usually a fan of first person so I hope that says something haha
Anonymous
1/15/20, 6:57 AM
I love that this is both comedic and hot at the same time. Nice change of pace from the sexual dramas that I think are more standard for the genre. Would love to see this continued!
Anonymous
1/15/20, 4:06 AM
Every Hypnothrill story has the same effect on me. thanks for this, quite enjoyed it.
Anonymous
1/15/20, 3:31 AM
Good follow-up. Now, what happened that made them 'subjects of the Crown?'
LongtimeFan
1/15/20, 12:24 AM
Ha ha, what a fun little tale. Love the descriptions of a hypnotized world--mind control so deep that everyone's perfectly happy with it. No one writes that like you, Hypnothrill!
tomozco
1/14/20, 11:38 PM
It's always a delight to read Hypnothrill's stories! I like this long-awaited continuation, please carry on and through with the next chapters! I echo TrevorTist's comment too...I hope you can write more of those stories, especially "New In Town" a favourite of mine!
stroppy Author
1/14/20, 11:33 PM
Fun series and a wonderful set up for the processing and you even caught the fukin English..SNP!! sorry.. had to.
Anonymous
1/14/20, 10:50 PM
Omg more of Jamie and Ian please
Anonymous
1/14/20, 9:53 PM
wonderful thank
Mr. Sandman
1/14/20, 8:00 PM
Now that is . . . inspiring. Do go on.
1/14/20, 7:39 PM
If only there was some kind of tag system, where by you could identify stories containing topics you don't like, so you don't need to read stories containing topics you don't like...
Anonymous
1/14/20, 6:56 PM
it was worth every cent my friend , thank you so much again, you are the best :-)
joaopomilio@hotmail.com
1/14/20, 6:52 PM
I like how this is going, also will you finish the FaceUp, CockUp series?
1/14/20, 6:44 PM
I love this story series. It reminds me of some of my other favorites by you - "New in Town" and "Empire Days" (and to some extent "Naptime"). I hope you'll write more chapters to this (and those) stories!
Anonymous
1/14/20, 4:21 PM
I want to thank you for not writing a story where the boys got away. That would have been too 'feel good'. This was the right ending.
Anonymous
1/14/20, 3:35 PM
Good story, great concept. Love alien stories, we need more of these on this site. Can't wait for phase 2