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2/2/26, 7:25 PM
Thank you! It was so long ago that I wrote it, I'm amazed when people find it again.
2/2/26, 6:50 PM
This is an amazing story. Great details and nice lead up.
Anonymous
2/2/26, 6:17 PM
This was so hot and funny
2/2/26, 5:26 PM
Hope more chapters are in the works
2/2/26, 3:03 PM
I love the man COLT... he is so powerfully "working" for me. I love his ability to lure Charlie into his place. THANK YOU for all the references to the smells... it is so captivating to me. I LOVE IT
2/2/26, 1:12 PM
Looking forward to men-only night at the gym!

2/2/26, 2:44 PM
@[ZacTheFac](/user/show/948203) There will be more than muscle on display 💪🏻😈
Anon
2/1/26, 4:17 AM
ya gotta direct the AI better, dude. i work with it a lot and i can tell it's starting to fall apart. some directions that help: don't use sentence fragments, don't use similes (AI is notoriously bad at them), focus on descriptions, don't use the word 'deliberate' (this one i've noticed pops up a lot in AI work for some reason, especially nsfw stuff). also be sure you're describing exactly what you want to happen in a story when you command the AI: "write 500 words about Liam and Noah working out at the gym. Noah mentions his cousin will be joining them at a party later that week and Liam is nervous. Noah convinces him by guilt tripping and hazing him, reminding him to 'be cool' and 'not be weird about it'." AI will follow a blueprint fairly accurately and expand on stuff you feel you can't (though human writing is superior). anyway your idea is still really solid. its taking a long time to get to the romance, if that's the intended outcome, and a long time to step forward in the sexy department. Feels like sometimes you repeat chapters just with a different flavor. i really liked the wind up in the earlier chapters and these middle ones have kind of stagnated and circled around each other a lot. Might be the AI's fault, at least partially.

2/1/26, 5:05 PM
@Anon at that point, why not just actually write the damn thing yourself?

twistup
2/2/26, 2:34 PM
@[Jules the Werewolf](/user/show/913350) it's the diff between writing 200 words of commands versus 3000 words of actual writing. Human writing is better, AI is just easier and faster for some people.
1/20/26, 12:19 AM
That explains some of what happened last chapter. Other then Henry's sudden poor performance, the disguised Hank was a great play. And that 'key into the hole' part was amazing. With Henry getting owned - again. Seriously, Nick and Henry keep jumping back and forth over the fence. Not saying this negatively. But these two boys have such a knack for getting completely morphed into eager slaves while also having a drive for personal independence and responsibility. Maybe Hank can finally give them that 'choice'? Also I can't help but feel that Violet seems to becoming a new version of Tri-Hard. His ego and smug superiority are having too great an influence. Even if he says he is doing what he does for his master; its clearly self-centered on his goals. Pride before the fall and all. This will likely really throw a wrench in Hank's plans. I second what was said earlier that this has quite a few Inception vides. And in layers. Yet is Nick in the mindscape or is he physically trying to find Violets actual body? And how is Henry having so many copies of himself that have powers when his original is gone?

1/20/26, 2:52 AM
@[Marik29](/user/show/10021139) So, just to clarify, the mental echo of Henry in Joe's head doesn't _actually_ have any powers (something that might be relevant soon,...), but he IS a copy of Henry's mind from before he lost his powers. Joe can mimic Henry's powers (same as the drones/signal), but it takes having this version of Henry in his head like a blueprint to show him how. That's why 'Henry' needed to lean on Joe to defend him (and vice versa). As for Cameron,... yes, he might be getting a little full of himself again. He's supposed to be 'sleeping' so he can focus the greater part of his mental abilities on keeping **H-3** from taking over,... but his ego is slipping back in now he has space in Henry's head to spread his own thoughts into. Oh, and Nick _is_ in the mindscape/network,... somewhere. Think of him as the heroes' outlet right now, while Joe is the wiring connecting them. His parts are all in the next chapter. I hope that clears some things up, without too any spoilers. Thank you for reading! :3

2/2/26, 2:58 AM
@[Blazargus](/user/show/10012784) It does. Thank you. Though I am curious how many more chapters are you imagining for this series? You are one shy from matching the first saga, and this clearly has a bit longer to go.

2/2/26, 11:52 AM
@[Marik29](/user/show/10021139) I would answer, but I'm always wrong about these things XD "Not too many more" is my closest estimate,...
2/2/26, 3:36 AM
I'm being a Good Boy for HIM right now. This story is incredibly hot.

2/2/26, 10:59 AM
@[Pwrliftermscl](/user/show/941605) You good boys get *worse* 😈
2/2/26, 7:02 AM
At this point, I'd rather let Liam got someone else and Noah got punish :P Dylan could work.