i normally love stories which center around a submissive's loss of control. Strangely enough even though i think this whole custom of creating non-consenting drones who remain aware of their unwanted and immoral treatment, the concept as a fantasy is still surprisingly somewhat arousing. While on the surface the loss of control is quite hot, it is interesting that for me the more immoral a story's concept, the less i enjoy the story and the less likely i am to come back to it. In my mind in a good BDSM relationship, both Dom and submissive, and even in the more extreme case of Master and slave(s), every participant must get something positive out of the relationship. In this case i see nothing positive for the drones at all for the rest of their lives. For me the sadness of this situation overrides my libido.

I have to ask. In this world what is the true benefit of being a sub? Are they permanently subs or will they work their way up to being a norm again. I fail to see why anyone would choose to be a sub and be used by others without a massive payout at some point. What is the advantage for companies to hire subs? I understand they are a source of stress relief for staff/execs at Silver level but what happens at Gold level? There has to be some benefit for the sub for this to work. I have a vague understanding of Dom/Sub interactions but the legal and economic issues of this world are not clear. I understand some people are drawn to being Doms and Subs here on Earth but in this world/company it is a business opportunity so I assume there is some corporate advancement from being a sub? This world does not make sense to me. Why would Steve bear so much abuse? Is it just to help Mark rise through the ranks? What does Steve ultimately get in this situation? I read all 17 parts and I'm still confused. It was an enthralling well written story but I still have questions.

God I wish I was a good boy! Love this story.

Such a great story! This is building up to an insanely hot series. So many questions still remain... will he make more cursed wishes? Will someone else's cursed wishes impact him unexpectedly? How will Leo become more involved? Can't wait to find out those answers!

Such a great series. Really enjoyed this from start to finish. I think you did a great job of keeping things fresh and exciting as it went along, and I enjoyed how you brought it together in the end. Super hot, so many sexy scenes that each part had me edging throughout.

This was a hot series to follow. I'd love to learn more about how things go once he "graduates" from the supplements, but I think the ending works well. Nothing overstayed its welcome.

I've meant to post this for a while so here we go. I can't help but shake the feeling that this chapter and somewhat in the previous feels 'forced'. As if the chapters just don't sit right. Everything up to now has been polished smooth with a clear rhythm and progression that flowed. Not only were their some punctuation/grammatical errors that the editor should have corrected in this chapter. But what's happening to Jamie doesn't, and by extension this whole ordeal he is currently in, doesn't flow with the rest of the story. Above all, where and how is Jamie able to resist so hard? Why is he suddenly, now in this moment choosing to unleash his bottled anger? Jamie submitted to his Master. Fully. He symbiont is fully integrated with him. Therefore, Myriad should already have full awareness of Jamie's state of mind and physical condition. And can therefore correct at anytime. Which was proven when he went inside and took note of the mental dam in Jamie's psyche. Jamie shouldn't be able or have reason to be such a hard-ass to Dusk. Yet here he is fighting back tooth and nail over a collar? This doesn't add up. Granted, Jamie has been aware of the complicity and duality that Myriad operates under. He knows the corruption of the Association. He has several legitimate reasons to be angry and frustrated about not having control over his fate. And all this has been hinted at and brought up through the series. But the timing and execution of this here is suspect. Its too sudden and too unexplained. Regardless, I am still loving this series. I am eager for more. And maybe more context will be provided in the next chapter. This has been such an amazing read throughout. With that said, I might have called it. That this story would either progress in one of two directions. That either Jamie fully integrates with the network under Myriad and goes after the heroes. Or he gets caught and sent to the Tomb. So unless that white at the end here was Jamie's attack, it seems a prison break is coming.

If he gets restored he might enjoy being cake again one day.

What I fantastic second chapter, I already loved the first one. Is a third chapter in the works? I thought the ending was extremely teasing xD

I like it, but it feels like a big change from chapter 1, like it should have been another story? The first chapter was pretty much just hypnosis and now it's gone with what seem to be magical transformations? I just feel like these are good chapters but of two different stories now. I'm a bit sad if the commission led to that.