Recent Comments

3/27/24, 6:57 AM
Fun story. You've got a great ear for dialogue
3/27/24, 4:02 AM
Ooh this is a very interesting but also Hot story. I never thought a manuscript style story would be this so hot.

3/27/24, 4:08 AM
@[DJeiKier](/user/show/10021357) Thanks! I liked the idea of seeing what I could do without any visuals.
slavethruhypno@aol.com
2/10/24, 4:22 PM
I have had the intense pleasure of being a Man's butler a few times in my life. So hot to serve in more than sex. Can't wait for Chapter 2!

3/6/24, 4:56 AM
@slavethruhypno@aol.com That's sexy - You should write about it!

slavethruhypno@yahoo.com
3/16/24, 12:28 AM
@[JaAdms](/user/show/10011497) I am not a very good writer, Sir. But I know I was hard almost the entire time. The Master of the House required me to keep my dick and balls hanging out, covered only by a black, silk thong pouch, while I served as his subservient butler, Sir.

3/16/24, 1:00 AM
@slavethruhypno@yahoo.com I’m sure you write perfectly well and I would absolutely love to read your story. I’m not sure if this would persuade you to reconsider but here’s a website with AI tools that could help you tell your story: https://theresanaiforthat.com/s/erotic+story+generator/

slavethruhypno@yahoo.com
3/16/24, 4:01 AM
@[JaAdms](/user/show/10011497) Let me take a look and see how it works, Sir. Thank you, Sir.

3/16/24, 7:26 PM
@slavethruhypno@yahoo.com Did the master ever have you in formal attire or any gear? Maybe it would help you write if you got back into your uniform

slavethruhypno@yahoo.com
3/20/24, 11:19 PM
@[JaAdms](/user/show/10011497) Yes, Sir. Starched white shirt, black bow tie, black waist coat, black skin tight dress pants, black silk thong, black formal socks, black dress shoes, white gloves, and he added a posture collar to maintain my proper posture, Sir. I have started writing about the last time I was his butler, when he had a formal dinner for three friends. It is slow-going, but getting there, Sir.

3/22/24, 7:16 PM
@slavethruhypno@yahoo.com Glad to hear it. If you still have the uniform and posture collar I think you should wear it all while you write. Wouldn’t hurt to throw on a formal tailcoat as well during this frigid time of year. And you should also be writing about the first time you were his butler! First time you put on each item, how you were trained, etc…

slavethruhypno@yahoo.com
3/24/24, 4:13 PM
@[JaAdms](/user/show/10011497) I don't have the collar or clothing. He bought and owned them. He had a big clothing/gear fetish. He got off on "decorating" his boys. I will do my best to write about the times he "decorated" me as a butler, including the first time, Sir.

SuitHypnoFan
3/27/24, 2:19 AM
@slavethruhypno@yahoo.com your story sounds promising and I cannot wait to read
3/27/24, 2:02 AM
Second part please
Dec 25, 2021
3/26/24, 10:44 PM
What a beautiful, and hot, Christmas story!
Art
3/26/24, 10:26 PM
This story held so much promise but was never finished. It is always disappointing for that to happen. I don't know why you don't have confidence because you're obviously a talented writer. Maybe you need a dominant to MAKE you complete what you started!
3/20/24, 8:37 PM
I love this! This story is absolutely asking for a continuation! Please tell us you're going to add more chapters after the challenge...

3/26/24, 9:14 PM
@[Corin](/user/show/125990) I'm glad you like it :grin: the story was mostly an experiment, I wanted to play around with the theme of the challenge. It's quite different from the silly sneaker stuff I usually write about so I don't know if I'll end up adding more chapters.. maybe if I feel inspired sometime :grin:
3/26/24, 8:59 PM
Really enjoyed this a lot! Looking forward to the next instalment!
HypnoSlut
3/24/24, 5:14 AM
Damn its actually been a year. Whoops lmao. Well thats what happened. Been busy with other shit but will continue the series when I can. Hope everyone enjoys it. It was fun to write once I figured out what I wanted to do.

3/26/24, 8:06 PM
@HypnoSlut This is a great story. I hope you are able to continue soon!
3/26/24, 1:18 PM
This is SOOOOOO MUCH FUN! I cannot handle their addiction to the feeling they get under Andrew's control. So hot. love this story and your writing.
3/26/24, 5:10 AM
This has been fantastic.

3/26/24, 5:12 AM
@[GiveInToTheMusk](/user/show/909380) And it's not over 😏
Jonanator
3/26/24, 3:54 AM
Very interesting. Can't wait for more.

3/26/24, 4:20 AM
@Jonanator Thanks! I’m having more fun writing this so here’s hoping I can keep it going until it’s end!
Anonymous
3/26/24, 2:33 AM
Loving it! Can't wait to see where this goes!
anonymous
3/26/24, 12:25 AM
Extremely hot story from a major rising talent in this genre. You really get in the characters' heads with subtlety, like when Dunc is in the machine, and the slow progression overall was masterfully done. The control collars need their own separate "aware" series, though.
3/25/24, 11:11 PM
Great chapter! I really hope to see more of Bob and Jack together.
buho guy
3/25/24, 10:11 PM
This story is STUPIDLY hot. I hope you'll continue it but even if you don't, thank you so much for writing this! One of the best I've read on the site in a while😄
3/25/24, 9:47 PM
Its great
3/25/24, 6:44 PM
Thank you all so much for the support!! I can’t tell you how happy this makes me. The number of giggles I got when people said they could tell who this was 😂 Now I just gotta surprise you all with a completely different style for the next challenge! Working on the next chapter (His Son, Yusuf) and a commission for a dear friend. Hopefully have it out by the weekend!

Anonymous
3/25/24, 7:31 PM
@[EdIam](/user/show/17145) Congratulations for winning. But its very sad we'll never know how it ends.

3/25/24, 7:32 PM
@Anonymous Ooooo read to filth 😂😂😂

Anonymous
3/25/24, 8:11 PM
@[EdIam](/user/show/17145) Sorry, I didn't meant to be mean. Is just, no offense, but you never finish your long stories. I' like your work, but I've started to avoid your series because I don't want to keep getting frustrated with unfinished plots, it's like having coitus interruptus. Re-Educator, Sinfulfillment and all the other good stories are as dead as Uncle Ben and I no longer have any hope that we will ever see an ending for any of those. Althought to be fair, the chances of you finishing a story are higher as long as you stay away from chapter 7, I've noticed that's the death row to your stories. Beyond chaper 7, is EdIam's writing gas chamber. Again, no offense, I get many writers just don't handle long formats.

3/25/24, 8:29 PM
@Anonymous Zero offense at all! I get you completely. I sincerely to mean to finish all those stories you've listed (no lie). It's mostly about a combination of a few things currently: 1) real life is busy AF (I'm a nurse and gaymer, two things that take a lot of my attention). 2) I'm working on a commissioned story as well and want to make sure that the person paying me get's his money's worth. and 3) when I get a fresh, new idea, I want to get it pen to paper quickly. With this one, the contest was the perfect time to unleash a story I've wanted to write for a long time. For those that haven't noticed, this is a directly inspired by Wesley Brecken's sixth chapter of [Slob Control](https://www.gayspiralstories.com/series/show/10002471). The theme fitting my thoughts on expanding that genius story was just too good to resist. I have a couple friends with access to my One Drive...they can attest I've got the next few chapters of Sinfulfillment started (I def want to get that out because I'm proud of the ending) and I'm already more than halfway done with the next chapter of this story. I have no guarantees for Re-Educator/I Love Him, But... or Retirement, but still would love to get back on in and finish all those. In the end, I appreciate all of you and am keenly aware of my partially completed stories. I'm just happy that people still read my shit knowing my history. But, well, in the end, I post here because I enjoy writing as a hobby. There's not the biggest obligation for me to write or complete anything without, like, compensation haha. This isn't a job for me (other than my commission). But I do very much plan on finishing both Sinfulfillment and this story! TLDR: I'm bad at finishing stories but absolutely plan on doing what I can to finish this one.
3/25/24, 7:47 PM
Hot story - with a lot happening in a short length! You can always add detail and draw out any interaction between the antagonist and the other characters. That deepens the experience for the reader. In any case, you did your inspirations proud!
Mar 24, 2024
3/25/24, 7:42 PM
Dropping us right into a mystery! This will be fun. I couldn't quite picture the full situation the narrator and Ben are in (lying on the floor, wrists and ankles bound?) Seductive start! I can't wait to see what game the captor has in store, who this amusingly fiendish dude is, and what his plans are for our three rugby studs. 🏉💪
2/3/24, 3:05 AM
I really loved this story. It feels like a story I have always wanted. It feels like a story I might have written. I normally don’t give 5 stars to anything but this story got all high marks.

2/4/24, 12:39 AM
@[Drake Nightstorm](/user/show/650184) Thank you man!! I appreciate hearing that especially since it’s my first story I was a bit nervous!

Anonymous
2/4/24, 12:51 AM
@The Author (name hidden due to challenge) It’s spectacular.

3/25/24, 3:36 AM
@[Rarg](/user/show/710551) now it's all revealed. I hope you keep writing.

3/25/24, 5:59 PM
@[Drake Nightstorm](/user/show/650184) Haha yup the mask is gone! But I do plan on it for sure when the inspiration hits :) it was rather fun!
Ab3
3/25/24, 5:47 PM
Woww that is hot... Jerked on it but it finished abruptly.. need more n more details so that we can release easily.. lolzz
3/25/24, 4:41 PM
Congrats on winning!
3/21/24, 6:36 AM
So hot man! Love the detail and the gear swap! Would love to see him forced to worship his gear on him!

3/25/24, 3:18 PM
@[Leatherjaye](/user/show/1814961) Thank LJ! Glad you enjoyed it. We'll see where it goes from here.
3/24/24, 5:01 PM
This was beautifully conjured, you managed to make it bittersweet without making it tragic. However, it needed more 'meat' in the middle, you had a lot of short sentences. It does not mean the story is bad per se, it's really really good, but I feel this kind of story would have worked _even_ better as a longer novella.

3/25/24, 11:50 AM
@[Twan Andersen](/user/show/10018149) Thank you and it's true yes. This story is honestly the one that I would want to revisit the most, if I ever did that. I think giving the characters more breathing room to fully develop their relationships would be a pretty good idea. Also setting up some of the payoffs better. :heart:
floetenspieler
3/25/24, 10:30 AM
It’s so exciting to watch him succumbing to his Master Gino
3/25/24, 10:23 AM
Ok, so this was like one of the hottest stories on this site. I love how you write hypno scenes. And also, that ending is great. Perfect. I really like the direction you've taken it. This is definetly a story I'm gonna come back to time and time again