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4/21/24, 10:20 PM
Interesting.

4/22/24, 11:42 PM
@[Maximus](/user/show/789098) Thank you 🙂
4/22/24, 11:21 PM
Thanks again for sharing your story, your work is some of the best on this site. But, unfortunately, the last chapter for me personally lacked the WOW effect (cliffhanger) in the plot. Perhaps my expectations in this regard were too exaggerated, so I was looking forward to the epilogue. And it’s not for nothing that they say that readers’ expectations are his own problems).
4/22/24, 11:16 PM
Thanks for the story. One of the darkest, erotic and sad stories on the site. The ending is left open, which I like (since each reader can end the story the way they want) and + it gives a window for continuation. I really liked the character of Eddie, a tragic character and very well written, unlike Yusuf (whom you don’t sympathize with at all) and you want to die, like Joffrey in “Game of Thrones”. I liked the fact that you kept Eddie as a person with a good heart who wouldn't do things like Yusuf did, and that says a lot about the character as an individual that I have a lot of respect for. Personally for me this epilogue seemed to be the end of season 1) or arc. I hope someone or you will someday be inspired to continue this story. As a result, for now I can give this part of the story a 6.8 I slightly increased the rating because the character of Eddie was better shown, developed and evoked sympathy in an erotic story (which is rare) The epilogue lacked a Cliffhanger and if the city had been captured and changed, it is obvious that the authorities of the State and the country would have known this, because the population of the town cannot help but behave strangely and not arouse suspicion in the rest of the world, not to mention relatives (which entails a lot of questions) Although I know that in an erotic porn story you shouldn’t focus too much on this because the logic in such stories is, to put it mildly, lame 🤣. I'm also looking forward to the continuation of your last story)
4/22/24, 11:06 PM
The one thing that kind of annoys me in an otherwise fun superhero sex romp is the assumption that bottoms have small dicks and tops have big ones. I don't know if that's a kink (if so, fine; not mine, but ydy) or a very weird take on gay sex. I personally love a big, hard dick flopping around when a bottom is being pounded, to show and make clear how much they're loving it.
4/22/24, 10:39 PM
Congrats on completing a series, Edlam! While it sucks that the story has ended, but as a reader, it's always nice to get a full wrap up from the author so we get the full picture of your original storyline idea. Now you just have about 5 others that you'll hopefully get back on them someday. ;) I have to admit that the physical sex/race transformations are not my thing because I feel it takes away from who that person is as your original subject of obsession. But I accept and appreciate that this is definitely a theme that is enjoyed by many others, so no complaints from me on that storyline, I simply look past that and focus on the other interesting bits. In line with Edlam's usual theme of chaotic incestual debauchery brought on by some unwanted powerful intruder, I quite enjoy how you've wrapped up this series...just where we'd like them all to be, all over one another constantly without a care in the world. I also quite like the idea that you instilled in this epilogue, where the actual normal guy is left all alone being seen as a pervert in this warped "new normal" established by the antagonist. A bit post-apocalyptic type of dimension in some ways. Right/wrong become all a matter of perspective. That's a very interesting takeaway from this. With Yusuf's influence now so extensive across the whole town (is this the largest scale of corruption you've achieved so far?), the reality has simply been fully rewritten and there's no possibility to see any other way anymore. Yet for all of us (and people beyond that town) looking in, all of them are also just equally crazy and lost in another world.
4/22/24, 9:09 PM
I wasn't sure that you really needed to expand on the first story. It seemed pretty straightforward, the clones simply drug and reprogram their owners to take over for them for some reason. Fun concept and interesting twist, but could easily have been a one and done. However with this story, the clone has some kind of pheromone power, the mental subjugation sequence is really interesting and hot. You successfully sold the concept of someone enjoying being driven into an animalistic state of submission. Now I'm also questioning if the other clone was actually drugging food or if the clones exude some kind of drug from their biology that affects their template human. That'll be interesting to find out.
4/22/24, 4:47 PM
Thank you for your wonderful story. Race transformation and (fake) incest are some of my favorite erotic themes. I have a fantasy in which I, an East Asian man in my 40s, is forced to become a "genetic son" by a dominant elderly man of another race -- a white redneck old man, a masculine Arab old man, or an old Indian farmer -- become his son and incest lover-slave at the same time. Sometimes I imagine being their young, stupid son by age regression, sometimes I imagine being their old, grieving slave by age progression. I also think that one day I want to write a story or commission it on this subject. So reading this novel from you has been a very happy and frightening experience for me at the same time. As I have empathized with Eddie over the past few weeks, I have felt terrible at the end of the story and am thrilled at the same time! It's like the weird kind of catharsis you feel when you watch a horror movie with a bad ending. It was an experience where it felt like my own desires were being "castrated". And yet, strangely, my desires seemed to be being fulfilled little by little... If I had written a novel based on your material, Eddie would have become a complete fool and a blissful low-ranking member of the Wasfis. Or he would have lived a miserable existence forever, screaming in his mind while retaining his memory and ego, but being sex slaves to the Wasfis, obsessed with libido and obedience. Either way, it couldn't have been compared to Eddie's miserable yet happy fate of yours, which is very original and fascinating. Once again, thank you for your original and charmingly twisted story. It was a wonderful and exciting experience!
4/22/24, 4:05 PM
And with that, EdIam actually finishes another series! Thank you so much, again, for your support for this story in the contest. It truly does mean a lot to me that so many of you read and enjoy my fucked up writing. I've even told my friends and my partner, one of the things I'm proudest of in my life is that I'm literally helping people cum all around the world with my work. A special thanks, again, to Wesley Bracken, whose sixth chapter of Slob Control was absolutely the inspiration I needed to realize this story, which started out as a thought of how hot it would be if the 'pervert' next door was actually the normal guy simply spying on the actual perverts. Switching up those dynamics was the seed, Wesley Bracken's story was the fertilizer, and the contest was the pot to place it all in. Feel free to message or e-mail me any support, ideas, or questions. I'll be moving back to my commission for a little while and then picking up where I left off in Sinfulfillment in the coming months!
Anonymous
4/22/24, 3:46 PM
So meta
4/22/24, 2:32 PM
i cannot begin to tell you how much I enjoyed this story. THANK YOU so much for writing it. It was sexy, sensual, sensitive, and so very well-written. THANK YOU.
4/22/24, 2:25 PM
top notch, great story!
Anonymous
4/22/24, 11:58 AM
That was so HOT and wholesome too. Hope to read more!!
4/22/24, 11:23 AM
Excellent story! Super-hot!!!!
4/22/24, 10:29 AM
Great story. I love this!
Anonymous
4/22/24, 9:46 AM
Waiting for the next episode! Amazing!
Anonymous
4/22/24, 7:05 AM
So good Charlie, very funny and sexy ngl I almost couldn't finish cause I was giggling, keyword almost. Your writing is so amazing I know you've been thinking about branching out from porn and honestly I think you should I've never read something so captivating.
4/22/24, 6:17 AM
Oh this was a great start.
Apr 20, 2024
4/22/24, 2:50 AM
Hot! Would love to see more like this
4/22/24, 2:01 AM
This is such a lovely, little fairytale. I hope there was a lesson learned, apart from wearing collars more often.
4/22/24, 1:42 AM
Speaking of which. Are you gonna continue Luke's big butt changes

4/22/24, 1:47 AM
@[Fire302](/user/show/10001586) Yeah I am, in fact I'm putting my energy towards finishing that next.
4/21/24, 11:02 PM
This was a very sweet story. I loved the romance and the roleplay of JPS. Creative and hot, and romantic. Well done!
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4/21/24, 10:08 PM
I love it and would give into him.
4/21/24, 9:47 PM
If I don't have anything positive to say, then I just keep my thoughts to myself.

Anonymous
4/21/24, 9:54 PM
@[Kurt Cybulski](/user/show/166054) I don't get what you mean by that
4/21/24, 9:46 PM
Superior writing and story. Encore!
4/21/24, 9:23 PM
I like how you break the 4th wall 🤣🤣🤣
4/21/24, 9:21 PM
As ever super hot Charlie
4/21/24, 9:17 PM
Intriguing!
4/21/24, 9:01 PM
Awesome Thank you Jack!
4/21/24, 8:48 PM
Great improvements on this one. It flows a lot better than the last iteration did!