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Boston Satyr
1/13/20, 3:35 AM
more, please!! eager to see where this goes.
1/13/20, 12:42 AM
I was constrained somewhat in the writing of this (I'm sure eagle-eyed readers will quickly figure out what I mean) but nevertheless, it would be good to understand more specifically how I could make this story better! Thanks for reading!
1/13/20, 12:36 AM
I think the way Jeremiah and Hunter's personalities came across is done well! I think the fact that people are having strong reactions to those characters is testament to the author's writing. Looking forward to a second chapter! It does feel like Jeremiah will be getting comeuppance at some point but who knows? :)
Anonymous
1/12/20, 10:48 PM
A great concept, but I must admit it felt like the execution faltered somewhat. As bizarre as it is say this about a written piece of work, but I think this would’ve benefitted from the principle of “show me, don’t tell me”. It feels like we’re hearing about Yiannis’ journey without ever really experiencing it, which somewhat devalues the journey
Aquarius
1/12/20, 9:00 PM
This story is sooo good!! I can’t wait to see more of it!
1/12/20, 8:51 PM
Hmm, well I think the main character does have issues because of the way he thinks. Maybe I need to make that more clear.
Anonymous
1/12/20, 8:16 PM
I agree with Shadow’s comment, Mr. Kent should propose to his master. Preferably when they’re in the airport getting ready to escape to Europe together.
Plague
1/12/20, 7:11 PM
Great to see your writing again and this latest chapter was great as well.
1/12/20, 5:57 PM
love this!
1/12/20, 5:38 PM
Lotsa fun!
Anonymous
1/12/20, 4:43 PM
This is so unique and creative, I can't wait for more!
Egg
1/12/20, 2:39 PM
i love this story but could you make him chip the dad??
Anonymous
1/12/20, 2:10 PM
more please soon this is such a great story
Anon
1/12/20, 1:16 PM
I really enjoyed this series! I think we both have a dad fetish haha <3 Would be nice if we got to see daddy slave worshipping his master’s feet
Jan 11, 2020
Anonymous
1/12/20, 11:03 AM
I like the switch between the Dr's POV and the subject's POV. Though I agree with Hypnothrill that it would be nice to get back to the subject's point of view as the transformation continues through to completion. I hope that will happen in further installments. It is great to read the different versions of what is happening, to underscore the "perception vs reality discrepancy" phenomenon that is so arousing (at least to me) in transformation stories. It is also fun to read that the Dr. is developing some personal interest in this subject. Bottom line, I can totally relate to this subject and this story. I totally want to be in it, and The subject and I have some similarities, so for me, its a great story. I hope there is more to come. Keep up the great work.
Gerbil-Bee
1/12/20, 10:48 AM
experiencing slight writer's block and schedule/life issues, but i promise to finish the next chapter as soon as I can.
ForgottenCradle
1/12/20, 9:48 AM
I am SO glad to see you're back. and it seems Aaron got his uncle totally under his control now,this is awesome
Anonymous
1/12/20, 7:39 AM
I watch for new chapters of this story every day. Thanks for sharing your talents and tales!
Anonymous
1/12/20, 5:01 AM
Loved it!! Love all your stories!!
Anonymous
1/12/20, 4:59 AM
I agree. I loved this whole series.
Anonymous
1/12/20, 4:40 AM
thank you! awesome story! welcome back and happy new year
LongtimeFan
1/12/20, 4:40 AM
What a sweet little story. :) And it has transformation/brain-drain, too, which are some of my favorites! I wish I could find an enchanted stream like that...
Anonymous
1/12/20, 4:32 AM
It's here, it's here, another chapter! Very excited this story is continuing.
1/12/20, 4:12 AM
Derek, I suppose Jared's motives could be viewed as purely malevolent and selfish, but the friendship between the guys felt genuine to me, and the narrator's acceptance of what happened to him didn't feel forced.
1/12/20, 2:30 AM
Very cute!
1/12/20, 2:20 AM
Thia is adorable!
1/12/20, 1:30 AM
Huh, I've never thought of "The Birthday Gift" with that framing before. Thanks for giving me a new way of thinking about one of my favorites Cris!
BankStreet
1/12/20, 12:42 AM
> This from Wikipedia: "As a psychopathological term, the first to publish on neurasthenia was Michigan alienist E. H. Van Deusen of the Kalamazoo asylum in 1869, followed a few months later by New York neurologist George Beard, also in 1869, to denote a condition with symptoms of fatigue, anxiety, headache, heart palpitations, high blood pressure, neuralgia, and depressed mood. Van Deusen associated the condition with farm wives made sick by isolation and a lack of engaging activity, while Beard connected the condition to busy society women and overworked businessmen. Neurasthenia is currently a diagnosis in the World Health Organization's International Classification of Diseases (and the Chinese Society of Psychiatry's Chinese Classification of Mental Disorders). However, it is no longer included as a diagnosis in the American Psychiatric Association's Diagnostic and Statistical Manual of Mental Disorders. Americans were said to be particularly prone to neurasthenia, which resulted in the nickname "Americanitis, (popularized by William James). Another, rarely used, term for neurasthenia is nervosism."
1/12/20, 12:36 AM
nycboot, the best examples of that kind of story that come to mind are Derek Williams' [The Birthday Gift](https://www.gayspiralstories.com/newStory/show/1172) and RdyRoger's [Huge Changes](https://metabods.com/stories/huge-changes-book-one).
1/12/20, 12:21 AM
It was nicely handled and quite simply told. Kudos.