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AeonFlux
11/15/16, 5:31 PM
What a HOT Story.......more please
Master C's slave
11/15/16, 5:31 PM
or so i thought - mmmmm means part 2 is coming
Anonymous
11/15/16, 5:00 PM
Am I the only one who doesn't get it?
Anonymous
11/15/16, 4:48 PM
Did you even bother to read your finished product? The grammar is terrible, practically unreadable. Had the story been intriguing I guess the grammar would be excusable. But the story sucked as well. Have a friend proofread your stories. It will spare you the insult.
Anonymous
11/15/16, 4:32 PM
Very nice
Ryder
11/15/16, 3:33 PM
You've got a great set up here!! There are a many things you can do with this! I particularly liked the cumming with his feet on their faces. Yoy could possibly use that mechanic as a means for instilling fetishes into the jocks. Any fetish really. It'd be cool to see them hopelessly addicted to (insert fetish here) despite knowing they shouldn't be ^__^ Over all, amazing opening story!! Keep it up!
11/15/16, 2:42 PM
I'm speechless, such an amazing chapter with many new questions and hot as hell descriptions. I like the "two men in one cocoon" concept, it's a new element of all your stories, and in some way, I could view it as a symbol of their love, event John and Mike were no more. Thanks for you contribution!
11/15/16, 2:38 PM
I'm always willing to read and respond to emails. But yes .... the ending, I have in mind, may not be considered a "positive" ending. Everyone will be reading it soon. Because it will be released with an epilogue, it will take a little longer to write. I hope to have it up this weekend. And then this story will be concluded.
cutlerfan
11/15/16, 1:30 PM
I see it is going somewhere now. The story is a striking combination of rough manipulation and subtle bio-physical control. I have an idea how it may end at least in part. P.S.- I'm still thinking about your earlier comment about what a positive ending would be. Sorry, trying to figure it out for myself as well as you since I write a little fiction myself. . If you prefer I could email you my response when I am finished.
11/15/16, 12:46 PM
A really interesting and hot start, plz keep going!